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And so concludes this Egypt expedition, as Dr. McLavic ☑️ off another fully completed item from his 'Bucket List'. But how big is that 🪣? How long is that 📝? Jimmy, can you turn that list this way just a bit more 👀 ? It ain't over til it's over. Or "until the fat (opera) lady sings", and I don't hear anyone warming up in the wings. Thank you Calvin @CLJobe for this conclusion, with a well written (interim) Epilogue. Perhaps a Father and Son journey together, a road trip to the new Crystal Mountain Lake Resort, 15 years later with Grandpa David, surrounded by grandchildren, a successful architect Son and his partner Bobby? "Please Sir, We want more" 💞 🫂
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Is another @CLJobe adventure drawing to an end with Dr. (Phd) David McLavic's latest (and final?) Egyptian expedition having found the missing Pharaoh? And why the only 'Step' pyramid? Or are others, in Eqypt or perhaps South America, lying partially hidden and waiting to be discovered? Or will Dr. David return to academia? Write another book? Hmm?
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Visits and A Problem Arises
Anton_Cloche commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Visits and A Problem Arises
It's 🐪-day (which rhymes with rump) aka Wednesday in northern hemisphere. ICYMI 😉. Alledgedly visual aids help mem ... what was I saying? -
Visits and A Problem Arises
Anton_Cloche commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Visits and A Problem Arises
Billy and Todd's 'torpedos' may do more to "sink their ships". In a few weeks ML may need a doctor's help to resolve a 'problem.' She's old enough to be fertile, and Billy's direct deposit, or Todd's 'proximity' semen, on her vulva and then rubbed inside by ML, both could result in a pregnancy. Her apology "rings hollow" as completely insincere, as only a self-centered and self-indulgent ML can be. Amy's reaction to George Jr being possibly gay can also be a problem to deal with. @Lee Wilson, Larry and Lionel need to be George's adopted brothers and nothing should stand in the way of that happening.- 43 comments
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@empath I remember seeing the movie Sounder as a child, but of coarse as a child the reactions are different, without the education or knowledge of how to read between the lines to see other meanings and messages of how the story can be more relevant, depending one's situation. Teyshawn literally implores Lawon to read the story. And when he does, it is a 💡moment for Lawon. He sees himself in the story of Sounder. He understands the connection to Cabrini Green, to him and to Teyshawn, and it brings some meaning to Tuck's death. And perhaps a connection to Liberty Academy, to E&E and 🤞a chance meeting with poor Henry. Thank you for this reminder @empath. Glad to have you back. Be well. Take care. 🤗
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More Doctors, Bouncy Houses, and Time Goes By
Anton_Cloche commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in More Doctors, Bouncy Houses, and Time Goes By
ML and an apology? Not in any universe, metaverse or alternate reality do those go together. Just like "government of the people, by the people, for the people, shall not perish from the earth” does not coexist with reality (in story). Checks and balances should have caught what was happening before the unthinkable occurred, ripping apart the lives of so many, including our boys of Clinton; George, Lionel and Larry. Larry's dream of his late father's talking to him and reassuring him will start to help heal his broken 💔. Ben Fitzgerald leaves his stint as the 'Attending Dr' at the Best Western hotel caring for survivors of the Clinton bio-toxin virus, to continue his medical studies in Oncology, as his 2nd year of medical college shifts from the virus -devastated east coast to Stanford CA. to begin his 3rd year clinical training. "He chose Stanford Children's Health - Lucile Packard Children's Hospital in Palo Alto. George, Lionel, and Lorenzo had made an impression on him during their time at the hotel and he would focus on pediatrics after graduation". Ryan also pursues his medical education, as an audiologist (perhaps more as an ENT Dr ?) and after a phone call with George's father Dr. Dutton, accepts an invitation to visit the three boys. Ryan explained to Dr. D.: "I missed everyone from the hotel after we all broke apart. To be honest, I missed the boys the most. I got to feeling like a big brother, or uncle. Totally platonic. " Let the healing continue 💝 -
So many questions about Bronx Warren (imagining him looking like Tony Manero from Saturday Night Fever), working for his "Mom and Pap" in Ricci's ristorante. Cal tells Warren he can't stay out late on a school night, but is Warren a senior in HS? A Freshman in college (so 3-5 years older than Cal), or has he dropped out? Maybe more clarity on the next chapter ?
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Starts will an M and ends with something akin to Hell? Or ate you just picking from low-hanging fruit? Speaking of, (sorry for bad segue. Although a really good / bad Segway would be Donald trying to ride one like GWB... 😲 but I digress), without falling into regional generalizations of knuckle-dragging, mouth breathing people who bully others just because they MAY be different. Billy may be a product of his environment growing up. Young George already had to grow up too soon, as did Lionel and Lorenzo / Larry. At some stage expect nightmares and flashbacks will happen to the boys 💔 as PTSD sets in with the realization of the deaths of family. These 3 brothers will stay bonded together even more than biological siblings. 🤗
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[Memory, Freshman Year, October] – The Extra
Anton_Cloche commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, October] – The Extra
“Alexander Montgomery III?” We're ready for your colonoscopy. Unfortunately, the 'regular' colonoscope's camera isn't working properly, but because we don't want to inconvenience you, we have a backup. -
Amy Moves In and Marie's New Home
Anton_Cloche commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Amy Moves In and Marie's New Home
Truth be told (and apologies to anyone inadvertently offended), @Sherye Story Reader that acronym applies equally or more so to males of every description. Or as my nieces point out, it's like girls, women, "Housewives of ___________" calling each other "dude". 🙄 -
Amy Moves In and Marie's New Home
Anton_Cloche commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Amy Moves In and Marie's New Home
Last thoughts on this chapter considering both @pvtguy and @Lee Wilson responses: 🔺There were, and still are laws in the U.S. regarding the legality (and illegality - 32 states) of 'cousins' sex and/or marriage. Most originally based on religion and that inbreeding adversely affects (lessens the intelligence and health of) generations. (cue 'Deliverance' movie scenes, banjo playing, Hillbillies and an advance lament). 🔺"Rode hard and put away wet" normally refers to equines. 🔺How blameworthy is ML if she's a consequence the first above? Or in addition to being a beotch, is a dullard who just Can't Understand Normal Thinking. 🙄 Getting off ... -
Amy Moves In and Marie's New Home
Anton_Cloche commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Amy Moves In and Marie's New Home
Tennessee isn't just home to Piggly Wiggly grocery stores (founded 1916 in Memphis TN), It's now home to a wiggly piggly in ML judging from her learning how 'drive stick' with Billy. How long her Aunt and Uncle let ML live in their home will depend on when the video gets released. Even with both Billy and ML being "willing participants in sex" their age will have this effect: "Section 39-13-506 - Mitigated statutory rape - Statutory rape - Aggravated statutory rape State of Tennessee Statute Citation: § 39-13-506 (2024): (b) Statutory rape is the unlawful sexual penetration of a victim by the defendant or of the defendant by the victim when: (1) The victim is at least thirteen (13) but less than fifteen (15) years of age and the defendant is at least four (4) years but less than ten (10) years older than the victim; -
Especially when they learn the prospective adoptive father (of their claimed 'long lost cousins') is a well off plastic surgeon. The money-grubbing cockroaches will happily sign away any responsibility on exchage for $$
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The boys saying a final goodbye to their family members was definately a need for a few tissues. 😢 😭 Larry (Lorenzo's) the hardest at his age the finality of it won't hit until later. Lionel will also have issues (nightmares ?) when he thinks of his little brother Jimmy. And George, saying goodbye to his Mother, at least he could do that himself.
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Perhaps (?) a little harsh (put down the flaming torches and pitch forks). Maybe @Lee Wilson plans to honor the younger boys with something to make them smile and just be kids (despite their sad losses of family), like turning ML into a ...
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Expedition team won't know what treasures lie within until they "OPEN that 🚪". Now where's that can of WD-40 @CLJobe?
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Dr. McLavic and his team arrive in Egypt and immediately get to work. And while it looks like someone else's may have tied to gain access to this Pharoh's "Step" pyramid, hopefully no one has found Pharoah's burial chamber 🤞. Nicely paced story @CLJobe and a good
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@CLJobe is laying the foundation for an expedition that will dig deep to uncover what lies underground. Or will it? Another thing that came to mind was my grandfather talking about 'road trip' comedy movies starring two actors / comedians Bob Hope and Bing Crosby, including one called "Off on the road to Moracco" that featured camels 🐪 (aka 'beasts of burden' used on expeditions in Egypt ).
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@Jeff Burton, with everthing you're trying to keep juggling, 🥎 🐤 🍎 🎳 🎱 🔨 💣, I'm worried you may confuse the order and wind up trying to bite something other than the apple. OUCH. Or you change your mind (and direction) more than a huge 🍊. Is there more than enough 'encrypted" material to support a multi book saga? Most definitely! (just look at 'Misson Impossible' or to a lesser extent 'Bourne'), OR are you hoping we're all a little hard of herring 🤔 ? FYI, before it was launched in 1996 by Shire-Richwood Pharm, as a treatment for ADHD (and "assorted ailments and conditions" by adding different 'compounds'), Adderall was known in the 1960's as an amphetamine (salts) treatment for weight loss. Chemists and Pharma scientists joked they should just "add them all (the chemicals) together to see what the resulting medication might treat." Was "add them all" the genesis for what was trademarked as "Adderall"? Seems as likely as not. If truth is stranger than fiction, and Joshua's story arch becomes a multi book series (and suddenly Carlos' 'CJ' comes to mind); 'Encryption', "Detection', 'Reflection", 'Dedication' and 'Completion' immediately come to mind. Others are percolating. 🤞 Stay well. Be well. 🫂
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"soon" is a "relative" term, and as Einstein explained in his "Time is relative" theory: "A second in one time-frame may be longer compared to a second in another time-frame reference". Also , there are many "relatives" in play in Joshua's saga. If "Good things come to those who wait.", is this next chapter going to be the equivalent of a bases-loaded homerun in the 12th inning of a tied World Series deciding baseball game? Or more like you being in line waiting for the barista to finally make your coffee?
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A great continuation of Dr. McLavic's original expedition to Egypt for an archeological 'dig' that he had not finished. @CLJobe your McLavic family stories of two generations of David, father and son, continue to be very interesting reading which will hopefully continue with sequels or spinoffs of supporting characters, Uncle Joe, Bobby and Timmy at Crystal Lake; Jimmy in this story? BTW, IMHO, if website owners / operators are monetizing (earning $$$ from) ads inserted into the stories of hard working authors, who are not compensated for creating the very thing (stories) that are the only reason people visit the site, then 10% of the ad income (or 10% of surcharge for "Ad Free' subscription) should be renumerated / paid to authors. That seems only fair.
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Methinks the good @drsawzall, @Lee Wilson and others are too focused on the combination locks securing the box than on the chest itself, its contents, and that it was buried inside a muslin 'gunny sack' near a tree on private property: " ... the box looks as if it was not only stained, but it was coated with a lacquer as well. Now, I’m curious to find out what is inside the chest that someone felt it had to be buried in order to protect its contents, since it seems he took great care of it before burying it. I’d also like to discover the answer to what might have kept the scent attached to the chest and led us to discover it in the first place. I think we should come back here later as Bear and Buck and see if we can follow the scent to determine who buried the chest out here in the first place. This might be a dead end, but I still want to try to discover as much as I can about who buried it here.” Speaking from experience, a hand-crafted wooden chest, 'stained and lacquered' to protect it for years to come, is an important place and may have been used to hold treasurers and keepsakes of it's owner (like the baseball caps, which would retain the scent of it's wearer through sweat, skin and/or hair follicles). The chest, placed within a muslin cloth 'gunny sack' before being buried near a tree, may have been to protect the box and its contents, or as a tribute to an agricultural (farming) heritage where such sacks once held life sustaining grains, flours etc.*. The favorite baseball caps, perhaps of a child, surround a plastic container and perhaps a hidden treasure within. Or, very likely, the plastic container, ''wearing' two baseball caps, holds the cremains of that cherished person. 😢 * Some people, for various reasons, may be interred in or covered by a shroud (cloth, often muslin) as a means to protect the body, or in lieu of a coffin, if not embalmed, in order to speed decomposition and reintegration into the earth. "Completing the circle of life".
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Why is the Madonna VOGUE soundtrack missing? 😄
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Cargo hold door floating?
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JFCOAS (Catholics and a few Christians should know what that 'colloquialism' is. Everyone else, 😒) ! If Blair does give Loose 👄 Lamont that 'accessory', it won't be the first (or last) time that bag lives up to its Furkin-Birkin nickname. 🤣 As for Cal and the amazing 'antipasto' Warren at Ricci's? Don't lose that number Cal. In fact, text him asap. Worst case scenario Cal will get extra 'Grissini Torinesi', wrapped in prosciutto served with extra salsa di famiglia. 😋 What's on the menu at Ricci's? Preferably something davvero speciale to take home? I am eagerly awaiting more tantalizing chapters @irivera.
