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Not going to lie... I was thinking about that as I wrote it.
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He does and it's a door I may close for good.
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That's my specialty
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He is coming around and moving forward which is a huge thing. We get an abbreviated summer in the next chapter.
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I made it through Columbus Circle and all I heard was horns as I dashed across the street. I had just gotten inside the park when I was tackled to ground by someone. “Ok Kellan let him up.” Uncle Brayden shouted “You are fast TJ, but not fast enough.” Kellan said with a smirk “Dude, how did you dodge all those cars in the circle. I was sure you’d have gotten hit” Jordan said “Boys go back to the restaurant and tell Emily I have TJ.” Uncle Brayden said “Don’t even think about
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TJ will be doing better very soon. I promise. He is learning that their are more and more lies around him. I do a time jump in 18 to get him to college. He is doing better at that point. It's their father's place. Jack is a very successful lawyer don't forget that. I had found a two story place for around $36 Million a few months ago and tried like hell to get my friend to buy it. I told him I would rent the in-law suit for $5 a month He didn't think I was funny and he could have afforded the place but wants a brownstone in a specific place. He is why I am very familiar with this part of the city.
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He avoids getting hit that is the start of 17. He learns about the additional family in 18. That area of NYC is very congested and busy so at that time of day there would tons of cars to avoid. I've seen people run out into the street and narrowly miss getting struck.
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TJ will learn their fate by chapter 18. We will also jump to him starting school.
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I rewrote the middle part based off feedback. I am filling in some gaps that we will NOT see Dylan or Sebastian again. Dylan's mom has a heart and is concerned that TJ gets the help he needs. TJ's dad worked for the Army but moonlighted with the CIA, Brayden was CIA and so are Kellan and Jordan. A lot of this plays into who TJ is. He is having a hard time with a relationship because he was raped. He is trying to move on but is stuck in second gear. I promise by chapter 18 things will get back on track as we will Jump to TJ and J.C being at school.
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Nothing publicly will come out BUT wait for the end of next chapter. Its got more curves mountain road.
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I'm glad someone was on hand to revive you. I wanted to give Jeff someone to be with. I am not sure where Ron is going with Dancing but this is what I have happening. I know from how Ron has written Dancing he probably has a lot of people wonder if there is any straight people in the school so I made a joke about it. So think about this. "I saw Grayson and Beau talking and Beau got this huge smile and patted G on the shoulder." What could they be talking about and how would that upset TJ. It is address in the next chapter. After TJ avoids being run over that is.
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No you were not. It made sense to me but if my readers can't follow then it does no good. Thank you for letting me know.
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Ok... I changed it again. Let me know if reads smoother
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Re-read the section and let me know what you think.
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Ok let me add some clarity to that part. I figured it was obvious that they took out Dylan and Sebastian The people who did it was Kellan and Jordan
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The conversation between Emily and Brayden?
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Which part?
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I was a bit surprised that Caroline would call me. I took the call in the study. “Hello Caroline.” “Hello Emily, we haven’t officially met but I spoke with Liz this morning and I wanted to call you and apologize for my son’s behavior. I know it doesn’t mean much but I just found few days ago what happened. My soon to be ex-husband called and told me Dylan was missing and wanted to know if he was with me or if I gave him any money. I told him I had not seen him in a quite a while as I
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At the moment he does not.
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Few more bumps before he levels out. We have a small time jump next chapter.
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Trace is a possibility but he wasn't there during the talk. We shall see who it is soon and by soon I mean chapter 16
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Very true. He is going to need space and I think dorm living wouldn't help.
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I don't but hey why not? I am sure you got some too. Just wait for this twist. @Wesley8890 loan @weinerdog some heart meds... he might need them the next chapter.
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@Wesley8890 Chapter 16 will hold some answers. I think it's time to lay out what happened.
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I would love to hear them. Why don't you PM me your theories
