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    Chapter 8 I leave my house by the back door so I won't have to talk to my mother again. I guess I won’t be using her car after all. From the curb it's a short walk to the street that eventually leads out of town and becomes a trail further up into the cliffs and I hurry, eager to get there already. I put my hands in my pockets and feel the hard outline of my phone in there. I'm curious about Nathan's video, but I'm not sure I want to play whatever it is he made. I shouldn’t have decrypted
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    Chapter 7 I finally get to my house, still thinking. It's early afternoon and my father isn't home. I see my mother's car in the garage, though. I hesitate, thinking whether I should go inside or not. I still have to get to the cliffs before dark, which shouldn't be a problem even if I have to walk all the way there-- but if I can borrow her car I would get there much more quickly. I slow down as I approach, debating with myself. I still don't want to talk to anyone just yet, but if I
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    thank you for reviewing! things will take a turn for the worse soon, I'm afraid.
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    thanks for the review! I actually considered adding another chapter but ultimately decided it wasn't needed. Feedback is always appreciated, though!
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    there is a thin line between cluelessness and deliberate ambiguity - and Josh might not even be aware he's treading it
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    thank you for reviewing!
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    Chapter 6 Nathan's house is just around the corner, and even though it's right on the way to my place and I've taken this road a hundred times, I actually stop just as I come within sight of it. It's empty now, or at least it looks that way. I haven't seen Nathan's mother at all since Nathan jumped, which is good, I guess. One less person to ask me questions I don't really have the answers for. I mean, I could technically be considered Nathan's best friend. Nevertheless, when you got o
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    thank you very much!
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    thank you for reviewing! I'll keep those updates comin'
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    Yup, most definitely. And jealousy can be a bad thing.
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    Chapter 5 I leave the art school with the decrypted file safely on my phone. Now I am walking past the Chili's. There's lots of people inside, eating and having fun. This is the place where I first worked up the courage to ask Kate out, and it used to be one of my favorite spots in town. I haven't been there in a while, though. I look quickly away. I'm not in the mood for food, and when I compare how I feel now to the way I felt that night, a million years ago, it's like I'm seeing a life
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    thank you very much! I selected the mixture of tenses to reflect the different parts of each chapter. As a writer, though, I also try and stay away from present tense if I can because if not, then it's really easy to slip back into past tense as you're writing. You have no idea how much I had to correct this story...
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    thank you for reviewing! I'm glad you're sticking with the story
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    as you point out, Nathan needs to work a lot on his social skills. Sometimes it's difficult for people like him to connect with others
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    Single-mindedness coupled with a compulsive personality is definitely not a good match
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    Chapter 4. Going to the cliffs At last, I get to the Art Design school. I saw Leo driving by earlier, but he was with his girlfriend so he didn't stop and only waved at me as they passed. I haven't really hung out with any of the guys since I heard about Nathan, but thankfully they haven't called me out on it yet. It's funny, though. At the beginning of the year I used to hang out with them all the time and I thought it was the coolest thing ever to be part of their group. Now I'm not so sur
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    Yup. One time at high school was enough for me, too
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    I know - though I like to think that kids are slowly becoming more tolerant these days, if only a little...
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    tbh, I don't know what I'd do if I were in Josh's shoes...
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    thanks! Josh has a few tough choices ahead of him, that's for sure
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    Chapter 3. Trying out for the team I've walked right up to the high school grounds somehow, and it's not even on my way to the cliffs. The low red-brick building and the big fields behind it look strange now that they are mostly deserted because of the summer break. The grass is a little bit overgrown and everything is too clean, too orderly without students. I walk past the grounds slowly, thinking that at least I won't have to sit through a solemn but superficial service for Nathan in t
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    sometimes the best friends you make are those most different from yourself
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    thanks!
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    Filming a cat

    albertnothlit commented on albertnothlit's story chapter in Filming a cat

    Thank you! You raise an excellent point. Some stories are, well, just sad.
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    That seems to be the most frequently asked question, and I hope my story will show just what went wrong.
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