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I desperately need a Jay too 😜 This wasn't something I expected and dammit my heart ache for Loren. You twisted my heartstrings again Mrsgnomie...

O. K here is the thing. Mrsgnomie is one of the best writers in this site (or any Erotica i would find in book or webisode form) and they outdid themselves in this story. I was hooked on scene one of this story and they kept me on my toes for the whole ride. And the laughter i had on the last scene. Was priceless. So that out of the way here is the rewiev from my eyes. "A real young guy who had to inherit a burden finds a great soul to help him. And then the fire burns." The story doesnt go long and it doesnt bore you for one second, or it isnt short and tells its great story quickly. Its great Just the way it is. And I would read Mrsgnomie's other works aswell. And watch out for their next project.

Let me be clear from the start that i am not belittling the pain you have endured. That said; the keyword there is "endured". We here in this age have more ways to cope with pain. Escapism is one of the ways that depressures that valve. When one of those things that happened to you happened now, what would you do? First you gotta deal with the grief and you have to accept that "the thing" has happened and there is nothing you can do about it and you cant change it. We can escape those feelings via other means to deal with them when the pain is not scorching Hot but Sean has none of those ways in front of him. The ones that are in front of him are the things that he didnt want happening so they add to the grief instead of taking it away. I see one way he can get help to get away from despair is that the one he calls friend helping him instead of argueing with him. Just one sentence from Davey can do wonders on this situation. Again, Davey himself said that he had 2 or more years in this New timeline to help him cope with the situation. And i remind you that Sean has nothing goin for him at this new timeline that helps lessening the pain he is feeling which is really happening at the moment not 2 years back. I can look back to the things that happened to me and laugh about it "now" but if something like that happened today i can not laugh about it. I will most probably cry and drink myself to sleep. If someone came to me and said that my husband died i would be a broken mess for weeks. I can not laugh at that moment. Also we are forgetting about teenager hormones also. Talk about magnifying those feelings. So if Sean didnt wallow in despair i would have thought that he is a badly written mechanical character, but he is a human now for me not some robot.

Think about this way. 1-You are being threatened by outside forces that they would kill your husband. 2- You send your best option to past so he can stop what has been set in motion. 3- After that you watch your husband and one of your besties die. 4- Your friend who you sent back gets in another danger that you think needs to be warned about. So you send yourself back. 5- You woke up in another timeline Just after your traumatic childhood event to be thrown around by the person who was your husband a few hours ago. 6- You get sent to some torture camp (concentration camp?) and get filled with anti psychotics and such, which are causing you to hallicunate god knows what... 7- And you get into a situation where you dont want to be but get into because of your loyalty to a friend. You get no time to grieve, the person Who you are grieving for thinks you are trash. You have no hope. And you get thrown into a place where you dont want to be because of all the effort you need to build your life back and you get thrown into politics/science. You need some carrot in front of you to be alive again but all the carrot are rotten in your eyes. This kind of depression most probably needs some event that either shakes your world so you go deeper and suicide, or something that gives you hope. But before any of that happens i dont see Sean getting out of this depression. He did his Best but everything came rotten so why shouldnt he go into despair? Why is it becoming stale for the reader? Is it character bias?

This is not "thought provoking"... This is just a story cut abruptly... Yes we loved the story from begining and it had and still has great potential because we love the way Ethan writes his stories. He had built a great story here and it just feels like "we were eating our desert and just before we get to a good part it is taken from us". The problem we have is cutting the story on a hanger... If i am to get invested in a story that has to have a conclusion. I was really focused on the story. But... When i saw those 2 words i was like... "what??!? This is not an end..." I am invested in characters, I wanted to learn about them more, I wanted to see into their heart/soul... But those 2 words had really shocked me... Anyways great begining, great story, but unecpected and problematic end. Love you Ethan but this story is not "finished"

My thought exactly... We have a staying in my main language that roughly translate as enthusiasm cut Short... (hevesi kursağında kalmak) and i was thinking about the same storytelling style... Thank you for giving voice to my thoughts

They are exploring each other. I think Both should Explore the possibilities

Sorry for my butt-reply 🤣 Its my 5th time reading this story and whenever i have free time i read one of your stories. I dont think you would ever write something i wont like.

A@a#AAA AAZA Aaand my ass wrote this while my Phone was there.. Joke is aside this is the 5th time ive been reading this story and each time i get teary-eyed with Jeremy...