Jdonley75

Wow, she's a manipulative little.... I foresee bad things in the future with this.

I'm really late to this game, but wow, what a page turner. Can't wait to see how this goes.

Heh. I'm glad you enjoyed writing it as much as the rest of us enjoyed reading it. And you gave me an idea for something.

No, I could definitely hear Chris's mindset change from giving up to, "I'm not going to let this be 'what might have been.'" He gave it one last shot and found the missing piece he didn't know about. That's kinda what made it good enough to read twice. To see him take that last chance before Paul walked out the door. As far as visiting them again, it's usually up to them if they have another story they want to tell you about. That's been my experience at least. 😊

I had to read this a couple times (a shame I can only like it once) to really appreciate the entire mood. It's beautifully written with the fast, almost frantic pace to it. It really put you into Chris's shoes where he was forced to act quickly to stop a potentially catastrophic mistake made on both their parts.

*sigh* Never changes that someone starts this topic and immediately goes right to Brady without really looking at the stats. Career Average passer rating is 97.6. Not bad. Aaron Rodgers is 103.8 Peyton Manning is 96.5 Drew Brees is 96.7 All of those are pretty good, Brady is about in the middle of some prime 21st century quarterbacks. Here's the thing, though. It's not just him doing it. It's the coaching and the other players making him look great. You can argue he's made some impressive passes in the past. I can also point out a few horrible moments of his like when he got a safety in the opening of Super Bowl XLVI and they lost that one and the Super Bowl before that XLII both times to the Giants. If not for a stupid call by Seattle in Super Bowl XLIX, he would be sitting at .500 on Super Bowl Wins. And that's taking into account New England going through receivers at a seemingly faster rate than most serious playoff contenders in the last two decades. I'm not saying Brady is good at what he does. He is, there's no doubt. But it's the New England system that makes him look good, not the other way around. In 2008 when he tore his ACL on the first game of the season, Matt Cassel took over under center and he ended the season 11-5 and a passer rating of 89.4 which if you take into account his dad dying that December, is pretty good overall. Put all of that together and add in all the shady business going in with the Patriots and Gillette Stadium (even someone as universally respected as Tony Dungy said he never had team meetings in the locker room because he knew they were bugged at New England) and it diminishes Brady overall to maybe top 5 or top 10 but he should never be number 1. There's my $0.02. Now, if we're gonna ask who's the best coach in the NFL, then absolutely, Bill Belichick wins, hands down. And this is coming from an Indy fan.

I'm hoping we get to see the next chapter soon... I've been kind of chomping at the bit to see what happens next.

I have a solution to that predicament...

That was an awesome ending.

Well, that was interesting. The bathroom encounter alone was worth reading. The other "incident" was more challenging to read because I was holding my breath there for possibly longer than I should have.

I have a question... When Maria was going on about being the "ring baron" (thank you for that laugh, btw) she refered to "BJ." Was that a typo, Maria mispronouncing something or....?

This chapter is proof that when you assume, you do indeed make an ass out of you and me..

I would love to comment, but I can't. Because I'm speechless at the moment.

I loved this chapter. I laughed so much during Paul's panic attack thinking about everything he'd gone through in less than two weeks and it was the $1,000 put in his hands that made him finally snap. It was nice to see a lighter chapter after all the seriousness of the previous ones. And, let's be honest here, there's something addictive about your writing style. I can't stop reading until I HAVE to go to bed and even then I'm wondering if I can squeeze one more chapter in.

Excellent story. The cast of characters is well written and the emotional drive is clear with each individual. And, to top it off, we now have a mystery!

I can't tell you just how much this was enjoyed. I cried, I chuckled, I mourned with John. I was completely caught off guard about Gordy being dead. I had gotten so caught up with John and Wylie that I missed all the signs. When I saw the words, "He didn't plan on getting killed," I died inside, I jumped up and scream "OH MY GOD!" about twenty times, ran out to the garage to cool off for a few seconds to collect myself before I could continue reading and tried to not cry (spoiler alert: I failed.) I disagree with the others about Wylie. Let's be clear: raping John in a fit of drunken rage wasn't acceptable regardless of the circumstances. But, I can see how John would forgive him because, ultimately, had John found the courage in himself to accept himself and his mutual love for Wylie, none of it would have happened. I understood that point when John told Wylie that it could have been him in Wylie's situation. Wylie was the love of his life and that feeling was mutual. Sometimes, we hurt the ones we love even when we don't mean to. I dont' mean the rape. I mean the drunken games they played with each other instead of being truthful with each other. But, love makes you do crazy things. Also, John did not rape Wylie. It was a brutal and painful fuck to be sure, but you can't ask to be raped and feel the same kind of violation when you're expecting it. If they both want to call that payback, that's fine. It seems to have worked. I feel that this story is ultimately about John and Wylie falling in love and then re-finding that love ten years later. Yes, Wylie could have been more assertive but he had accepted his supportive role in John's life long before Gordy came along. Also, John did feel that little nagging feeling of cheating on Wylie when he first made love to Gordy. I think Gordy knew that he was "taking" John from Wylie. And he knew should anything happen to him, he would do everything in his power to get the two of them to reconcile the two of them, hence the letters he left for the both of them. Not just John, not just Wylie. Both of them. If he didn't care about them, he wouldn't have left one for the both of them. I think John's love for Gordy would have been a pale imitation of his love for Wylie over a longer period of time. He would have been with Gordy but still thinking about Wylie and wishing he could have done all those things with Wylie instead. In the end, Gordy's "love" with John was more infatuation that wouldn't have been as deep as Wylie's feelings for John. While I do feel John loved Gordy, I don't think he was as deeply invested emotionally with Gordy as he was with Wylie. And he wanted that door opened that he thought was closed forever. It's a sad example when two people don't communicate and convey their feelings honestly. John has many opportunities to approach Wylie and tell him what happened on that fateful night but he kept it to himself. A lot of this is Fate, in my opinion. Had John told Wylie the next day about the rape, Wylie probably would have ran away in shame and despair over what he did to his love. But everything came out at the right moments and all of that is due to Gordy's influence on the both of them. John and Wylie will take time to heal together. But their love endures. They have many happy years ahead of them as long as they learn the lesson Gordy taught them. This will go down as my most favorite gay love story I've ever read. I only wish it was made into a screenplay in the future and seen as a movie (though, the rape scenes could be a little dicey.) Or, I'm crazy and I missed the whole point. Who knows? lol

Another great story. So glad I got to read it. On a completely different note, I find it hard to believe that John and Wylie sold the ranch. The dealership and the boathouse, yes. But the ranch??

My heart did a kind of odd, uncomfortable flip in my chest when I read that "they decided to sell out," and now lived in Galveston. The story overall is great and I knew that house the second T.R. pulled up to it. I must say that that hurt quite a bit. Regardless, I'm totally hooked on this story as much as I did "Gordy."