Comments Invisible in Dark/Contrast Mode Bug Has Been Reported. We are working on patch.
-
Content Count
4,579 -
Joined
-
Last visited
Community Reputation
1,993 I'm AwesomeStory Reviews
- No Story Reviews
Comments
- Rank: #0
- Total: 2,254
About Miles Long
-
Rank
Member
Profile Information
-
Age in Years
49
-
Gender
Female
-
Sexuality
Not Telling
-
Location
Northern California
Recent Profile Visitors
10,207 profile views
-
Overall, flow is improving , and ironically, I am starting to question the believability of the age of the boys, but the author gets major life kudos for the following quote: "To me, there’s nothing more dangerous than those who believe that God will save us from our own destruction, or that the destruction of the world is actually necessary to bring about the coming of God’s kingdom..." Thanks.
-
It's obvious the author is passionate about the subject and I respect the desire to share the golden nuggets found while researching a story, but it interrupts the flow and prevents me from full disbelief suspension. I like the premise of the story, it's got potential, but it is getting lost in expounding on details that don't necessarily drive the story farther and a little bit of politicizing...which is not resonating for me yet from a character perspective (I reserve the right to change my mind on that later though as the story progresses). Thanks to the author.
-
The beginning of the chapter felt a little forced in terms of both flow, starting with what read like random ponderings and then jumping into horribly insincere feeling tragedy, as well as dialogue (i.e. cliche racial outburst, the hollow/awkward use of words like sick and sweet in an effort to portray the vernacular of a teenager). I'll admit that I almost stopped reading, but decided to stick it out because I had read other stories by the author and I know finding a character's true voice is hard. I was rewarded for my sticktoitiveness as the chapter started to flow smoothly toward the end a
-
Introduction and Glossary
Miles Long commented on Altimexis's story chapter in Introduction and Glossary
While the photos did not come up, I did appreciate the attempt. -
No good deed goes unpunished. Thanks for the update!
-
Thanks and Happy New Year!
-
Our CAP boys need to resharpen their claws. Great update, thank you.
-
Spectacular turn of events. Happy Chrstmas and thank you.
-
This little gem is like a truffle: rich, sweet, and gone in a bite. Would more be good? Sure. Could I live with the joy of just one? Sure. Thanks.
-
Giddy...your stories make me feel feet wiggling giddy, like the rising start to a teen crush. Your potential for Godfather like drama is a heady prospect. Thank you!
-
Wow! Calvert really put himself out there and did it knowing George's situation. Fantastic update, thank you.
-
Brilliant suspense, thank you.
-
I was wondering when Francis would return to active story duty. I love the twists, thank you Mark Arbour.
-
Hmmm...Interesting chapter, I eagerly await more, please and thank you.