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  1. albertnothlit
    thank you. When I was a teenager I also did a couple of things I'm not proud of, just because I decided to give in to peer pressure. I guess I put a little bit of that into this chapter.
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    thank you for reviewing, even if I do realize that this story is a bit of a downer
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    Unfortunately, reason and guilt don't often go hand-in-hand
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    Yeah. Living by trying to be just like everybody else may appear safe, but sometimes it's the road to disappointment.
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    Chapter 9 The sun is setting across the ocean. It feels like I am a thousand miles away from anywhere, standing here, at the edge of the deadly cliffs. There is no more wind anymore; everything around me is quiet except for the low murmur of the waves far below, among the sharp rocks that jut out from the water. I look at the ocean for a while, following the motion of the foam and the surf that fades into a solid gray-blue color further out and away from the coast. With the sun going d
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    Thank you kindly! I'm glad I was able to capture the teenage psyche, or at least a tiny fraction of it.
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    wow. you've read my mind - or rather, each of the character's minds. I have, sadly, seen people react just like Josh's mother in similar circumstances. The unwillingness to even discuss the person who has passed away is both heartbreaking and infuriating.
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    sometimes, even people who are clueless about how to interact with people make a conscious decision to try and do something about it. Unfortunately, the results aren't always positive
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    two more chapters to go
  10. albertnothlit
    very perceptive! Kate does understand a lot more than even Josh himself concerning his relationship with Nathan
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    perhaps not even Josh is sure what he feels, or doesn't feel...
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    Chapter 8 I leave my house by the back door so I won't have to talk to my mother again. I guess I won’t be using her car after all. From the curb it's a short walk to the street that eventually leads out of town and becomes a trail further up into the cliffs and I hurry, eager to get there already. I put my hands in my pockets and feel the hard outline of my phone in there. I'm curious about Nathan's video, but I'm not sure I want to play whatever it is he made. I shouldn’t have decrypted
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    Chapter 7 I finally get to my house, still thinking. It's early afternoon and my father isn't home. I see my mother's car in the garage, though. I hesitate, thinking whether I should go inside or not. I still have to get to the cliffs before dark, which shouldn't be a problem even if I have to walk all the way there-- but if I can borrow her car I would get there much more quickly. I slow down as I approach, debating with myself. I still don't want to talk to anyone just yet, but if I
  14. albertnothlit
    thank you for reviewing! things will take a turn for the worse soon, I'm afraid.
  15. albertnothlit
    thanks for the review! I actually considered adding another chapter but ultimately decided it wasn't needed. Feedback is always appreciated, though!
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    there is a thin line between cluelessness and deliberate ambiguity - and Josh might not even be aware he's treading it
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    thank you for reviewing!
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    Chapter 6 Nathan's house is just around the corner, and even though it's right on the way to my place and I've taken this road a hundred times, I actually stop just as I come within sight of it. It's empty now, or at least it looks that way. I haven't seen Nathan's mother at all since Nathan jumped, which is good, I guess. One less person to ask me questions I don't really have the answers for. I mean, I could technically be considered Nathan's best friend. Nevertheless, when you got o
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    thank you very much!
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    thank you for reviewing! I'll keep those updates comin'
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    Yup, most definitely. And jealousy can be a bad thing.
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    Chapter 5 I leave the art school with the decrypted file safely on my phone. Now I am walking past the Chili's. There's lots of people inside, eating and having fun. This is the place where I first worked up the courage to ask Kate out, and it used to be one of my favorite spots in town. I haven't been there in a while, though. I look quickly away. I'm not in the mood for food, and when I compare how I feel now to the way I felt that night, a million years ago, it's like I'm seeing a life
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    thank you very much! I selected the mixture of tenses to reflect the different parts of each chapter. As a writer, though, I also try and stay away from present tense if I can because if not, then it's really easy to slip back into past tense as you're writing. You have no idea how much I had to correct this story...
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    thank you for reviewing! I'm glad you're sticking with the story
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    as you point out, Nathan needs to work a lot on his social skills. Sometimes it's difficult for people like him to connect with others
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