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*furiously scrapping lines* Dammit, would you stop? I got no story left to tell, soon.

Note to self - remove this line, someone guessed it.

🙏 He's fun, isn't he? I love writing his scenes. Oh, he does, but only to one particular person. 😉 The phone call....ah....that's next up. I'll consider upping that maybe next week...🙏 🙏 Though not based on those two (considering they both have gorgeous hair), Doc is a scene-stealer, as I think of him. Such characters are fun to write because they get to say things we don't dare say out loud. He does it with a bullhorn. 😂 😈 Wow, you all love Doc! I did not expect that! In this day and age, inappropriate people are silenced quick. I tend to befriend exactly those people. Doc is based on a real life colleague of mine, who really does say the most inappropriate stuff. But he is a she in my case. It's always fun to see her open her trap, listen to what comes flying out and then watch jaws drop and stuttering replies happen, if any come at all. It's pure entertainment, lol! And yes, she is a doctor (Psych). Patients all love her, because she's real, has no patience....well, you read the line above. 😉 You've caught on to the reason for his being in the story - the connection to family, to bring Kai's family in, especially his sister. She's somewhat inappropriate in her own way. Doc will be back. And it's quite possible he'll be even more inappropriate. Quite possible.

This is a big chapter. The reason for it is that I didn't want to a) break it up and b) want the chapters to alternate between Kai and Adam constantly. I don't want two chapters with the same viewpoint in a row. So at times, you'll get these bigger ones. 😊 I did a quick edit just now, added a line to explain something.

CHAPTER 8 - Kai “Yo! Heads up, bro,” Kellan grinned as he came in with the eldest of my nephews. The boy immediately launched himself onto my bed. “Cody!” I smiled, spreading my arms; he dove right in, knocking me back. I winced a bit; sometimes, sudden movement still lanced a shot of pain down my back. “Owww! Wow, now that’s a hug!” It was also about a week after the minor surgery. “Son! Not so rough with your uncle. He’s feeble, still.” I sent my brother a glare. Feeble?

The end. It was changed. There used to be a different ending to the story, feeling far more rushed than this version. It didn't feel like an end, back then.

I love this comment @Bft. It's because you're reading it that I went back and just read parts of it. Some of it makes me cringe, but the overall premise is fine/good.

Oh, I wanna rewrite the second half of this, so much. "You," he interrupted, "are not going anywhere! You belong here, with me. I’ll lock the elevator if I have to." My heart began to pound. Oh God, if only he’d say it; I’d never dream of going anywhere, ever again. "What if there’s a fire?" He glared. Okay, so maybe not the right time to be cheeky.. This bit is probably the best of the whole thing. LOL. I especially like the 'what if there's a fire' response. That's cute. 😂 Overall, not a bad try. I still like the premise of this story.

Re-read it again, 6 years on. I'd rewrite some of it, but Jason is pretty good here. He's cute, in a young adult way. I wouldn't change much for him, other than his thoughts, bring those more in line with himself. Olivia could use a few different lines, but she's good, here. Serves the story.

HA! Forgot this one too. It's nice. I like it.

Pretty good. I'd change a few lines but overall, this works for the story.

Yikes, some of this needs a rewrite. 😂

Kinda sweet, it has more potential. As I re-read this, it's there.

This has some errors but, m-yeah, still good.

It just might. I can't remember this one either. 🤣

I just re-read this after a few years - it's a cute chapter! Kinda funny, I can read this and not remember ever having written this. That's nice!

That's hilarious, lolol! 🤣😂🤣

Ugh, I hate losing pets. The one before Silver was Jackie. She was 19 years and 9 months old, almost 20. Don't ever take me to a vet to have this done; you can mop the floor with me. It's not a good idea. They stand there feeling awkward while I'm spilling my guts out. Ah, our feline and canine friends. Can't do without them. 🥰

Dont they? I have a cat, a Maine Coon called Silver (she's featured in the story and on the cover of Confounded III), and I talk to her all the friggin' time. She responds and always wants to be in the same room. If I'm home and the door is closed, she'll break down the bloody place.

I know, I know! Oh....wait...I'm the writer.

Ooh, the song from that movie did play during the writing of that scene. Then again, so did "Tonight (is what it means to be young)" By Fire Inc. So there....perhaps you can stitch the mood of the scene together. I dare you. 🤣

You think Kai would let that happen?

It is written but I'm keeping it from the editor, still shaving on it. It's a huge fight where they deck each other I'm not gonna teeeeelll you, I'm not gonna teeeeell you.

I'm sorry, a bad paragraph snuck in that I had changed since. It was in the seed file, not in the edit file, so no fault of the editor but solely mine. Hence the edits (if you were already reading and receiving notifications).

CHAPTER 7 - Adam It was in the first week of June that I received another letter from Kai. It’d been some ten days since I sent off my response. The noisy work was now mostly finished - at least the buzzsaws were gone - though there was the occasional hammering in the distance, a dull thump…thump, where they were replacing fence poles with new ones, and hammering on nails, where they were putting up the planks to those poles. This was not overly disruptive from where I was sitting in my stu