Al Norris

When dealing with stories about Time Travel, I have found that it is always necessary for me to remember NOT to think about too many questions... It saves on the amount of Tylenol I have to take! Davy is correct in the sense that the original time line is the original, as it pertains to him.

While I still have some reservations, I think I actually agree with CincyKris, this time.

This is exactly the scenario that Davy hoped would not happen in his first Do Over.

There's your answer CincyKris. What little I remember from Chaos Theory and Quantum Mechanics says this is a valid explanation as to how the bubbles exist and the time lines exist all together, yet in different states of being (energy states? dimensional string states?). Sounds contrived but is a possible solution.

It has been too long since I first read "Do Over". So I don't recall why I never read this story. If it is as good as the first volume, then I know I will enjoy it.

It has been such a delight to have re-read this story. The depth of emotions from the first time, many years ago, are still here with this reading. I once again marvel at the research Dan had done in writing this novel. It is simply breathtaking.

In deciding to re-read this story, I had completely forgotten about this episode. Life is full of decision points. Some points are harder than others. It takes a hell of a man to decide to make a decision that may run counter to their own livelihood. Mostly, we find about about such individuals after the fact. We call them Heroes.

Like CincyKris and Will, I first read this many years ago. It was time to re-read it. Gotta love the butterfly effect!

Absolutely a wonderful and true piece of fan-fiction. I believe that Anne would be proud of your version of Pern. Re-reading this for the second time, it is every bit as enjoyable as the first... The ending is totally understandable (as things "Pern" go), yet is still sad.

Way back when... A friend, who knew I loved science fiction, gave me a book to read: The White Dragon. OK, this was science fantasy, not a genre I had read before. But to humor my friend, I started reading the dang thing - and was instantly hooked. Before I finished the book, I had gone out and bought the four previous books and read them first. I came across this story a few years ago and am now reading it again. It is one of those fan-fiction novels that stayed very true to Ann McCaffrey's own writings. I'm going to really enjoy re-reading this tale.

If you read closely, the amount of time that happened from when Draco and Ron observed Wood kissing Harry (even though Draco thought it was Harry kissing Wood), Harry attacked Wood and was shortly hit with a stupify by Hermione, you have to ask: How long was Harry unconscious before Snape discovered Ron and Draco? I surmise that whatever occurred, happened while Harry was still unconscious. As to why Draco even went to Ron in the first place is easy enough to explain. Who else would you turn to to get answers about the actions of your love, except the one person that supposedly knew Harry the best! When you've been fed a lot of bull that appears to be true (according to the circumstances that seemed to be true) and your own emotional state has devolved into utter betrayal, you are not emotionally equipped to offset sexual advances that (on the surface) would appear to alleviate the emotional stress. It happens, all too often in our real world. Particularly to teens where the hormones are still running rampant! Some of us already suspected something was afoot when Wood first took up with Ron in the tavern. The accident with Madame Hooch was a "coincidence," Right? The elevation of Wood to that teaching position, just sorta happened, yes? Then the conspiracy really took off as soon as Harry got back to the wizarding world after spending a couple of grueling days in the muggle world.

Finally. I'm caught up! Just a note criticism here: You really need to watch what your characters do, when the hit the pavement or grass or dirt... It is distracting when you always call it hitting a floor. I agree with you, Leanne cheats! At least she let Gramps live. That's a small concession. I'm betting that Tsuru is gonna be pissed, though. Granted you have so many twists and turns in your plot lines I hesitate to make a guess... But I will anyway! (LOL) The way Charlie is acting, I think his power has already manifested (the stress was the first of the attacks - the searing heat he felt). Seeing some of what his mother has done (after he manifested), he might already know (somewhat) what his power(s) are. Leanne may just be shocked. Well, it's as good a guess as any. Keep up the good work, Rhytheminthemind! Even if I personally think your chapters are way to short, the story overall, is pretty darn good! All the best, Al

I don't care how badass you are. Faced with three zombies? I'm with Preston.

NOW we meet Walker (even though not yet named), and Donovan makes a second appearance. We already know that Sheriff Rayne is there... Could be interesting if Donovan and Rayne cross paths.

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I had been following this story on nifty, some time ago. I didn't know about the prequel stories... Just read them today; they explain a whole bunch! So now I needed to reread the entire story (it has been awhile - needed a memory refresh!) I will reread the story here as the formatting is so much more professional.

Shelter In Place! Stay Home, Stay Safe! (it's a dirty job, but somebody had to say it ... lolz)

Now we know how that happened! Good on Ariel for the setup. Everything is so new to Ariel, it is really hard to say, other than Tyler was impressed with Ariel's size... Which may or may not be problematic.

Nice to see that Ariel saw through Sean right off the bat.

In the review section (the very front page of this story), Myr makes note that dkstories is no longer associated with GA, nor does Myr expect him to associate anytime in the future. Myr also tells us that he has no idea of any life-situation that dkstories may be in, or not. Not having read this before (though I can't say why I haven't - I loved the Do-Over series), I have no idea of the amount of time that passed between chapter 32 and this one. I can only surmise that regardless of the time passage, enough readers became belligerent with Dan and this was the result. As a reader, we more often than not, have no clue what's going on in an authors life. Real Life Issues? Writers block? We just don't know. Readers should therefor always be careful of what they ask of an author of FREE stories. We should also reflect on how we ask as well. "[E]nough readers have demanded I finish this story I decided to give them what they wanted."

I agree Timothy. That was just too funny! 🤣

I just started reading this, this morning. Up until now, I haven't had much to say, that the rest of you haven't already commented upon. The ending caused me to reflect upon my own first real date with my own first love and the kiss we shared. Just... Oh my!

Just so everyone knows, the latest word I have is that Kyle has about 60K words done on chapter 32... He says that he is "just" a bit more than halfway.

centexhairysub, Kyle Aarons posts here first, then at Wolfwalker's site and finally at Castle Roland. We don't mind a bit that Kyle posts here first. It's a long time arrangement that is not necessary to squabble about. As a beta reader, I'm glad that everyone seems to like how the character summaries worked for each section. We did feel that because there were so many sections, the readers could easily become confused. At 88K words, this is the longest chapter I've seen Kyle write... heck, it's a novel in itself!

It has been a while since I browsed the Sci-Fi/Fantasy section of Gay Authers. A review over at Jay Gordon's site lead me to another story here. After reading that story, I came upon Hidden Sunlight. I was captured with the first chapter. You could have stopped at the end of Chapter 20. But NOoooo! You had to include an epilogue. That alone left so many questions unanswered, that I just knew there would have to be a Book II. It practically shouted it out! At the least, I should mention the treatment of the relationship between Shay and Mira... It was exquisitely done. Titillating, provocative, yet still and all, private. As such intimate aspects of our lives are. Rob, your treatment of the characters, the style, the measured pace, the use of the English language, have captivated me. In all, it reminds me of a combination of several of the best Sci-Fi authors. Would it be presumptuous of me to place you among such great story tellers as Andre Norton, Anne McCaffrey, Larry Niven and David Weber? You have a fan.