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Miles Long

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About Miles Long

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  1. Miles Long

    Sixteen

    Thanks for the work.
  2. Miles Long

    A Day at the Park

    Overall, flow is improving , and ironically, I am starting to question the believability of the age of the boys, but the author gets major life kudos for the following quote: "To me, there’s nothing more dangerous than those who believe that God will save us from our own destruction, or that the destruction of the world is actually necessary to bring about the coming of God’s kingdom..." Thanks.
  3. Miles Long

    Oneg Shabbat

    It's obvious the author is passionate about the subject and I respect the desire to share the golden nuggets found while researching a story, but it interrupts the flow and prevents me from full disbelief suspension. I like the premise of the story, it's got potential, but it is getting lost in expounding on details that don't necessarily drive the story farther and a little bit of politicizing...which is not resonating for me yet from a character perspective (I reserve the right to change my mind on that later though as the story progresses). Thanks to the author.
  4. The beginning of the chapter felt a little forced in terms of both flow, starting with what read like random ponderings and then jumping into horribly insincere feeling tragedy, as well as dialogue (i.e. cliche racial outburst, the hollow/awkward use of words like sick and sweet in an effort to portray the vernacular of a teenager). I'll admit that I almost stopped reading, but decided to stick it out because I had read other stories by the author and I know finding a character's true voice is hard. I was rewarded for my sticktoitiveness as the chapter started to flow smoothly toward the end and I was able to overlook the writing and participate in the story. Thanks for the work.
  5. While the photos did not come up, I did appreciate the attempt.
  6. Miles Long

    Chapter 43

    No good deed goes unpunished. Thanks for the update!
  7. Miles Long

    Chapter 25

    Thanks and Happy New Year!
  8. Miles Long

    Chapter 24

    Our CAP boys need to resharpen their claws. Great update, thank you.
  9. Miles Long

    Chapter 42

    Spectacular turn of events. Happy Chrstmas and thank you.
  10. Miles Long

    Chapter 1

    This little gem is like a truffle: rich, sweet, and gone in a bite. Would more be good? Sure. Could I live with the joy of just one? Sure. Thanks.
  11. Miles Long

    Chapter 23

    Giddy...your stories make me feel feet wiggling giddy, like the rising start to a teen crush. Your potential for Godfather like drama is a heady prospect. Thank you!
  12. Miles Long

    Chapter 41

    Wow! Calvert really put himself out there and did it knowing George's situation. Fantastic update, thank you.
  13. Miles Long

    Chapter 22

    Brilliant suspense, thank you.
  14. Miles Long

    Chapter 40

    I was wondering when Francis would return to active story duty. I love the twists, thank you Mark Arbour.
  15. Miles Long

    Chapter 21

    Hmmm...Interesting chapter, I eagerly await more, please and thank you.
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