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Daniel is really going thru the mill. Ironic here that this demon of pain saved him from being raped. And now the rescued has become the rescuer in a neat twist, though after her experience of the night before I am surprised she should be on the same beach where she was attacked and seeming quite calm now as though nothing had happened. Anyway, just as well for Daniel. No, I haven't got into putting pen to paper to actually create anything yet but there's a desire to do so and some ideas swirling around. Just need to get motivated enough to work on them. At the moment I am enjoying your writing and learning from you! Thanks!

So well described that anguish of soul. Poor Daniel.

Yes, I see how Josh must step up to the plate now and show himself strong for Daniel, if only Daniel will let him. Seems that Daniel must recognize his need for help first before he can be helped. Always difficult for a strong self-sufficient, confident person to acknowledge weakness and the need for help. I must say you do take us thru lots up ups and downs with your characters, turning them inside out in the process! And us too in trying to keep up! Never a dull moment!

Yes, it's not that you are making him perfect. He looks at himself and he acknowledges his faults and failings in an honest, open, humility that is refreshingly simple and in that shows a strength of character. So they did get to him in spite of his strength of resistance, but he'll get over this. Josh is also showing great strength of character in standing up to his dad.

I think I see what you are maybe trying to do with Daniel - create this amazing person who would be (as you've said your perfect alter ego) but also for each of us the one we would in our deepest, treasured dreams want to be, but really are not and cannot be with all our flaws and warts. No matter, it is an interesting kind of experiment, and so far he is not altogether as unbelievable as he ought to be. Not sure how you are doing that: keeping him credible but at the same time painting him in such magnificent brush strokes. I would have to re-read this to see if I could pick up some clues about that. Quite an amazing job you are doing. I like it! You said you are not a christian and here you use these incredibly christian/biblical names - Daniel and Joshua - both bible giants! Powerful, stung, manly. The names of great heroes of the faith. Of course, you already have painted Daniel as a man of great faith, just not christian faith. So very interesting.

No, you are right about that. What I meant about losing my Christianity was I had no love or forgiveness for them but wanted vengeance big time! And thanks for the link. Will check it out.

Yes, the relief that he's ok. I really thought that Shaw creature was going to do him a bodily harm, the pervert! That description of the effect of those drugs on Daniel was incredible. Is that really what happens? How terrifying! And what happens to this abominable man who has done this? He just goes free to continue his perversions I suppose. Must say it really makes one glad to see that pressure is being put on these places to close like Exodus. We need to have a public holiday like GuyFawkes to celebrate when one of them is forced to close.

Good for Josh! Standing up to his parents and rooting for his beloved Daniel! Why had Daniel's parents been crying? Will we find that out? And Josh's parents not crying! They the ones should be crying. They should be in the rehab with their Rev Shaw getting the treatment to have their minds straightened. They the ones with the crooked bent minds. Makes you so mad, especially when it's done in the name of the Lord who would not do this. God, religious people stink. They stank when You walked the earth and they continue to stink today. Bloody religious bigots. They all need to be burnt as witches! Get their own bloody medicine! Sorry. This really sent me on a rant. Lost all my Christianity in the process!

Sorry. I have heard such places existed, and maybe still do, but am finding it hard to believe that is really so. Can you point me to someplace on the internet where I could verify this? Do things like this really happen in the civilized world? It's tantamount to criminal activity under the guise of religion and disgustingly abhorrent. It is actually an abomination in the sight of the Lord! Make room for me on the soap box too!

This situation of them going back to Josh's home is like living in the lion's den. I don't like it at all. Too fraught with danger. Too much living in the enemy camp! Please get them out quickly without a big drama.

You sure know how to heat up the action and keep your readers in terrible suspense!

Beautiful! What a fantastic description of a good first time experience for Josh. Daniel is beautiful so if he's modeled on you, you must be too; but then we know that from your great writing that you are a beautiful soul! Thanks for sharing.

One is certainly drawn by you into Daniel and a little scared for Josh, though the terrifying scariness of Daniel seems countered by his amazing gentleness and appreciation of Josh's nervousness and innocence. Daniel had to have something more to him than this outward appearance of danger or he would never have been attracted to Josh. He is seeing more in Josh than Josh is even aware of. Seeing beyond the geekiness of him. Josh is in for the ride of his life. Wish I had had a Daniel to draw me out when I was that age. My life would have been a totally different story which I want now, but maybe it would not have been so good. Well, your story, as usual is challenging me and making me think and want to read on. Such a distraction!

Finished and satisfied. Deeply! No disappointments! You took it to a great end! Well done! I really loved it all the way. Absolutely made my day today! And thanks for the response to the reviews and even adding little personal snips in. I felt I got to know you a bit thru this as well as knowing Isaac and Connor. Thank you so much!

So good! Facing his giants with the help of his lover and his friends. Great stuff! I love it!

Riveting! I've been lost in it and really need to tear myself away and get some stuff done. Then I can come back and finish this.

So beautiful! Well done! Very satisfying and fulfilling. So well written!

Yes, I see there is hope and light. Something tells me that Connor is not family either. You mention the different surnames in the scuffle and I think there's reason in that. And Connor is hiding something that will show us why he's like this. Isaac strangely will be the one who can help him come to healing. Very intriguing! I love it. You do such a splendid job of developing the story and the characters and playing your readers too. And, by the way. I had realized that Isaac's exposure in prison would have exposed him to the worst of expletives. Perhaps a mention of his struggling with the expression the first time he uses it and finding it strange but satisfying to utter, will make it less jarring. Small thing but probably will give the whole incident more credence. This is teaching grandmother to suck eggs. Sorry. Not that you are grandmother either! So sorry again! I'm behaving a little like Connor now, opening my mouth and sticking my big foot in it!

Wow! I keep saying that. Becoming a bit of a cliche! But you are blowing me away again by showing us Connor's big heart and making us see how much like Isaac he is in his hurt and rejection and consequent rebellion. So now we all fall in love with him together with Isaac. And then what? Is there some future in this or are we heading for terrible disaster for both and for all the rest of the family too? I can't bear that! It will, as Grandma says, end up hurting them both and that will kill them and her and all the rest too. Please let it end now in some pain and some hurt rather than go further and cause a tsunami.

Really good, as usual. One forgets Isaac is so so innocent and has been through so so much, and you portray that so effectively in this chapter. Poor Isaac. Struggling to present some sense of normality and everything is skew, how can he get it sorted in a few easy steps, just not possible. Very realistic this. And Connor is so enticing and alluring. He's like the spider drawing in the fly in his attractiveness. But I see you make him a real softie under it all too. Very interesting to see where this all goes. Thanks for responses to earlier comments. I like that and also shows you watching the entries. That's good! It's really good to have some interaction on this site. I had not picked up that you weren't American either but from UK, until recent chapters. That's refreshing.

Good as ever. Love your writing.

Ah, more tears! I think by the time I'm finished here I won't have anything left to cry! Beautiful and joyful tears now! Thank you!

So touching! So many beautiful surprises to make up for all the horrible things that have happened. So beautiful! Thank you!

Wow! Beautiful! I love it! Thank you! All of it! So good!

Good as ever. Just can't put this down! I like Jon too! Wow! Imagine waking up and finding you had a brother like him! It's so romantic! I don't think Isaac would be using common expletives like the rest of the world, even in his thoughts, so you might want to edit those out of Isaacs natural thinking at this stage. I'm sure He'll get there pretty quickly but I don't think he would be there yet! Sorry! That jarred for me!