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This is one of the best reads I have had here and really keeping me engrossed. I am only surfacing for air, food and a quick check on my special friend online! This chapter on Rick's view was written with a kind of breathless urgency in it - or was that in me anxiously wanting to know the next opening of the story? Anyway, it caught me up in it. Great writing!

Very, very good! So effective. You make me feel everything Isaac is going thru like I am there in that bed and not him. Wow! And Rick! What a treasure he is knowing what to do - the holding of Isaac! The amazing knowledge that he had never been held! Wow! You also building the knowledge of the cult bit by bit and it's intriguing again and very enlightening. I don't know much but have read bits and pieces and it's realistic. Thank you for a really good read. You sure know how to do that!

Wow! This is such a real description of pain and anguish. I have felt a little of this - both the physical (the doctor pulling the bandages! Oh my! I have nearly fainted myself from that and the doc I had was kind, and the antiseptic that will "sting a little" - ooooh!) and the heart, the wanting to die and trying to end it all. OMG, this is such a good piece of writing! So real and so effective. I wanted to hold and to comfort Isaac and hit that stupid doctor. What did he have to be angry at Isaac for? He didn't understand anything. And how could he inflict more pain because of his own selfish anger? He made me so mad! But now more questions than ever as to the how and why and where. You are really good at building that. Excellent writing.

Wow! No reviews? What's going on here? This is such a well-written intriguing introduction that really makes one want to know all the answers to the many questions that are posed, and yet no one makes a comment? I am puzzled about that. Maybe everyone was too eager to read the next chapter to take the time to review. Thanks for the great start.

Wow. This was a lot in one chapter having both that painful parting that became understandable though really was a bummer. And then the re-union and the surprise of it and the joy of it. That could have been a whole nother chapter. Sorry it's finished when it seems hardly started, but it was good. Thank you.

Well, that at least cleared the air and set them on the right track instead of double guessing each other and missing the point (sorry about that pun!) but looks like they finally got it! Goodbye Dallas! Why is Jeremy so keen to get there anyway? Sounds like he got stuck in a rut of what he planned and doesn't want to move from it even when he sees something so much better hit him in the face. Hope he's not an asshole about this! Great story! Keep it rolling!

Wow! You sure making things dramatic with now a tornado. Scary! And you putting the guys thru these experiences together and making them a little more cosy with each other like comfort me in this horrible experience! I like that! And they enjoying kissing. I like that too. Seems whatever they have to face now could be faced with them helping each other to get thru this. Great story. Keep it rolling, man! I like it! Just as well its Sat and no pressure - I can read and enjoy! Thanks!

Wow! Moving ahead fast and yet respectfully. The bit about Jeremy's brother and his guilt was a shocker and maybe could have been hinted at in a previous chapter. It was a good catalyst for the moment of comfort being needed which led to the first kiss, and for Jo it seems it may have been his very first man kiss so a bit more could have been explored there too. But for all this, I really am enjoying this story and looking forward to more. Thanks for writing.

My comments on the last chapter were a little premature re your taking the story from both points of view since you did this chapter so well, always putting fresh stuff in the change of view so it wasn't just repeating details. Really well handled. It caught attention and added insight. I love the way the two of them are reacting to each other. You can see them clicking together so neatly already as though they were made for each other, and each one in his own way experiencing his own physical pain as a sort of cover and release for emotion that they don't want to deal with. Is this the man thing maybe of not wanting to show the weakness of emotion, but really that hides our real selves. Ah, you giving me so much to think about beyond just the story here, but also really involving me in the story. I love it. Yes, agree with other comments about the missing words and the need for editing/proof reading. How does one become a proof reader here? Would enjoy doing that myself.

It's great having the story told from both points of view but its a bit much having to repeat all the details. Is there maybe a way of doing this without having to go over every detail again as that is a bit tedious. Not sure how you would do that and get to the same place. It was really nice though seeing Jeremy from Jo's point of view as we only had up to then Jeremy's view of himself and Jo definitely had a better opinion of Jeremy than Jeremy had of Jeremy. An interesting start and looks like quite a diversion on Jeremy's journey to a new start. You made them both so likable!

Wow! I was so frustrated with Patrick and how he needed his friends to sort him out. And what incredible friends he had. They were the best ever. I failed to see Ben's story and was mad with him for being such a prick to Patrick, but then had you told Ben's story I would have thought Patrick was the prick. And then Jeff. He was really nice and he had another story too. I was sorry Patrick didn't get with him, until the final chapters told the real story of Patrick and Ben. Your story drew me in more and more. The circle of Ben's friends was so interesting too and so well done. It was a typical gathering of parents drawn together by their children and all so different. Well done for a very interesting and entertaining and realistic story. It gave hope for all us hopeless cases who have wasted long years of our lives in the wrong place. Ben's kids, especially Darrin, were so delightful too. I loved it. Thanks! I see you attracted some great author/readers too whose stories I have so enjoyed reading. Good job, man! I like the title of the last chapter too, by the way!

Wow! I loved this story and it became one of those that you just can't put down. Life had to be put on hold for it. And thank you for such a fine ending too. So satisfying and rewarding for us romantics. Beautifully crafted and developed. Sad to be leaving Micah and David though. They got under my skin. I will be quite lost for a bit until I find another good story to get involved in. Thanks again!

Very easy, enjoyable reading. I wasn't all that keen on trying another teen episode, but you did this well and kept me reading right to the end. So I have to say it was a good read. Thanks. I liked the English setting and nuance - so refreshing after so much American stuff.

Just added my review and the internet bombed and chucked it all. Sorry. Don't feel inclined to try and re-create my post again, Maybe later. I'm now just so mad. But good job.

Been sampling different authors here and have to say you definitely among the favorites! Great job! Your characterization is excellent, realistic & convincing and the story is full of great incidents/events/dramas that really take one places. Lots of emotional highs and lows, which is good. You do it so well. Plus, plus, plus you write such readable English in good sentences. I loved it all. Thanks. Hope you go on to use these characters again and tell more of their stories as there's still so much more to come.

Thanks for a very entertaining and interesting read that was so beautifully romantic too. Had lots of really good elements. Loved it.

Oh Wow, it is allowing me to review at last. I tried at several points and it just would not let me open this review box. This has been one of the best stories I have read so far. It was deeply moving. The characters were so realistically and beautifully drawn. It was as though I knew them and identified with so much of what they were going through. And it was so informative too on so many aspects. Thank you for filling in the little asides on Canadian culture that would no doubt have completely overpassed me or left me dismissing it as irrelevant because I did not understand it. That was so considerate. Finally, the writing was excellent. There was a flow to it that was so easy to follow and that caught one up in the story without intruding and interrupting. Excellent! I hope to read a lot more that you have written. Thank you so much.

Just letting you know I am enjoying this having got this far. You making it into an interesting story with the whole shebang about Eric and all his nonsense; and I like the twist you putting on Eric still coming between Steve and Chris. That's really funny.

That was great! Very enjoyable! I liked the quick read even though I normally enjoy getting into something longer and more meaty (excuse the pun!). It took a while to get to the meaty bits - 18 chapters of the 23! Wow! But must say I was way ready for it by then - very worked up! Thanks for the entertaining read. It was also teary! Just like Mitch! Hell! But you made all the characters so likeable. Really nice! Thanks.

Having read the first three chapters I am getting into this and enjoying the feisty characters and the potential for conflict here, and domination (oooh!) Not sure who will dominate who though! It's fun and am beginning to enjoy the ride and look forward to reading on. I like the POVs and so far the characters are true to form and coming out well.

The realism is brutal and hard hitting. It's like a slap in the face! Not sure that I like it, but it was a very interesting experiment and hard hitting. There were elements of humor in it and a great deal of interesting explorations of Chinese culture. Quite fascinating. That was worth the read. Myself, I am a hopeless romantic and that's what I would look for in a story that was going to entertain me fully. But I am glad I read this and I did enjoy it. Thanks.

Just wanted to say thanks for the great story. Thoroughly enjoyed every part of it.

And thanks for writing! Enjoying muchly! Though also so envious of this love they have - ah to dream!

Great details and development. Really loving the story, though still disconcerted by typos (not so many in this chapter). Wondering if you return to read reviews since the last time this was reviewed seems to have been in July 2012; more than a year ago! Anyway, it's fun to read what folk have to say about your story and what turns them on, freaks them out, shuts them down, etc.

A great chapter and very touching but spoilt by lots of little typos/grammar errors. Rather disconcerting and distracting. Don't you have someone to proof read for you before you publish the chapter?