Krista
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Thanks for reading! Poor ol Jackson, still has his stubborn streak intact, for sure.
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The ride back home was nearly silent. The only sound coming from the radio, kept low for any talking that we would do. I glanced over at Luke every so often, thinking that he would say something eventually. Him being quiet wasn’t like him at all, from what I knew of him anyway. I hadn’t ever really liked quiet, but I didn’t attempt to change the station or turn up the volume. I also didn’t know what to talk about, but he didn’t seem upset or angry about anything. When we pulled into the driv
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Tis that time of year again! Already some nice upsets to break a lot of brackets! I've never been a fan of Baylor, so I'm glad to see them bite it. Surprised Purdue didn't show a lot of toughness during their game though. They played Michigan State so hard. So far the PAC 12 looks a little bit weak, maybe they'll turn it around.
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Thanks for reading! I think Jackson has let some of those guards down. Is it because he's bored and Luke IS the only other person his age he can be around? Or is it because they are finding common ground being the same age, etc. It would be nice to know.. wouldn't it? I actually had this chapter ending differently. NOT going into that.. lol. But I felt it was getting a bit long, so I decided to scrap a scene, which extends the story line a bit. So! I need to get to writing.. Glad you like the characters so far!
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Thanks for reading! I understand you. Is this chapter that pushes certain characters towards a convergence. A lot can happen - needs to happen pretty soon.
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Thanks for reading! Are they going after the same thing? lol. Luke - I would hate to be in his shoes. The loss of a school, even if it isn't the most exciting place would be better than sitting at home with a pushy mother hovering over your shoulder.. lol.. I imagine. Especially the last year of high school "the best year"
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Thanks for reading! He does respect Coach Tate more than he does his parents, as far as discipline goes.. he has a lot more to lose when it comes to what Coach can take away from him, I believe. I agree, I don't think Allison is a phony either, she is just trying to find her place within Jackson's life as his girlfriend. They haven't been together that long, there's always that chance things won't work out when they're so new.. so anything to take away from her time with him, is seen as a threat. So yes, I do agree with you completely. Hopefully Jackson's other friends will make their mark on the story too. There's a lot of people I'm going to attempt to manage with this story.
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Thanks for reading! I'm glad you find the teenage voices authentic. I do find dialog that doesn't fit the person to come across as cheesy. As far as the "6 - Pack" (like the name by the way) I do want to attempt to manage them a lot better. To add some depth to a few of them in later chapters. There is a lot left for me to establish, but I do want their voices added to the mix. Hopefully I'll be able to manage all these characters a bit. Teenagers are walking and talking conflict as well. We'll see what happens between Jackson, Luke, and Allison for sure.
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Jackson's advice could give Luke courage, but not in what Jackson is thinking. It was nice having J listening to and absorbing Luke's fear and desires re: schooling. I notice he's being more natural around Luke lately, which in itself is a good development for him, no matter what happens. A nice "developmental" chapter Krista! A Great story! Thanks for reading! Jackson can listen! A little bit surprising, yes? lol. He's not too bad on the advice either, but we'll see what Luke does with it - if anything.
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Thanks for reading! I'm glad you like the story. The character is based on a story I started ages ago, I wrote myself into a corner with that one, very early on. lol. Hopefully I can keep up with these characters a bit better.
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Thanks for reading! They had a bit more fun together. Maybe this will lead to a more substantial friendship... or will it?
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Walking into the YMCA knowing I was about to get another ass chewing for being late and looking tired made me want to turn back around and leave. After the warm shower at home and the ride in Luke’s car I became stiff from the manual labor I put in earlier. I also couldn’t really read Luke, he seemed nervous about being my ride even though he volunteered when his mom offered to take me home. I knew that if she had, I would be sitting around at home talking to Derek or Toby or having them kidnap
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Thanks for reading! The mating dance.. hmm. lol. I've actually written a bunch of dancing scenes in my writing, but I like the idea of a mating dance. Jackson has grown a little bit, so maybe the parents were a wee bit right about finally laying the hammer down and grounding him a bit.. lol. Homeschooling - I wonder just how stubborn Luke's Mom Cindy will be about that...
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Thanks for reading! My beta-reader/proof reader said something similar - that there isn't real evidence that the two of them could even be interested in one another yet. Which, is intentional as well. I love that you like my dialogue as there is a crap ton of it used in my writing in general! Hopefully I can keep this story going somewhat regularly. I'm glad you like it.
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Thanks for reading! Jackson still has his moments, yes? At least he has opened his eyes a little bit more in this chapter at least. Not all of it was about himself.. or I felt he did. I wouldn't expect him to do an about-face just yet though. he's still just a teen aged boy after all.
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Can't believe I've not been paying attention to the sports forum and missed this one. I love Volleyball and Basketball. Being a tall girl those were my sports in High School. I have terrible knees to show for it too. I played Softball for a season, but I couldn't hit a softball if my life depended on it, so I quit and I think they were thankful. lol. I did Dance and Cheerleading when I was a lot younger and before I really started growing.
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Heh... Can't go wrong to be honest... Aggie = Farmboy or Military man... if you're into that.. then Longhorns = Cowboys. Too much. As for him, I'm glad he finally got waived, I'm surprised it took this long. He pretty much did the opposite of what he was supposed to do, sad that he'd rather make an ass of himself than throw a football.
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After three rounds everyone was too tired and the crates were nearly empty of balloons so Tim called it a night. I was covered with wet and dry paint, it made my clothes feel heavy and I could feel my feet squishing around in my shoes from paint that dripped down inside them. We were the last ones to leave, Tim wanted to talk to Luke about the place more. It was the only time I felt out of place and bored after the fight we had on the way here. “Ready to go?” Luke asked and I nodded as Tim s
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Happy Birthday!
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:D :D :D :D I do, Steven. Tis my favorite. :D :D
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Thanks for reading! A Date? I wouldn't want Jackson thinking that... although in my head his reaction would be hilarious.
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Thanks for reading! I'm glad some people are starting to like Jackson, I think most people wanted to strangle him a bit for being so snarky.. lol. Which is why I picked a character like him, I wanted someone a bit difficult to like.
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Thanks for reading! I'm glad you brought up the friends. So far I think I've struggled to find a nice balance with those characters in this story so far.. I'm moving the story slower than I originally anticipated - but that only means more chapters for y'all when it is all over.. lol. Hopefully it doesn't get too bogged down for me. As for this chapter, I wanted to step away from the drama a bit. So I'm glad you enjoyed them having fun. It was a fun chapter to write.
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Lol. Well he did whine a little bit, nearly got his butt sent back home. But, yeah, eventually he got there and had fun! Thanks for reading!
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Thanks for reading! I think I'm starting to settling into this story a bit better than before. It takes awhile for me to iron out a few characters - I still have a lot of things to think about though. I think the story desperately needed a lighter chapter (couple of chapters), I thought maybe it was getting too - angst-y. lol.
