Tenebrae

The mind story is the hardest part for me to deal with. My imagination is vivid enough for me to fill in the details that didn't come with the confession.

Thank you! It was hard to write, but I felt better once it was all out. :-)

Thank you for taking the time to read and review it! I wasn't too sure about posting it but a friend of mine talked me into it.

I've recently taken up poetry and have finally gotten up the nerve to post something of mine in the public eye. Any con crit would be most appreciated. Revelation's Visionary

Thank you! I had to take a few hours to get the homicidal rage under control before I let what was left out into words, but doing this little piece helped deal with it easier. :-)

When all is said and done --- it doesn't matter.

Revelation's Visionary Drunk again and feeling no pain Lust in your eyes and whiskey in your veins You say it doesn’t mean anything, it was just a fling That he reminded you of me and it was a sudden thing I have no right to say it hurt, Cause you aren’t mine I have no right to feel left out, Cause we're two of a kind But I know ... I know ... It's not me you've been holding tight It's not me you were kissing last night Though the odds were

Easy! Rock Hudson, James Dean, and Sal Mineo!

Tenebrae is Latin for "shadow" and since I tend to stay in the background unless something connects with me, it fits.

I hate to be so blunt, but write him off and move on. Looks to me like he's just playing you to see if you can be strung along with a ring through your nose. If the conversations are flat and he can't muster up some sort of emotion to give you, leave him be and find someone who can. I've been there with guys like this, and the constant roller coaster of "I want you now" and "I don't want you now" can mess up your head big time. It's best to step back and evaluate the scene from an objective point of view --- he may want you only to dump you all over again. Some guys get into the power trip thing. Especially if they know you still have feelings for them.

I've had this stuck in my head all day because of a friend of mine going through some tough spots in his life.

I don't think I want to be an Alpha Male. I'm perfectly content to be somewhere around N and O on the alpahbetical scale.

That was absolutely beautiful. -must listen again-

I would pass on the dude in the picture, but being emo myself --- I wouldn't rule out dating another emo as long as he doesn't listen to the "cut your wrist" music and read all those dark poems that seem to be the rage right now. I'm more of a party guy and I go out to have a good time, not sit in a corner crying and letting my emotions hang out all over the place. There's a time and place for that --- in my closet, at four in the morning, after a bottle of something illegal and definitely not where any of my friends could possibly see. That would be social murder with my gang of idiots.

I know there are more that aren't willing to admit it. My best friend is one of those. I try not to goad him when I catch him looking at a dude's arse, but sometimes he's so blatant about it --- I can't help myself. I'm hoping as he gets older he will grow more comfortable with his own sexuality and be able to let that side of him bloom. There's nothing worse than being split into two people --- the one the world sees and expects, and the one inside that you want the world to see and expect.

I've always liked Grease. For some reason it looked to me like Danny Zuko was making eyes at Kenickie the whole time --- especially during Greased Lightning. That would be a fan fic pairing I would definitely read.

Sometimes. It all depends on what stud I have a hold of at the moment. As for using lubricant regularly, yeap. I even use it when I'm not engaged in sexual intercourse. As said before, the less friction, the better.

Ok, now that the question has been refined, I am a category 3 on James' sliding scale thingy. I am attracted to both my own gender and the opposite one equally. There is no "wanting" one more than the other with me. Beauty can be found in all things, and I am lucky enough to be able to find it in both boys and girls without leaning to either side of the fence. It's not just outwardly appearances that attract me either. I can see beauty inside as well as outside. I have always been that way and, God willing, I will always be that way.

I'm not really sure exactly what you're asking. The "dis", "dat", and "wid" stuff aren't words I recognize, so I'm withholding my answer until I know what the question is.

Iron Maiden, dude. Even "Master of Puppets" wouldn't be enough brain bleach to get that out of my head. Got to have "Can I Play With Madness" for sure.

Go to your profile, click on EDIT PROFILE, click on PROFILE CUSTOMIZATION, and upload the pic you want to be in your background. Click SAVE CHANGES, and watch it magically appear. Hope that is what you mean.

-As the wind blew his hair as he was walking along the river side, I watched him take in the sights. As the sun set in the background where is a camera when you need one, the picture would be perfect. How it capture the soul of the person standing there. I just wanted to sigh seeing Keith in his wonderful state.- I believe I see what part of the problem is here. It's all about flow of the sentence and the imagery it is meant to convey. This part alone uses "AS" in place of words that would fit better: *The wind blew through his hair "while" he was walking along the "river bank", and I watched him take in the sights as I took in him."The sun setting" in the background created a perfect picture to entice any artist. Where is a camera when you need one? How it would capture the soul of the person standing there kept running through my mind. I just wanted to sigh seeing Keith in this wonderful state.* -The way he looked made a flame shoot up me, he didn’t know about me, I didn’t care though the more I admired him from a far was a good thing.- *The way he looked right then made a flame shoot up (in) me, and I didn't care that he didn't know me.The more I admired him from (afar), the better things would be. -I didn’t want him to judge me or anything, didn’t want him to think I was sick or anything. His family and mine were always close, we grew up together. As you can tell I fell for my best friend! I didn’t like it very much, but what can you do when your attracted to someone that wouldn’t do anything but cause you heartache later right, well tell that to my heart.- *I didn’t want him to judge me or anything, and I definitely didn’t want him to think I was sick or some kind of stalker. His family and mine had always been close, and we had grown up together. If you haven't figured it out yet ... I've fallen for my best friend! I didn’t like it very much, but what can you do when your attracted to someone that wouldn’t do anything but cause you heartache later? Well, tell that to my heart.* I'm not going to go through the whole chapter, but suffice it to say that the premise is good, and the characters are engaging. The flow is what throws it off, though, and that can really cause problems when it's being read by someone unfamiliar with the world you see Keith and Thomas living in. There are also a few typos where words are missing in sentences that cause an abrupt halt to the readability, but those are easily fixed with a cold read-thru before posting. I hope this helps you, and I will continue reading onward as time allows. :-)

I have to write on one thing at a time or I get the characters, plot, and settings mixed up in my mind. I can't go around having my fantasy warrior talking on a cell phone while he's slaying a Nur-Kel, now can I? I've been told that dialogue is my biggest strength, and spelling/grammar are my worst. I've been learning to put more description into my writing lately, but sometimes I forget when the words start flying between two characters.

I've been out for 2 years now and so far it's been a little of both ways. Coming from the Bible Belt of the South makes it a little more difficult but the times have changed enough in my generation to where being bisexual or gay isn't really that big of a deal except when it comes to the REALLY devout people who think it's a disease that they can catch from contact with you. As far as I know, my sexuality didn't come from some dude that sneezed on me on the bus or from not cleaning a toilet seat before I sat down on it. My girlfriend has been the most supportive about it, but I believe that has a lot to do with her being bisexual, too. We have an agreement that I can see other men and she can see other chicks, but we can't see the opposite gender except for each other. It has worked for us over the past 19 months and if anything, it has made us closer.

If the story were well written and the plot engaging enough, I would read on just to see how the moment of their death is accomplished.