D.K. Daniels

I must say you have something special here. Perhaps tidying up the usage of some continuous words to add a punch ratio to your sentences. For instance, you use a lot of the word "look." Don't be afraid to play around with words. For example the opening sentence, with a couple of adjustments. - "I woke up. The pillow was wet. The sheets soaked. The bed drenched through. I feel cold; clammy... no damp." Also, another thing I noticed is that you appear to be unsure who is supposed to be telling the story. If this is indeed your first, stick with first-person. Aka - Chris until you figure out who you want to go with. Alternatively, you can tell it from third person omniscient, like Stephen King - where he has insight into every person in the story; that is if you wish to talk about more than one character. If you starting out though, stick to the first-person point of view. All in all, I look forward to the next chapter. I found myself becoming invested in the characters and that is a good thing.

Thanks for the comment, I realized that there were not many stories on the website revolving around the topic plainly, so I decided to give it a whirl. I am delighted that you enjoyed the piece. :)

Thanks Bhopper, I am glad that you could relate with the character. Me too, I hope they had a great date :)

What a clever little plot-twister you crafted. I could see this being adapted into a full piece, except it serves well just as a single on its own. Vengence is the most dangerous thing after all

It's Okay To Say No D.K. Daniels Bryce regularly throws sensational parties. Unlike countless others, it is my first time to be invited to one of his bashes. Considering I'm not a fool, I chose not to turn down the invite. Declining such a generous request would be interpreted similarly to social suicide in high school. For the first time tonight, I have been subjected to a new wild and supercool array of sounds, sights and people I have never known existed or acknowledge

Often or not, at time us humans have a habit of walking ourselves into some tricky situations. Perhaps on occasion, we are comfortable with the choices we have made, others not so much. Join in for on this tale as a young Sophomore navigates his first ever high-school party. The pros and cons that are associated with such an event, and the plausibility of meeting other likeminded folks at the said event.

Yes, I wanted the two boys friendship to naturally occur over the course of the letters. I reckon that is most natural considering most people will introit little bits of information while trying to answer the previous discussion in the letter beforehand. Although my letters may be quite jampacked with discussion on the previous letter there is subtle hints about what is going on in the present and also contents that will relate to a future chapter in conclusion. I'm not sure what it's like in American schools with popularity, but with the actual presentation of who you are you can't exactly hide it. If you have a group of people floating around you: you are naturally conceived as being popular. Whereas, if you're a bit of a loner like your quiet then you considered a bit weird. I guess I was one of the quiet kids growing up but it wasn't always like that. I have experienced both sides of the equation; from being pretty popular, and also being myself. Naturally, I like being in a cocoon sort of deal I suppose that is where part of the character Sherlock came from. I know a lot of kid’s struggle being able to be true to yourself, and I believe this is something that every person has gone through at one point in time, especially the gay community. It's always the other way around when you're popular sometimes you just want a bigger space for yourself, well when you're lonely you want to aspire to be noticed. Initially, I wanted to showcase a little bit of that but not only that. As you have said the number of friends is not important, having one or two good true friends is a lot better than her crowd full of wasters. For me to do and honesty is a big thing but nothing compares to time. It is the only thing that we can expect to receive that is expendable and is not renewable. Truth and honesty can be repaired, time cannot.

I am glad that you are thinking long-term, that the solution may be that the story could be a reread to catch any missed hints along the way. I would like to note that this has actually been the case I have dropped subtle hints for both characters along the way, and I hope they are more evident by the time you reach the end of the story. If people choose to reread the story, hopefully, they will see what I was referring to when I wrote said hint when he reached the conclusion. Thank you typing out a comment and reading my newest chapter, I'm glad that you decided to stick around.

To Watson, Yes, you may take the occupation of a friend, and partner in crime since it appears to be the abundant show of interest. It saddens me to learn you have no such implementation; may I propose that your company adapts, as they say, the customer is perpetually right. I would not have paid for the parcel if I possessed knowledge of intentional manufacturer infringement, where the seller cuts corners for-profit and lower production costs. It is a mockery and insult that you don't suppl

Thank you @Solarmaxx , I am glad that you were able to relate to the piece, even though through sad circumstances. The simplest emotions have more power than the complicated ones. I had this idea in my head for all but five minutes and decided to write it down, and finish it in all but 5 minutes. I found that not many authors on here, from what I have found so far have gone into great detail about death. For some reason, I have a tendency to stray for sad topics to write about, and they always seem to be the creations I am happiest with. To hear that I have made someone cry or them complimenting it for its depth is like falling in love all over again, letting your heart stray open anew. Every time I sit down to write and a little piece of myself changes unknown to myself because I have essentially become someone else.

Thank you OzLoGo, I am sorry to hear about your friend. I suppose I am one of those people when another tells of a misfortune or sad point in there life I never now what to say. I reckon that is why I write, my mind is a noisy place. Although I have had an aunt pass on from cancer and all I recall from it, it was very peaceful. How the family came together and remained with her throughout the night, it is the feeling of time I wanted to get across. Understand the same experience is not the always the best knowledge in the world, but it is what is real that binds is and that is why I like to right of real people, with real problems. And yes you may share it

Little hours, little hours, I find you beautifully appealing. I’d remind myself it's not by default, but due to design. I’ll abide with you, even though saddened and angered by the display of empathy on your behalf. You see it's just the sight of your tired, weary eyes, and sickly-looking face that I’m afraid of. The past months I have watched you grow frail, and I cannot come to accept a life without you. Is it selfish to want it to end, for you to pass? I won’t miss the changes you

I have never been one for coffee, tea is the common norm here in Ireland. There is nothing quite like a nice cup when you playing a couple of strings on the guitar or piano or writing the next chapter of a story by a dim light lamp in the evening. Yes, there may be some miscommunication with boys, although I find there is that little inner critic to most of us when we are exploring new things, and even though we don't want it to show sometimes it slips out on things you don't usually have gotten used to. I reckon time will tell whether Sherlock has a thing against Jocks or come to find that it has been all in Watson's head. I hope you enjoy the remainder of the series. I can only afford to release the entries once a week on gay authors as I am writing multiple others that require more attention at the moment.

To Sherlock, Okay, okay, okay… You may call me Watson. It looks to be a topic of discussion for every single one of our conversations as so far. Plus, it makes essential sense that you have a Watson considering your Sherlock. Can I possibly be the next best candidate? So, you tell me where and when I sign up for this test or whatever you call it. I'll be ready for it. And it is good to know that you got my package without it having further repercussions. I am sorry that no user guidebo

Thank you for your comment, I am glad that you can see the boy's individualism is shining through, I wish to make them complete opposites. I hope you continue to enjoy the series or any of the other works I have provided here or my website.

To Mr. James Bond or Glorified Secretary, I am writing to authenticate the unique package of God's almighty power you have sent has been received. PS. Could you post an instruction handbook because one did not arrive with the cargo, furthermore considering I'm all about saving the planet and recycling, I don't want to have to wire back the delivery in order to get a manual, only for you to ship it back to me? There exists some commonality as to what you have said; I too believe sle

The Park Free-Verse-Flash-Fiction By D.K. Daniels A walk in the park never seemed like such a marvelous idea. Looping the curvature of the volumes path; From yonder by the rebab climbing frame, A boy roughly eight hung dangling from his feet. The blond mess draped like a singular ivory vine, only, plus that and a gazillion tendrils of cascading hair. In other words, the child could not make out whether he was neither upside down or upright. Al

Thanks, @OzLoGo Its okay, we all get busy I have just gotten back from my vacation. I have been on the road for a full two weeks roughing it and hiking, and whatnot. I love summer, as well as Halloween, they are my two busiest times of the year. I wrote this while I was on vacation, I knew I didn't have the time or attentiveness to sit for long periods while on the go, so I decided to write something small because I needed to write something, and this was it. I try to pack as much detail into my pieces as much as possible, sometimes there feels like there is not enough detail, so I find myself holding back sometimes as to not more people with the level of detail my mind picks up on. I suppose my mind is messy like that, I can't stick to one image, so I suppose, it is quite possible if you were to plaster the walls of my room with the content I have written some simulations might shine through. Thank you for the kind words, and that you consider my writing an escape world to run away to. Currently, I have just finished a novelette called You, Me & Them, which is available on Patreon and it will be coming soon on Amazon. The story revolves around two boys on the 4th of July, it stands at just over 25 k words, I will be then focusing on fishing my short Before The Storm, then going back to You and I, as I complete a project I began last year. Ah... so many ideas and not enough time or mental power to write them all at once.

The Other Side Free Verse- Flash-Fiction By D.K. Daniels “Are you there,” the boy whispered meekly to the transistor. No response, it had frequently denoted a presence all day in fact. Though of course, when the lonely youngster assumed he’d found someone, needed someone to talk to, nobody was there. A filth of grime and mire latched to the boys being, what with a mud clad face, tired blue eyes, and filthy brittle blond hair. Black oily bags sat beneat

Hey OzLoGo, sorry I haven't been able to reply to you sooner. I am traveling rurally on vacation and on the road, so the connection to the internet is bad, plus its good to have some downtime. People sometimes have a tendency to skim which is a shame, I suppose it goes to show that if you do you are bound to miss out on important connections. I want to engage the reader more, and having them read every word carefully is awesome. I intend to do it for the remainder of this story which will be riddled with secrets and hints.

I suppose it is in the dialogue, Sherlock is a little more expressive with his word choices, whereas Jame Bond... aka Watson now, is more restrictive, this could come to show levels of education, ability in English and could possibly help distinguish between what character is which. I guess you could say Sherlock tries to be over the top, and Watson, not so much. Also once we get into the bulk of the manuscript, we'll get past the generic I like football and I like books. Thanks for sticking with me I hope you enjoy.

Thank you I am glad you like the story so far, and that it has left you in want. I have never been a sporty kid growing up, I was always building things, inventing games, stories, acting. I suppose my niche is entertaining through storytelling.

Thank you, I hope you continue to enjoy the series, the next couple of chapters will be delayed, however, due to my fourth of July special which comes out the 1st Of July, and with my 2-week vacation, which I am traveling and the internet access is not the best. I hope this is something that does not put you off and you will come back to the series when I resume posting in mid-July. I will continue posting on Patreon, but I can't say I will be able to update all other outlets over the course of two weeks. As camping and writing are hard to pull off, especially in the 30-Celsius heat.

To Sherlock, I have transferred the power of Kratos via FedEx; you should receive it within 2-3 working days. I presume here is where the two of us will beg to differ. I would not in all of my days lose sleep over something as stupid as homework. Sleep is much too valuable to lose rest to something extremely petty. Teachers would not suffer sleep for you, therefore why should you for them. If I do homework, which is even a hassle to get me to sit down, it will solely be in a quick burs

The idea behind the penpal idea is to do away with the character completely and focus solely on the personalities of the boys, people are usually quick to judgment, I wanted the characters in the story to be able to grow emotionally without being physically present, I believe the idea is simple but quite honest done in this manner. And you may never know, the boy might meet in person, I reckon we'll find out as time progresses.