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Another great chapter! Sarah is such a good person and a wonderful friend. Eddie and Bryan will be fine, and hopefully Wyatt as well. Earlier there was a hint that there might be some interest between Nathan and Sarah, I think they'd be a great couple
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I'm glad Carol is dead, it'll be easier for Eddie to get over this all. No wonder Bryan collapsed, he hasn't been eating or sleeping properly since Wyatt went missing. Wyatt will need a long time to recover from this ordeal, and so will Bryan.
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This is so intense Hopefully Carol won't hurt anyone with that knife
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"Mama didn't do very good." Such a heartbreaking thought from Eddie, who has been abused for years, so much that he's terrified of his own mother.....well, she is a monster
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Bryan is so close finding Wyatt, finally Hopefully Sarah phones the police, there's no way knowing what Carol is capable doing next.
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Sarah's a wonderful friend, someone Bryan really needs to keep him sane and fed Finally a lead hopefully Eddie talks to the police.
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What kind of loving mother sees her child grieving because his fiancé is kidnapped or worse, and tells him that it'll be alright, you'll find a nice girl to marry instead Poor Bryan so close to Wyatt and yet so far away He needs to find Wyatt soon
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Bryan is so devastated that he didn't really hear and understand what Eddie said to him, hopefully he'll think about it more later and finds Wyatt before it's too late
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Is Carol planning to kill Eddie too, because there's no way Eddie wouldn't say anything to Bryan, especially if he had to watch him grieve over his fiancé's death. Eddie is a sweetheart and wants what's best for his little brother, too bad their mother is totally crazy and manipulates them both
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Carol's totally insane and cruel I felt sorry for Eddie, he doesn't really understand what is going on. Carol is very trusting, Eddie could talk about Wyatt and say something that'd lead Bryan to the truth.
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Brilliant police officers on this case, Bryan only had few moments to panic about Wyatt not wanting him when he found out that he had in fact been kidnapped. Actually not sure that's any better because now he has to be thinking how much in danger Wyatt is And the mother...she's horrible
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Good to have friends in right places, even if it's your fiancé's students What have been told about Eddie makes it clear that he couldn't have done this alone Poor Bryan, now he's worried about Wyatt and someday soon, he'll find out that his family is behind it all.
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So glad I don't have to wait for the next chapter, this is getting very intense and scary. Bryan is too worried to think straight what to do next, he's lucky to have Sarah doing that. And now they have all the students wanting to help as well. Better read on and find out who it was coming to see Wyatt
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Bryan and Sarah are both getting very worried, but they are glad to have each other while trying to figure out what's happen to Wyatt. It would be worse to be alone.
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What a horrible person! Bryan's mother totally shamelessly lied to him I'm still convinced that she and Darrin are plotting this together or is Simon the assistant in it too? Because it sounded like Wyatt was kept downstairs in Carol's house. Hopefully he'll be rescued soon.
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Brilliant chapter! Those teenagers are just wonderful, they clearly care a lot about their Mr. Kinnon And Carol clearly hates the idea of her son marrying an other man, but going as far as poisoning Wyatt, that's horrible. She's probably found Darrin and they have planned this together Poor Wyatt
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Great chapter Poor Wyatt Darrin is a really horrible person he should just leave and go somewhere very far away and never come back to bother Wyatt and Bryan I find it odd that Carol wants to plan the wedding with Wyatt and is ready to exclude Bryan at least from the first meeting.
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Bryan's mother seems like an interesting character, and at least now accepting her son's plans for the marriage, hopefully that'll last. The plantation sounds like a perfect place to have a wedding.
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Loved how the student were happy for them both and hated Darrin Great chapter and you have created some good characters, it'll be fun and probably also not so fun to get to know them better.
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The beginning of this chapter was a bit sinister and the end was so sweet
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Auburn Ski Camp: A Melting Snowflake
Suvitar commented on MrM's story chapter in Auburn Ski Camp: A Melting Snowflake
Great chapter even though it revealed something horrible from Snowflake's past. I like Jimmy so I have to say that I hope Vic will become his proper boyfriend not just someone for one night only. -
Prompt 448 What did he just say?
Suvitar commented on Timothy M.'s story chapter in Prompt 448 What did he just say?
Eric and Nelson are so very new in this relationship and so young and inexperienced, it's good that they have other's interpreting how the other is feeling about things said and done They'll be better when they know each other better -
Auburn Ski Camp: Brian's Embers
Suvitar commented on MrM's story chapter in Auburn Ski Camp: Brian's Embers
I hope there'll be happy endings for all the characters not putting any pressure on your writing, but I don't like sad people It's kind of mix up at the moment, Albert wants Sabrina who wants Snowflake who wants Brian and poor Jimmy is left alone It'll be interesting to see what happens next -
Auburn Ski Camp: Fire and Ice
Suvitar commented on MrM's story chapter in Auburn Ski Camp: Fire and Ice
Brian and Snowflake are getting more familiar with each other, that was nicely written In Finland male circumcision is very rare, only done if there's a medical, cultural or religious reason for it (in Finland every year about 2-4% of baby boys are circumcised). -
Auburn Ski Camp: Snowflake and the Lion
Suvitar commented on MrM's story chapter in Auburn Ski Camp: Snowflake and the Lion
Poor Jimmy and poor Sabrina They'll survive, but I feel sorry for them both. Brian and Snowflake might make a great couple, but I'm not convinced yet Perhaps I'll feel more positive about them after the next chapter Did you know that in this chapter you wrote Jösse not Jossë? Just an observation
