Zuri

Yeah, no, you can't drive any faster than the fast lane. So, are you saying, someone, we know, will apply for this job? Mark? A little social engineering could do wonder in some cases at least. Liquid as in … alcoholic? If Mo is indicating, that mac and cheese was the only eatable thing in Fred's freezer, what did Mo go to Walmart (why the dash in between btw?) for, except for the phone? Well, yeah, Mo wouldn't have the time for that himself. luxury! So, is this, because Fred is so damn popular and everything drops into his lap, or does he have a completely different, maybe even less sympathetic reason?

What we know is, that Grey already had to correct his opinion about her the day she disappeared. Like Beatrice, she might have her own agenda. But this agenda might be way bigger than pack politics … 🤔

If anyone has foreseen anything, then it would have been Beatrice, however, Beatrice and Grey's parents might know each other better than Grey is aware of. And if it's true, they will find Mark, they might be able to find Beatrice, too.

Well, in a metaphorical way … 🤷‍♂️

It wasn't meant that seriously 😉 However, exposing a co-worker in front of a client might not be a nice way.

I mean, we already expected that, but that's still tough 😯 Great, first, Fred created a huge workload of reviewing Silases cases and now, everyone gets even more work because of Sebastian leaving. Fred, ratting out your co-workers doesn't look that sympathetic 😉

And that's the one aspect of your world building, you avoid going into specifics 😜 spoiled kids 😜 "Sebastian, could you please repeat the insult one more time, this time breaking the fourth wall, speaking directly into Grey's camera? Great! And could you step one step back, so that half of your face is in the shadows? Stop, stay this way. Perfect! And action!" Wait, Mark isn't dead, but just in another story …? 🤯

someone got killed (or didn't he?), a sex scene—I'd say, that's not nothing 😉 Oh, I absolutely take no issue in that particular aspect—that's a great concept 👍 😱 You can't have your cake and eat it 😜 Is Grey a professional DOP, is he just an iPhone filming hobbyist, or more like the GoPro adventure documentary kind of guy? I can't really comment on that, since I don't have the full picture, however, as you don't only have a main plot but also subplots, as well as character development and backstory exposition, it's hardly that bad.

✅ Vivid Descriptions: Grey describes how other characters smell quite transparent, I would say. mischievous vanilla That you've been quite graphic lately sure goes without saying. imagination running wild ✅ Dynamic Characters: Yes, there are voices in their heads ^^ But yeah, not only you love your characters. They are quite … human, so to speak. One has to laugh with them as one has to suffer with them. quite bonding 😱 Strong Emotional Resonance: Ahhhhhh. 👀 Visual Storytelling: "I have so much dialog." But do you? I was never aware of that 🤔 ⏳ Pacing and Structure: Although, I don't get bored (always as captivating as it is entertaining), I sometimes feel like we could have made some more plot progress if that makes any sense 🤷‍♂️ Use of Dialogs and Internal Monologs: It's probably not a secret when I say, I'm not the biggest fan of your wolf voice, though, I can see their use as a stylistic device ✅ Dramatic Tension and Conflict: In the pack, boy, oh, boy, that's tension. If that isn't, I don't know what is ❓ Imaginative and Dynamic Scenes: Do you think in camera angles, coverage, lighting, etc.?

Why, then, do you think, you get so may "" reactions to your comments? 😉

@Dan South Don't give drown ideas! He might not have the time to publish chapters when he dives into pornography full-time 😱 The views–comments ratio is actually one of the best for this chapter: https://gayauthors.org/author/drown/stats/oregon-in-the-fall/

So, no retcons then? And I don't mean the Torchwood ones No, no, stay with us. We need you to stay alive. Someone needs to publish the rest of the story 😜 Okay, okay, I admit, I don't only want you to stay alive because of your story. You are also a decent person apart from that 😉 Take your time. People enjoy being tortured by waiting, even though, they would never admit it 😉

Yeah, could you rewrite chapter 18 to only show Clara's perspective? 😜 So much more entertaining 😜 *playing with drown's insecurities off* I actually only know her from a parody by a German comedian 😂 Besides, that's Katy Perry, not Jennifer Rush: Damn! Would have been too easy 😅 They are gods 😉

Clara at her best 😂 Well, you are Dave's/Clara's furry pet Yeah, essentially this: 😜 Who wouldn't be jealous of a god? 😉 Well, this isn't exactly news. He already had a test run with Mark ^^ Grey, kinda explained that before: His brother and father are so furious, they don't seem to have come to the realization that comes with “Ugh. You’re mated to a guy. […]”, even though Luis should be aware of pack politics—if not he, who would? Apparently, she's finally freed from her husband, at least as her leader as pack politics make her to submit to Grey and Dave instead, whether Luis likes that or not, as must he. So, he has the same taste as Mark:

touché—me neither, except for a subordinate clause. Does it run wild through the forest, chasing a hare and … No! Stop!

Isn't that essentially, what I said? Aside from me assuming, Wepwawet is a reincarnation from an earlier period from which the temple is—not even Wepwawet might be aware of. But this might just as well merely be my imagination running wild. Err, yes, justify. Sometimes, my English disappoints me 😬 Oh, you confused English classes with Sex Ed in high school? That is indeed telling … Anakin's flirting sure was more vegetarian ^^

Nice try to rectify graphic, explicit sex scenes 😜

Maybe, Grey's wolf chose to inhabit the son of Grey's parents and they in return named him Grey. Something like that—hope, that makes sense 🤔

Says a lot about your predictability 😜

Poor Sebastian …

"Welcome to the Federation ethics discussion panel. Let's greet our attendees: Mr. Spock and Worf!" "I don't see any logic in killing a member of your society as a punishment." "This is not an honorable death. A warrior would not go to Sto'Vo'Kor after this. But it is a mercy killing."

Somehow, I read this in the voice of either Data from Star Trek: The Next Generation or Seven of Nine/Tuvok from Star Trek: Voyager 🤨 Not to make fun of it but rather how chilling it is that, even though, having this particular job, a human can word it like that in a very matter-of-fact way. Let's really hope, Silas didn't go that far. I know, Bully would, but Silas is not that much of a bully, isn't he?

But werewolves and what not. 😲

Who hasn't made fun of Robert Pattinson glowing? But well, Olivia has seen Peter glowing as well in Fringe, so it's not at all uncommon.

Well, and ugly ones, apparently 🤷‍♂️ Not my words—his.