carringtonrj
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Plenty of complications,huh? well written as ever.
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Lovely piece of music to reference - the Couperin. You have such fine control of your writing - you are a talented storyteller.
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You write so convincingly, with real assurance and sensitivity. Thanks for sharing.
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Marmite! Nice details to this chapter. Thanks for sharing.
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I thought you did a good job here, and you don't need to worry about making it convincing. It convinced me fine. I'm no expert in the fantasy genre, but to me it seemed like a good response to the prompts. You seem to be enjoying yourself, including lots of telling details. Thanks for sharing.
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Another strong chapter, well paced and subtly handled. It all seems very believable and convincing. You write with such simple assurance. Nice job.
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You capture a moment neatly. You have a good eye and a patient, intricate, observant manner. Thanks for sharing.
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Vivid style. Interesting piece. I didn't notice any grammar errors - but I wasn't looking for them, so others might spot something I missed. I was enjoying the mood of the piece too much to look for slips. Anyhow, you can certainly write. Hope you post more.
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Cute slice of life. I love the last line, full of irony and intelligence and personality. Thanks for sharing.
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I'm glad you're keeping going with these little prose-poems. It's so lovely to see something different and imaginative. I also think pieces like this are a great way to develop writing skills in general - like an artist practising her sketching before tackling a big canvas. That said, they also stand up as finished pieces on their own. Hope you publish plenty more.
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I like that you dare to do something different and mysterious with your writing. Thanks for sharing. Hope you post more.
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At first, I was a little worried about the shirt that was ripped off - it's hard to get a really good shirt that just fits right. I'd hate to have my favourite shirt torn like that. Then I started to wonder if this response might explain a lot about me!! Anyhow, it's interesting to follow Michael's development. I can sympathise with him a lot. Is he gay? Or is it just Asher? How will he cope with having the hots for women and being in a relationship with a guy? Will he be able to live without women? And really, how gay is he? Trouble ahead, I'd guess. Thanks for sharing.
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You have an inventive way with words. I like how you are prepared to experiment and try something that suggests feelings rather than spelling everything out in pedantic detail. You have imagination and talent, I'd say. Hope you post more like this.
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You handle the situation with lovely sensitivity. Still loving the music choices. My bet is that you'll use Purcell's Dido's Lament at some key point - must be the most moving piece of music in existence! Anyhow, thanks for sharing. Great job.
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start over from the beginning is a great theme for a chapter. smart idea. interesting to see where you will go with this. nice build up. you're patient, letting the story develop steadily. good job.
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You move the story on really well here. Each chapter has real purpose and develops the character interestingly. I'm enjoying reading your story.
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Confessions of a guilty man
carringtonrj commented on K.C.'s story chapter in Confessions of a guilty man
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You write with lovely control and pace. Lots of things to like here - you imagine everything so convincingly. I feel involved in your story and kind of want what the main character wants. Nice chapter ending: that'll stir things up alright! Thanks for sharing.
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Nice introduction of the new character. I like the bits about early music. Thanks for sharing.
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You show a good and ear for detail here, picking up and quirky little elements in the scene. Good stuff. Thanks for sharing.
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Looks like an intriguing idea. I like the suggestion that you might use music - and baroque at that - to shape the story. Thanks for posting. Hope you post some more. You clearly are prepared to experiment with form and that's a good thing to me.
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Glad you rescued the story! Thanks for sharing. And stay off the porn! You clearly have a sexy enough imagination anyhow!
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another well-constructed chapter. thanks for sharing.
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well handled, so to speak. thanks for sharing.
