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  1. Acedias

    Chapter 13: Shit!

    Andy, Andy tell me who is sane in this world? Okay so my characters trend along the screwy line a little ... I guess I write what I know. I'd have to use too much imagination to come up with a sane character ... There just aren't any role models in my life upon which to base such a character in my defenses: 1. Nats is sane surely 2. It's not really a surprise that someone with mental health issues would have a parent with mental health issues ... The opposite would be quite rare as nearly all mental health issues are parental in origins, either genetic and/or psychological. Thanks for reviewing - was worried I'd lost ya after u went quite for a while. Ps I did briefly consider naming th next chapter pissed (ie drunk) but decided one profane chapter title was enough.
  2. Yeah I am putting myself in a bit of a corner here huh? But dont worry this is not a death fic ... Disastrous though the next chapter might be, it wont be a total disaster
  3. I like your reviews ... they do my story more credit than its worth LOL ... I'm not sure if I quite meant that subtext but now you mention it, yeah actually thats what I did mean! Well sorta ... I guess Blake was trying to be accepting on an emotional level, maybe getting across the same feelings even if he wasn't on that topic exactly. Thanks again for the review Marzipan
  4. Acedias

    A New Life

    Haha! Okay well you should approve of this story line and where I am going with these characters. Eventually ... Probably.
  5. Haha yeah I think the plot doctors will be right too judging by how the next chapter is shaping up. How come u don't like the other guy (he has a name you know!) Ive been planning his arrival with patty for ages, it just took longer to get here. He's also what the plot doctors ordered I reckon. One part complexity and to one part jealousy and hey presto - plot! Thanks for reviewing!
  6. Well thank you heaps for coming back to review - especially seeing as how your ill. I've been dragging my feet a bit and a review like this is a timely reminder I should be writing! Checking every day sure is dedicated but it usually takes me 10 days or so to hammer out a chapter sorry ... Maybe some outting is going to come soon hehehe. Hope you get better!
  7. Thanks for your review Sam! Hmm if you screamed at them to stop but and they did, I'd have no story!! It'd be blake: hey look haze I fancy the pants off ya, how about it? Haze: sure let's f**k. The end. That's not a story! (btw the irony of lamenting lost/wasted happiness then you try to sell my Xbox? What about my happiness!)
  8. Hmmm ... hospital eh? Yes ... Except No ... There's no doctor in Kulibari Bay did I not mention that? Its serviced by a flying doctor locum. Nearest hospital is a 1000kms away. So I cant put him in the hospital. Anyway if hes unconscious in the hospital how can I torture him? Or ... come to think of it ... even write the story since its entirely from his perspective? A coma scene just wouldn't work. No its a nice idea ladyPink and I thank you for suggesting it but No hospital scenes are foreseeable
  9. Mystery is cool ... I like mystery. I add more ... lots more hehe ... I even named my chapters mysteriously
  10. Acedias

    A New Life

    Hey RC thanks for the review glad you like my character development which is a little slow I know so glad for your patience ... I will keep it up and hope u continue to read
  11. Haze's GF was waiting in the wings for a while huh, thought I better bring her out to add some complexity and her friend to add some more complexity hehe ... I was planning on getting the bar scenes done in this chapter but it didn't happen that way and now we have at least 5 characters worth of tension and crisscross fancying and hidden desires all you have to do is add alcohol and mix in some medication and surely somethings gotta happen hey?
  12. More already? Sheez I was gonna take a break for at least a couple of days and play Xbox!
  13. Aren't we all? Fear's a bitch Thank you for the review sir! (ps I'll let u in on a secret, I hate unhappy endings)
  14. Acedias

    A New Life

    Hey dude, thanks for your review. I'm glad you like my story and you like long stories cause I am taking forever to get somewhere with mine hey ... just posted a new chapter so hope you enjoy!
  15. Blake’s trembling right hand was buried inside his pocket, fingers caressing the tiny plastic bubble with the silvery foil that lay there, safely tucked away. It was calling to him and he touched it compulsively, longingly. Its enticing presence promised him relief. Relief from the pain, relief from the bad things he was feeling; an end to his suffering. Thus far, he had resisted the siren’s call, despite a hellish night of anxious dreams and restless sleep. However now, standing in front of
  16. Acedias

    Chapter 13: Shit!

    Yay!! Here I was thinking u didnt get thru it ... I guess things do seem pretty bad between them but I got a feeling things will be different in the next chapter ... I mean I am writing it after all. As for hazes mum ... Maybe she just gets angry ... Anyway more soon. Thanks for your review!!
  17. Acedias

    Chapter 2: Haze

    You'll find out in good time .... Hehehe ... Can't spoil things too early thanks for reviewing!!
  18. Acedias

    Chapter 13: Shit!

    That's a nice summary of my characters ... And yeah i can see you can guess where I am going with it eh? They have to help each other huh? Sooner or later ... Maybe .... (just cause u love maybes so)
  19. Acedias

    Chapter 13: Shit!

    Yeah it was a bit depressing this one huh? Don't worry I like happy endings too except not sure about your basement ... O.o ... What would you do with my boys in your basement exactly? Sounds monstrous monster33 hehe
  20. Acedias

    A New Life

    Shucks adamo ... You are too kind ... Making me blush. Hehe glad you like and I promise more soon ... when I write it!
  21. Acedias

    Chapter 13: Shit!

    Hey ya anyta ... Read neph's review on the bus trip to work and now reading yours under the table at work hehe glad you liked! Yeah there wasn't much haze and Blake interaction this time but more is definitely on the way.. Maybe even more conflict too! Except I'm not sure how I could pack more conflict in at the moment ... Pretty much everyone is fighting. Except Jill .... Hmmm ... I wonder who she can fight with? (joking). Still I'm feeling that the next chapter has to get just a little bit worse for the boys before it gets better ... Maybe ... For now XBOX!! Yay!!
  22. Acedias

    Chapter 13: Shit!

    Hiya Nephylim! Yay! Beat anyta hehe ... Yeah lotta shit happened huh so that's what I called it. Hazes mum too Huh? Course almost all emotional dysfunction is parental in origin so it shouldn't come as too big a surprise ... Don't worry but they will get outta this situation sooner or later ... I don't like unhappy endings!
  23. Acedias

    Chapter 13: Shit!

    “Um ... son?” Blake snapped opened his eyes, forcing a reluctant mind to surface and to deal with the outside world once more. The first thing it noticed was that his breathing had slowed, back to a normal pace. He felt a great deal of relief for this. It meant that his panic attack was now over. “Err ... ya okay son?” Obviously, the ringing in his ears had abated too. He could clearly hear that someone was talking to him and the words were even making sense. He turned towards the voice
  24. Awesome a new reader! Can't wait to hear what you think as you read. So much has happened since back then. Aren't I happy you've started reading too! And giving me feedback ...
  25. Acedias

    Chapter 12: Crazy

    YAY!
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