Jason Rimbaud

Is Percy committed to Five? Did he tell Five about it? I do think you might be on to something regarding Five and his "mission" in regards to Percy. But I think neither one of them have learned the lesson they need to learn.

As this was based on my local club back in the day. Pennyslvania law was different. To be able to open and serve alcohol on Sundays, a certain percentage of your sales must be in food. So all the "bars" gave away food every day, usually hot dogs, or potluck, one pot meals and counted that cost as "food" sales to remain open on Sunday's. So yes, they served food. There was also a place called the dungeon, I'm sure you could figure out what when on back there. I didn't include it in this story, cause even though Percy is "exploring" his bondage fetish, I didn't want to have a sex scene and if they went into the dungeon, I would have had to include it.

Am I the only one that thinks its hot when my husband chooses my outfit? More than half of my undies that are super cute (IE GAY/SLUTTY) he bought for me to wear for him. Ethan showing up unexpectedly raises some red flags, and Percy behaved in a manner I would not have had. Barging in on me peeing would not be, oh hey, let's play tonsil hockey. I wonder if him being kind of on the fence wil come back to bite him on the ass. But it was nice to see Percy admit that its different now. This dance club, is modeled after a club I used to go to back in Pennsylvania, it was called Stallions, and I think I described it pretty much perfect, though its been thirty years since I was there. I spent many a nights shaking my booty and many after hours where lets say, I was on the bar but I wasn't dancing.

I actually saw that, and deleted a "the" so I could have that number. .

“Hey, wait up.” Percy turned to see Michael waving to them across the street. “Is that the dude from the mines?” Five asked as Michael waited for a car to pass. “Yep,” Percy said as he shoved his hands in his pockets. “I’ll explain later.” Michael caught up to them, and Percy looked at him expectantly. “How do I know your grandfather possesses the necessary contacts and funds for right of first refusal?” Michael asked bluntly. “For a professor, you seem to lack

I actually have so much to say about this topic. But I know my love of debate and picking things apart to the smallest level pisses people off. And most of my opinion would be esoteric, many do not like to engage in that fashion. I will say I can usually tell if it is a male or female writer by the prose. Each gender writes distinctively. Neither is better than the other and comes down to reader preference. On this site, Krista is one of my favorites, follow closely behind by Cassie. One writes predominately coming of age and one offers a variety of stories with Sci-Fi themes. I wouldn't go to Krista for sci-fi. By the way, these two writers are some of my favorites on this site period. Then you have Thirdly, fun, cheeky stories with some supernatural elements and amazing fun dialogue. On the other side, you have Jack Poigant (I always misspell his name and always feel bad), his story Big Paws was hysterical and had one of the most intense chase scenes I've read in a long time. You can't forget about Lee Wilson, who wrote a story about a sentient room that I couldn't stop thinking about for days. All his stories are unique and written from different point of view that I could never emulate. Jeff Burton is hard to describe, but he wrote a saterical story about Nifty stories that is so much fun that I wish he'd hurry up and finish it. I'm sure there are many authors who write romance but since I don't usually enjoy those stories, I don't even try. I think what I'm alluding too, there are many great writers of either sex and one could find their interest from any of them. If I'm misrepresented anyone, that was not my intention, I was attempting to show that many authors write different things so it all comes down to talent in the end.

I only care if the story is good and written in the correct tense. Male or female, doesn't matter to me. I only want interesting fun stories. And I am neither male or female, I am a Chef. .

I do wish I had included Bethany's conversations she's having with her "girlfriend". There is a lot more to Bethany than anyone suspects. That is why I said in the last chapter, after re-writes/re-rights, this might be a good story. Don't feel bad for her is all I'm saying. She was fun to also write/right but that will be scrapped for now, if I ever go back and work everything I cut out. Five had an agenda, there is a method to every thing he does. He's a very calculating individual, and unlike Percy, he is a bit more honest in his feelings, even though he is conflicted. By the way, if you ever get an idea to have twenty-five days with two people stuck in a house, ignore it. Not only are they avoiding the real issue, they have decided to pretend to be a couple. Because they are super smart, and nothing bad can come from that. And that Christmas deadline is approaching. I'm not sure if I mentioned it, but Percy's whole family is meeting at PineCrest for Christmas. How are they going to handle it when both houses are full? Michael was such a fun character to write. He's been on his best behavior thus far. And you're right, the mines are a dangerous place and one should always be careful when exploring. And now they have wives to boot. Methinks that is not a good combination at all. And writing a program that analyzing satellite imaging and can predict precious metal deposits would be worth a gold mine. (i'm pretty happy with that sentence. And before anyone comes at me with the science. It probably is crazy without any chance at working, but in Glacier Bay, all things are possible.

In about a year, I think this is going to be a good story after I do a few re-writes/re-rights to it. I just want this story finished so I can move on to the other one that's ready to post.

I don't think I ever said it in the narrative. But in my head he was always out, which is why I included the piece we don't agree you hiding yourself for baseball during their conversation. And I'm glad you got exactly what I was going for with the conversation, I just feel it could be tighter, tighter. As it started out, it was all fun and games, and then when feelings started getting in the way, they each had to confront things they had kept hidden from each other, and maybe from themselves. Hopefully, as we get deeper into the narrative, they continue to grow and change as characters. The frantic pace from the first chapters wasn't sustainable for the story I wanted to tell. So as we peel back their layers of self lies, delusions, we find they are more nuanced them what we first believed. This is where I wanted to get too, but it took the eight previous chapters for these characters to arrive at the place that is needed for the back half of the story. I needed the craziness of the gay chicken, the weird sexual tension, so when they actually start admitting their feelings, even if its to themselves, it would feel real and not forced. This story is really about Percy and his "frosted heart". Will he let his dream of baseball destroy any chance at happiness or will he find a way to achieve both. And boy did I just had to use the delete key. That hasn't been shared yet. More will be revealed later on.

The grocery store trip, including the hookup in the dressing, was taken directly from my life. In my life, it was two older people, probably just hooking up and I never confronted anyone. As for adding the cheese, I do things like that with the husband all the time. It drives him crazy. Percy was and is out to his family and friends. He was not out at school, choosing to keep that private because he believes it will hurt his future. The school quitting thing, well you might find out who spilled the beans about that at a later date. Its a bit worse in the next chapter. These two should not drink. I think it had more to do with the kink they are exploring, As well as youthful enthusiasm. And sex is always exciting when you first experience it with a new partner. And a bunch of rose colored glasses. The parent scene, I am not happy with how it turned out. I wanted it to go a different direction in the early stages and wrote it more aggressive and unresolved. But I felt it didn't fit the family dynamic. So I attempted to have it be...not in agreement but still show the love underneath. Parents and Kids don't have to always agree but I still wanted to show respect and how both parties are dealing with a son branching out to chase his own dreams. I.don't think i nailed that sentiment at all but that was the goal. This whole story needs a re-write/re-right, it's too sloppy in places. At least I learned never to attempt this again.

In so many words.

You forget you also found out what Seb and company are searching for. Though you are right, things are about to become messy. All three plotlines converge in the next chapter and we start moving towards the conclusion. I think the story ended up around twenty chapters but things were joined together so I'm not exactly sure how many chapters are left. But the story is complete. So as fast as I can edit and make sure things make sense as best as I can, this story should end quickly. And luckily for you, tomorrow is Monday. .

The Return of the King had like six endings, I'm sure they'd let you get away with it.

MIchael was conceived as a know-it-all professor out of touch with human social interactions. He's spent too many hours in a lab and not enough time out with humans. He's single minded and always thinks he's the smartest person in the room. The relationship of the three couples are explored in future chapters. I'd like to say he gets better, but isn't that a relative term anyway.

I think you are two behind truthfully.

PS: I also didn't say today was Monday, I forgot to, so for once, it might not be my fault.

I'm pretty sure it had something to do with Christmas messing up everyone's schedule. I'm sure next Sunday it will get back to normal.

Percy left the kitchen and walked slowly towards the stairs. Everything hurt, the least of which was his shoulder. And with each step, he was reminded of the events of the previous night. For the first time since they had arrived at PineCrest, he felt guilty. Without doing it consciously, he realized he had been seducing Five since their time last summer. Until today. Last night he planned for it. Suggested it and then did everything he could to ensure it happened. He even cleaned him

Even though I agree with you. Alas, she has already declared there are only two more chapters. I think it ends with Cody and Joel living happily ever after, once Joel's parents agree to allow them to see each other. But you are right/write.

I remember the cultural impact Brokeback Mountain (bareback mountain) had at the time. Two of America's hottest actors playing gay roles. I know the book was hugely impactful as well. And while I understand the need to normalize queer love stories into the mainstream, that doesn't excuse how boring that movie was. Too much time was focused on them not being together and not enough time of them "falling" in love. So when jake says, I wish I knew how to quit you, I didn't believe either of them. The pacing was off, the music was horrendous, too many long shots of faces. None of these things made me believe they were in love. At best, they shared a secret. As pure entertainment, they got more wrong then they got right. The only thing I really believed, Jake was a bottom. This just made me laugh and made my day. Because you are half right, I did forget hockey had a puck instead of a ball. Sports balls encompasses. all professional sports. Group mind think, keeping the masses entertained, insisting "We" just won when all you did was yell at a TV. I am making fun of all of it. Straight guys wearing the names of other straight guys on their backs. The idea of being a follower and broadcasting it to everyone makes me genuinely confused. Not knowing who is teaching your kid, but you know every single quarterback the Mapleleafs had since the beginning of basketball in Scotland is absurd. By the way, all of the above statement is mostly tongue and in a cheek. But I do not understand the following and practice of sports balls. To each his own. I'll continue to be the odd bald out. .

Are they hairy?

My memory is that the first two seasons were really good, and then it kind of went off the rails. I don't believe I ever watched the final season, I just lost interest. But the first season, based on the UK version almost scene for scene, was really good. But I haven't seen it since it first aired back in the 90's I think.

That will be an add on chapter, when after this story, Percy and Five go to London to see the sites and run into a school chef on a bus, who is reading a story. Its on a double decker bus, its hot, I've already written it.

I don't believe I ever watched it. When QAF first came on, I watched the American one first. I didn't even know it was a british one first until maybe ten years later. By then, i would have been already tainted due to the American one. Though I found out that dude from Sons of Anarchy starred in it.