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Hmm? Could Mac and Devin morph into "altered" animals, like pigs with wings, that shit all over Louella and her car? Just imagine the cop's reaction when that old bat Parsons reports that to Fort Collins PD. Yep, ... "When pigs fly". Just in time for Christmas, some grinch gets a well deserved Psych Hold. ๐ฉ๐ฉ๐ฉ๐ฉ๐ฉ๐ฉ๐ฉ๐ฉ
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But then I remember this: "Angelica froze. Seemingly disconnected memories leapt in her mind as the blood drained from her face. โOh my God!โ Devon and Sandra turned in time to watch helplessly as Angelica Samson crumpled heavily to the floor, neither having a clue that her entire, fragile world had collapsed from underneath her". Has Angelica found out about the mysterious bandaged (like a mummy) boy just down the hall from Walter III's ICU bed? Once 'Harry's' nurse went to tell FBI Devon (in his ICU bed) about the young white boy found by EMT's rushing to Cabrini Green, did she tell him while Angelica was within hearing distance? Had Angelica returned to Harry's room to comfort him, only to put together the puzzle pieces in her mind, (likely seeing the name 'HARRY' written above his bed?) ๐ณ ๐ฎ ๐ฑ
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Fallout, and Another Hiccup
Anton_Cloche commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Fallout, and Another Hiccup
Cramped fingers and hands make writing or typing difficult and likely a cause of delays in completing other work. Unless you're bidexterous (aka ambidextrous), in which case you can give yourself a hand. ๐ฎ๐- 34 comments
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Marie-Louise Gets Busted
Anton_Cloche commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Marie-Louise Gets Busted
Unlike UK (and other countries) where "the Postman always 'rings' twice", in U.S. they usually open 'box' or slot and stuff it in. Unless it's a large package. Like ALL 'RED" states, TN (Tennessee) has an absolute BAN. Other than "back alley" abortions, IF she is found to be LESS THAN 6 WEEKS pregnant, Aunt and Uncle can road trip 371.9 miles to Atlanta Georgia to a proper medical clinic for an outpatient abortion. (OR simply take the bitch to vet and also get IT SPAYED). It can be done laparoscopically, so once healed ML will look 'normal' to resume being "pass around Pat". After surgery, they can take ML and the boys out for some famous Atlanta foods like collared greens, pornbread, fried chicken and top it off with Banana pudding with praline nuts and cream. Hmm. ๐ (although ML too dumb to understand irony). -
And so concludes this Egypt expedition, as Dr. McLavic โ๏ธ off another fully completed item from his 'Bucket List'. But how big is that ๐ชฃ? How long is that ๐? Jimmy, can you turn that list this way just a bit more ๐ ? It ain't over til it's over. Or "until the fat (opera) lady sings", and I don't hear anyone warming up in the wings. Thank you Calvin @CLJobe for this conclusion, with a well written (interim) Epilogue. Perhaps a Father and Son journey together, a road trip to the new Crystal Mountain Lake Resort, 15 years later with Grandpa David, surrounded by grandchildren, a successful architect Son and his partner Bobby? "Please Sir, We want more" ๐ ๐ซ
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Is another @CLJobe adventure drawing to an end with Dr. (Phd) David McLavic's latest (and final?) Egyptian expedition having found the missing Pharaoh? And why the only 'Step' pyramid? Or are others, in Eqypt or perhaps South America, lying partially hidden and waiting to be discovered? Or will Dr. David return to academia? Write another book? Hmm?
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Visits and A Problem Arises
Anton_Cloche commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Visits and A Problem Arises
It's ๐ช-day (which rhymes with rump) aka Wednesday in northern hemisphere. ICYMI ๐. Alledgedly visual aids help mem ... what was I saying? -
Visits and A Problem Arises
Anton_Cloche commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Visits and A Problem Arises
Billy and Todd's 'torpedos' may do more to "sink their ships". In a few weeks ML may need a doctor's help to resolve a 'problem.' She's old enough to be fertile, and Billy's direct deposit, or Todd's 'proximity' semen, on her vulva and then rubbed inside by ML, both could result in a pregnancy. Her apology "rings hollow" as completely insincere, as only a self-centered and self-indulgent ML can be. Amy's reaction to George Jr being possibly gay can also be a problem to deal with. @Lee Wilson, Larry and Lionel need to be George's adopted brothers and nothing should stand in the way of that happening.- 43 comments
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@empath I remember seeing the movie Sounder as a child, but of coarse as a child the reactions are different, without the education or knowledge of how to read between the lines to see other meanings and messages of how the story can be more relevant, depending one's situation. Teyshawn literally implores Lawon to read the story. And when he does, it is a ๐กmoment for Lawon. He sees himself in the story of Sounder. He understands the connection to Cabrini Green, to him and to Teyshawn, and it brings some meaning to Tuck's death. And perhaps a connection to Liberty Academy, to E&E and ๐คa chance meeting with poor Henry. Thank you for this reminder @empath. Glad to have you back. Be well. Take care. ๐ค
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More Doctors, Bouncy Houses, and Time Goes By
Anton_Cloche commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in More Doctors, Bouncy Houses, and Time Goes By
ML and an apology? Not in any universe, metaverse or alternate reality do those go together. Just like "government of the people, by the people, for the people, shall not perish from the earthโ does not coexist with reality (in story). Checks and balances should have caught what was happening before the unthinkable occurred, ripping apart the lives of so many, including our boys of Clinton; George, Lionel and Larry. Larry's dream of his late father's talking to him and reassuring him will start to help heal his broken ๐. Ben Fitzgerald leaves his stint as the 'Attending Dr' at the Best Western hotel caring for survivors of the Clinton bio-toxin virus, to continue his medical studies in Oncology, as his 2nd year of medical college shifts from the virus -devastated east coast to Stanford CA. to begin his 3rd year clinical training. "He chose Stanford Children's Health - Lucile Packard Children's Hospital in Palo Alto. George, Lionel, and Lorenzo had made an impression on him during their time at the hotel and he would focus on pediatrics after graduation". Ryan also pursues his medical education, as an audiologist (perhaps more as an ENT Dr ?) and after a phone call with George's father Dr. Dutton, accepts an invitation to visit the three boys. Ryan explained to Dr. D.: "I missed everyone from the hotel after we all broke apart. To be honest, I missed the boys the most. I got to feeling like a big brother, or uncle. Totally platonic. " Let the healing continue ๐ -
So many questions about Bronx Warren (imagining him looking like Tony Manero from Saturday Night Fever), working for his "Mom and Pap" in Ricci's ristorante. Cal tells Warren he can't stay out late on a school night, but is Warren a senior in HS? A Freshman in college (so 3-5 years older than Cal), or has he dropped out? Maybe more clarity on the next chapter ?
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Starts will an M and ends with something akin to Hell? Or ate you just picking from low-hanging fruit? Speaking of, (sorry for bad segue. Although a really good / bad Segway would be Donald trying to ride one like GWB... ๐ฒ but I digress), without falling into regional generalizations of knuckle-dragging, mouth breathing people who bully others just because they MAY be different. Billy may be a product of his environment growing up. Young George already had to grow up too soon, as did Lionel and Lorenzo / Larry. At some stage expect nightmares and flashbacks will happen to the boys ๐ as PTSD sets in with the realization of the deaths of family. These 3 brothers will stay bonded together even more than biological siblings. ๐ค
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[Memory, Freshman Year, October] โ The Extra
Anton_Cloche commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, October] โ The Extra
โAlexander Montgomery III?โ We're ready for your colonoscopy. Unfortunately, the 'regular' colonoscope's camera isn't working properly, but because we don't want to inconvenience you, we have a backup. -
Amy Moves In and Marie's New Home
Anton_Cloche commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Amy Moves In and Marie's New Home
Truth be told (and apologies to anyone inadvertently offended), @Sherye Story Reader that acronym applies equally or more so to males of every description. Or as my nieces point out, it's like girls, women, "Housewives of ___________" calling each other "dude". ๐ -
Amy Moves In and Marie's New Home
Anton_Cloche commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Amy Moves In and Marie's New Home
Last thoughts on this chapter considering both @pvtguy and @Lee Wilson responses: ๐บThere were, and still are laws in the U.S. regarding the legality (and illegality - 32 states) of 'cousins' sex and/or marriage. Most originally based on religion and that inbreeding adversely affects (lessens the intelligence and health of) generations. (cue 'Deliverance' movie scenes, banjo playing, Hillbillies and an advance lament). ๐บ"Rode hard and put away wet" normally refers to equines. ๐บHow blameworthy is ML if she's a consequence the first above? Or in addition to being a beotch, is a dullard who just Can't Understand Normal Thinking. ๐ Getting off ... -
Amy Moves In and Marie's New Home
Anton_Cloche commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Amy Moves In and Marie's New Home
Tennessee isn't just home to Piggly Wiggly grocery stores (founded 1916 in Memphis TN), It's now home to a wiggly piggly in ML judging from her learning how 'drive stick' with Billy. How long her Aunt and Uncle let ML live in their home will depend on when the video gets released. Even with both Billy and ML being "willing participants in sex" their age will have this effect: "Section 39-13-506 - Mitigated statutory rape - Statutory rape - Aggravated statutory rape State of Tennessee Statute Citation: ยง 39-13-506 (2024): (b) Statutory rape is the unlawful sexual penetration of a victim by the defendant or of the defendant by the victim when: (1) The victim is at least thirteen (13) but less than fifteen (15) years of age and the defendant is at least four (4) years but less than ten (10) years older than the victim; -
Especially when they learn the prospective adoptive father (of their claimed 'long lost cousins') is a well off plastic surgeon. The money-grubbing cockroaches will happily sign away any responsibility on exchage for $$
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The boys saying a final goodbye to their family members was definately a need for a few tissues. ๐ข ๐ญ Larry (Lorenzo's) the hardest at his age the finality of it won't hit until later. Lionel will also have issues (nightmares ?) when he thinks of his little brother Jimmy. And George, saying goodbye to his Mother, at least he could do that himself.
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Perhaps (?) a little harsh (put down the flaming torches and pitch forks). Maybe @Lee Wilson plans to honor the younger boys with something to make them smile and just be kids (despite their sad losses of family), like turning ML into a ...
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Expedition team won't know what treasures lie within until they "OPEN that ๐ช". Now where's that can of WD-40 @CLJobe?
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Dr. McLavic and his team arrive in Egypt and immediately get to work. And while it looks like someone else's may have tied to gain access to this Pharoh's "Step" pyramid, hopefully no one has found Pharoah's burial chamber ๐ค. Nicely paced story @CLJobe and a good
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@CLJobe is laying the foundation for an expedition that will dig deep to uncover what lies underground. Or will it? Another thing that came to mind was my grandfather talking about 'road trip' comedy movies starring two actors / comedians Bob Hope and Bing Crosby, including one called "Off on the road to Moracco" that featured camels ๐ช (aka 'beasts of burden' used on expeditions in Egypt ).
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@Jeff Burton, with everthing you're trying to keep juggling, ๐ฅ ๐ค ๐ ๐ณ ๐ฑ ๐จ ๐ฃ, I'm worried you may confuse the order and wind up trying to bite something other than the apple. OUCH. Or you change your mind (and direction) more than a huge ๐. Is there more than enough 'encrypted" material to support a multi book saga? Most definitely! (just look at 'Misson Impossible' or to a lesser extent 'Bourne'), OR are you hoping we're all a little hard of herring ๐ค ? FYI, before it was launched in 1996 by Shire-Richwood Pharm, as a treatment for ADHD (and "assorted ailments and conditions" by adding different 'compounds'), Adderall was known in the 1960's as an amphetamine (salts) treatment for weight loss. Chemists and Pharma scientists joked they should just "add them all (the chemicals) together to see what the resulting medication might treat." Was "add them all" the genesis for what was trademarked as "Adderall"? Seems as likely as not. If truth is stranger than fiction, and Joshua's story arch becomes a multi book series (and suddenly Carlos' 'CJ' comes to mind); 'Encryption', "Detection', 'Reflection", 'Dedication' and 'Completion' immediately come to mind. Others are percolating. ๐ค Stay well. Be well. ๐ซ
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"soon" is a "relative" term, and as Einstein explained in his "Time is relative" theory: "A second in one time-frame may be longer compared to a second in another time-frame reference". Also , there are many "relatives" in play in Joshua's saga. If "Good things come to those who wait.", is this next chapter going to be the equivalent of a bases-loaded homerun in the 12th inning of a tied World Series deciding baseball game? Or more like you being in line waiting for the barista to finally make your coffee?
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A great continuation of Dr. McLavic's original expedition to Egypt for an archeological 'dig' that he had not finished. @CLJobe your McLavic family stories of two generations of David, father and son, continue to be very interesting reading which will hopefully continue with sequels or spinoffs of supporting characters, Uncle Joe, Bobby and Timmy at Crystal Lake; Jimmy in this story? BTW, IMHO, if website owners / operators are monetizing (earning $$$ from) ads inserted into the stories of hard working authors, who are not compensated for creating the very thing (stories) that are the only reason people visit the site, then 10% of the ad income (or 10% of surcharge for "Ad Free' subscription) should be renumerated / paid to authors. That seems only fair.
