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Thank you Nephylim! Hopefully that's my love of the underwater world showing thru :-) ... Don't ever let me show you my photos of corals, you'll never get away! haze is taking a roll in calming Blake down huh? More of that next chapter too!
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Yay ... now its outta the queue Chapter 9 It wasn't even posted before youre talkin about 10!
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Chapter 9: Sun and Conversation
Acedias commented on Acedias's story chapter in Chapter 9: Sun and Conversation
Thanks Anyta! You're always so encouraging, I look forward to your reviews :-) I'm glad you liked the end conversation cause that was the bit that took all the time. I rewrote it a zillion times cause I had this idea what it would be, just not the words that would be said. Anyway thanks again and sorry the nzers were annoying. I didn't start them that way they just ended up like that hehe -
Chapter 9 is finally posted. That one took a bit longer sorry. Just wouldn't end! I'll stick the link there when it gets thru the queue ... Now I gotta go to bed or I'll never wake up in time for yoga acedias
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Blake was in a pretty good mood as he listened to the boisterous New Zealand couple spin stories about a recent trip to Thailand. Matt had one hand around Vicky’s waist and was trying to cover her mouth with the other as the two of them jostled about on the deck, competing to be heard. They both spoke at once, each eager to add to what the other was saying or to denounce it as not being the whole truth. Pushing and shoving as they argued, their faces were bright red with laughter and exertion.
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Thanks heaps for your continuing support!Yeah there is more to Haze than he makes out :-)rest assured I am no where close to the end yet!
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Hello again my NZer fan!! ... I'm really glad you liked this chapter, cause although I think it developed the characters I was worried that the lack of dialogue and the detour from the many unanswered questions might make it boring and self indulgent (since most people probably don’t love diving as much as me!). I tried to explain what diving is like (at least my experience) and how it works but without it reading like a text book too much, so told through the characters and what they were doing and looking at to keep it interesting. I am so glad you enjoyed it!!
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Oops again .... well its up now maybe in future I'll wait till its outside the peer queue thingo before I announce it!
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Chapter 8 is posted! Chapter 8: Diving
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Blake had been happily admiring a school of tiny electric-blue fish as they darted about the thorny branches of a bright green coral, when he heard a familiar metallic clicking sound. He looked around and saw that it was Haze again, tapping his diving knife against the underside of his air cylinder so as to attract attention. He was a short distance away, floating above a rocky outcrop further down the stepped slope of the canyon wall. Upon making eye contact, he made a slow sweeping motion t
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Wow ... You knocked off the rest pretty quick I can't write THAT quick but chapter 8 is done just going to edit (while pretending to work today) and post tonight.... Which is like the day before US time ... Man you should already have it! Yeah I know a thing or two about anxiety huh .... Probably shows thru in my writing. Anyways thanks for your reading and support. Ps who said the nz couple weren't cool? Just cause blames too carried away to notice them doesn't mean anythin!!
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You know i must be so sheltered I didn't even notice that was Aussie ... Doesnt everyone say not bloody likely now n then? And what else does one do with a shrimp? It can hardly be eaten raw it requires a barbie!Thanks for reading!!!
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Especially in a tiny rural town ... I think I might ease up on Blake for a chapter ... Hmmmm ... Thanks for reviewing nephylim!!
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Yeah he is... Maybe I should stop torturing him for a bit and give him a rest
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Nephylim! Thanks again for reading my stuff and encouraging :-) ... Panic attacks suck! (in case you haven't guessed from the description, I know a bit about em)
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hmmm ... next chapter ... maybe some romance under the sea? Or maybe some anxiety ... Blake is a pretty anxious person ...
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Oops ... I should probably have done that ... thanks!
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Well there is a kiwi couple of characters on their way but I couldn't spell the accent so I just described it and left it to the readers imagination!I'm gonna add some 'ehs' next time they speak ... Maybe even a 'jandal' if the opportunity arises.Thanks for reading and for putting aside your own stuff ... Hope your readers don't blame me!
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Chapter 1: Life is Going to be Different
Acedias commented on Acedias's story chapter in Chapter 1: Life is Going to be Different
Wow word of mouth ... im gonna take that as a huge compliment :-)Yeah Blake is suppose to be a pretty flawed character, if you read on you'll notice the others are too ... but since its from Blake's POV it takes a while to flesh out other characters.anyway, thanks heaps for reviewing :-)ps, i dunno how any kiwi can mock the aussie accent ... my best friend is a kiwi and years later i still snigger when she says sucks (6) -
Chapter 1: Life is Going to be Different
Acedias commented on Acedias's story chapter in Chapter 1: Life is Going to be Different
Thanks for the review!!Descriptions are based on things ive seen on hols travellin about OZ myself ... theres a lota inspirational landscapes, i actually flipped thru some photos when i wrote some bits :-) -
chapter 7 is posted
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Later that morning, Blake sat on the cool concrete stairs out front of the Kulibari Bay Diving shop, sipping at a takeaway cup of coffee he’d just bought from the town’s cafe. He was still feeling a little hung over from the medication and was hoping some caffeine would help offset any lingering drowsiness. He really didn’t want his workmates to notice him acting any differently. As he sat there he thought about Haze, trying to decide whether or not he should speak to him. Earlier that mornin
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Early the next morning, Blake’s eyes slowly opened and peered about the darkness of his room. It was so dark that he almost couldn’t see anything at all, just ghostly green shadows lit by the faint glow from his alarm clock. He felt tired and sleepy, but after a good ten minutes or so he came to wonder why he wasn’t actually falling asleep again. What time was it? He tried to lift his head off the pillow to check, but instead only frowned at how difficult he found this. He felt weak and di
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The summer sun remained bright in the clear blue sky, but much lower by the time the boat arrived back at the jetty that afternoon. Weary but in good spirits, the tourists helped the crew pass empty cylinders and other gear from the boat to the jetty and then onto the trailer. Once packed, everyone filed onto the bus, but as Blake approached, Jill placed her arm across the doorway to block him from boarding. “Actually, today I want you to stay and help clean up,” she told him. Blake was
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Blake tried to stop his hand from trembling as he shovelled another spoonful of muesli into his mouth. He chewed it so intently it made his jaw ache. On his other hand he was rhythmically tapping his thumb against the edge of each finger in turn. Six to eight taps from the pad of his thumb onto the side of the tip of each finger, just on the edge of the nail. As he did this he mumbled a repetitive statement aloud but softly. “Even though I hate this shirt, I’m still going to go to work tod
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