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Loving red profiles and another health update!
carringtonrj commented on Trebs's blog entry in Trebs' Blog
Glad it's all going well. Hope you're home soon. -
Wishing you all the best.
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I liked the narrative voice. You captured the self-involved "best bud" jealousy really well, then put a real twist on it by having the guys act on the suppressed gay feelings that we all kind of suspect is behind all that ass-slapping in the locker room stuff. Your characters are all believable and interesting. Thanks for sharing this.
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OW! I found it difficult to read in places. You render the suffering so vividly. An accomplished piece of writing. You do have a real skill in creating realistic, believable situations and exploring the details. Thanks for sharing. Glad there was a bit of cute romance to relieve the pain!
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Take the Anthology Challenge - 5 Story Recommendations
carringtonrj commented on Fishwings's blog entry in Fishwings' Blog
Thanks for your lovely comments, F. -
You describe things very well and handle the story well in general. And enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing.
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At the End of the Rainbow
carringtonrj commented on Bill W's story chapter in At the End of the Rainbow
You tell the story really well, adding plenty of interesting character details along the way. The idea of the treasure find is great fun. You also seemed to be enjoying representing the dialect of the neighbour! Thanks for sharing. -
A neat, sweet story. You capture the awkwardness and embarrassments of trying to hook up with someone really well. Thanks for sharing.
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I like how you allow passion and desire to drive the story onwards. Seeing that it was inspired by real dream, as you say above, does not surprise me. You show real conviction and involvement in your story. Thanks for sharing.
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Great to see your imagination working over-time on this original idea. Thanks for sharing.
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You convey the situation very well, and leave it rightly open to interpret. I'd guess that it was right - and very brave - to stop the stranger from carrying out any kind of attack, because it would not have solved anything in the long run. It seems clear that the priest did some terrible things, but whether he deserves to die for them would not be an issue to judge on a cold night on the street with a gun pointing at you. And, as I say, the issues would probably get worse for the stranger if he went and killed him. An interesting reminder, this, that moral issues are rarely as clear cut as we wish them to be. Thanks for sharing this.
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I'm glad you posted this. You have some really strong ideas and a good sense of how to handle a complicated plot. You have a fine way with words in general and an imaginative approach to plotting. So, I hope you post more and more now. Thanks for sharing this.
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I think you round it off well, clearing things up but leaving for plenty of "possibilities", as you say. The last paragraph is lovely and hopeful, without copping out on the darkness at the centre of the story. Nicely handled piece all round, I'd say.
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A really bold piece. You really have set yourself a challenge here: so much to get across. I think it works really well, but want to know more. What exactly has happened!?? Will read your next bit.
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More steady build up and some very nice moments, carefully realised. This, I guess, is the tricky bit of the story, holding it in balance, not giving it all away, maintaining some sense of forward movement. You achieve all that. So, now I'm committed to finishing this, which is not what I was aiming to do right now, so that's a good measure of how your writing can hook the reader.
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You develop the relationship really well and deal convincingly with the physical abuse. Not happy reading there, of course. But some lovely touches in the interactions between Callen and Sage. Again, a really well paced story, with plenty to make me want to read on.
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You set yourself such a challenge here, especially by making Callen naked. I was really impressed by how you kept your nerve and handled the confusion really well, not leaping to an easy resolution, just showing the awkwardness and leaving it dangling, which I guess is realistic, if that's the right word here. I also like how you patiently build up the relationship between the characters, allowing the reader to make the journey with you and piece things together bit by bit. Damn! Now I have to read the next chapter!
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A great start to a story. You take care to render the crash in scary detail. There's a real sense that you own your material, have fully imagined it and inhabited it; you're not rushing to get to the next part of your story. Which is great. Especially with this kind of story, there is a real temptation to tell all too quickly. You make a proper story out of a strong initial concept rather than throwing it all away in a rush. You can write very vividly. The crash was an uncomfortable read, as it should be. OK, so now I have to read on, even though I had planned to do this in instalments. Shopping will just have to wait.
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Gorgeous story. Some lovely details along the way that really drew me in. Nice premise to begin with. All in all, I just loved it. My kind of story in lots of ways. You're a star, KC!
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Lost At Sea - Spring 2013 Anthology - A Night To Remember
carringtonrj commented on comicfan's story chapter in Lost At Sea - Spring 2013 Anthology - A Night To Remember
A really well-handled story with some interesting twists. I really liked the start of the relationship between Andy and Teddy - very sweet. And, of course, it's great to get a happy ending. Thanks for sharing. -
I like how you have the courage just to tell the story without trying to drag out the emotions or make it overly dramatic. It hits home directly that way. Thanks for sharing.
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Strong, imaginative writing. An interesting idea, delivered very successfully. A kind of meditation on love: the hidden ending draws out the metaphor fully, but does not detract from the power and implications of what had come before. Lovely.
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Great to see you enjoying yourself playing with languages. A strong idea to begin with, which you pull off (if I'm allowed to say that!) very neatly. Thanks for sharing.
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I Can’t Even Remember
carringtonrj commented on Dolores Esteban's story chapter in I Can’t Even Remember
This works really well. It has elements of the fragmentary and dislocating - as in cut up poems. But it also hangs together really well and reads like a kind of index to someone's soul. I think it works beautifully. Great job. -
Interesting experiment to have the two voices interacting side by side. Gave the piece a bounce and energy that worked well. Interesting, intriguing. Thanks for sharing.
