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such a great idea for a story but..... Brady was forgiven much too quickly. Nes tried to kill himself for God's sake. This could have been developed much much more. Nes should have been very fearful about letting Brady back into into his life. Very fearful.

ok...ok.. Let me say this. when a writer can reach through my computer screen and let me cry until my nose clog and my head hurt then you know you have found a fucking good writer. That scene with the mother in the supermarket did me in. wow.

Wow! You made me burn dinner! This was so engaging i forgot i was cooking. oh well.

Bitch!!

At the end there i was like, "Bumbo clawwt!! lol (hope there is no one here who understands my cussing so no one will be offended. LOL. Nice.

Thank you soooo much Laura. I am in Quarantine in Jamaica and you made it so much easier. your story was just fantastic. i am gonna go read every damn thing i can find that you wrote. By the way, i have not signed in for a few years now. i did just to make a comment.

Why don't you write anymore?? You are so goooooooood! Please start writing again or if you are but not on this site please tell me where i can find you. I really miss you.

You are too good of a writer, i have not seen anything from you in a while. Whats happening?

I love this story. It is so well written and I really love the guys.

Why is it going so fast?

I wish, wish, wish that you would complete this story. It is sooooooooooooo damn good!

Honestly, i started reading this and i was like, 'yes, a good read!', then it started to go south. The characters just became unbelievable in the end. Tracy, for one became the nanny for everyone's kids after they treated him like shit. It also became too 'syrupy'. My God, everybody loved everybody and although there were toddlers about everybody behaved.

I read this story to see a little bit more of Davis and Ellis but i fell in love with this story. I think it is finished here.

Dane’s POV He felt as if his world was imploding as he looked at the woman sitting and staring at him. He had told her time and time again never to come to his house, yet here she sits with that fucking silly, innocent, but conniving look on her face. Fuck! Fuck! Fuck! Nate can’t know about this! Not yet anyway! I need just a little more time! The thoughts kept swirling in his head, threatening to make him temporarily insane. He then remembered his short conversation with Nate. He was the one

Thank you Canuk for the kind words. I have always wanted to do this. Just do it, is my advice to you. It also helps me to relax, I've realized so it is a win, win hobby.