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Thanks Graeme my one month aneversery just past! Ill admit I joined for the stories but the forum is awsome (insanity and all ) Also I have to mosey on over to your stories one was recommended to me. The title currently escapes me but Im sure Ill remeber it once I see it! Im on a must read list !?! Whooohoooooooooooo! Thanks I hope you enjoy everything I am able to offer. Mostly I hope you dont hold back if something strikes your ire! Bourbon is better Seriously chris I hope you enjoy! Let me know either way! Nuhuh He just knows a sexy bastard when he sees one (me of course!) HAHAHA ok that was bad I appologize! Thanks Vic! I look forward to being an active member! this place and the people here are GREAT! Insanity? just my kind of place.... I can acctualy try out that custom straight jacket now :wacko: <g> Steve

Jay! Thanks for reading them! Sometime I'll have to share just where I got the name bourbon from. Honestly Im surprised its never come up. I guess thats a good thing in retrospect! Meaning that it wasn't awkward and fit the character. Steve

Only if you count that everytime I do sing a curous of neighborhood dogs howl along with me. I'm trying to figure if they are catching the spirit or it is just wails of pain The Person below me had a quarter of their pay cut and is now seeking alternitive employment. anyone have a spare copy of the employment ads?????

Posted Chapter 2 tonight! comments criticisims always welcome! well almost always..... https://www.gayauthors.org/eficiton/viewsto...0&chapter=2 Steve

Hello GA! Just wanted to send a post saying a big hello to everyone who participates here! My name is Steve and I have trying my hand on and off at this writing thing for a few years. I used to write under the name blackheart on CRVboy and on Nifty. I was pleasently surprised at the number of people who remeber A shot of Bourbon. That made me feel good seeing its been three years since it was written. I also want to give a big thanks to the staff here at GA for all of the wonderful tools you guys have thought to provide and the feeling of mutual respect that runs through this place. I look forward to getting to know as many of you as I can, and helping out fellow writers where I can. once again thanks for this place, Steve

Thanks for the advice guys! I completely understand about making the time shift at the begining of a chapter. in an earlier version I had it in the middle of a chapter and it was messing everything up severly. I ended up cutting the chapter in two and hashing both halves into their own full fledged chapters. Once again Thanks! Steve

Hey JustynC! Glad you enjoyed. the fourth chapter only found a home for a limited time before the site it was got pulled. It should be up here in a few days. Let me know if you cant wait that long! steve

All I have to add is OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO yup that about summed it up.

Hey Jack, Thanks for reading and then generous compliments on Bourbon! Its great when a story still garners compliments ( i even get an odd email form a Nifty reader evry once in a blue moon). Yes I plan on posting more to efiction, in fact another chapter of Bourbon will be going up tommorow afternoon! Bourbon is almost complete, I have yet to write the fifth and final instalment which will lead into a longer story involving the two characters. Before I get to that project I want to finish the failure rewrite Im so dillagently working on first. Meis, me naughty? I had no idea my reputation proceded me Steve

Just an question on timelines and pacing of a story. How far is it ok to safely jump the timeline of a story ahead 2 days, 2 weeks, 2 months? I ask becuase I am currently rewriting an older project (Failure of the Heart availible in sneek peaks) I always start the story when the characters first meet if by chance or what not . Then I have a bad habit of progress a story (if by force) through several months often with just one or two paragraphs explaining the advancement. Is this bad? Should I use a full chapter to run through the missing time untill the drama of the story begins to unfold? Is there really any viable information missing in the missing time or do readers want to read about random events that happen in the missing months? Any direction would be extremely helpfull Steve

The four chapters of that have been written will be edited and posted as I get them complete. I do also plan a fifth installment in the "A Shot of.." series beyound that I am planning a longer multi-chapter story that will dive a little more into the life of Bourbon & Rusty and a problem that is looming on the horizon. Steve

Thanks Dez! I appriciate the review and the rating! CJ Still humbled with all you have said about Bourb! But as always thanks for the words! Steve

HAHA! take that Hemmingway! <g> thanks mEis, for the compliments I'm looking forward to posting subsiquent 'episodes' here at GA in the coming weeks, plus the addition of something Ive been working on that I have in the sneek peaks section! Steve

This has been floating around at a few different sites ( nifty... crvboy... JustinsCorner... ) But I thought Id bring it over to GA If you've read it before. Let me know what you think! If not, I declair It's offcialy new to you. What is A Shot of Bourbon those bourbon virgins may be asking? Well it's a timeless tale really... Boy meets bike. Boy falls in love. Bike hurts boy... NOW AVAILIBLE IN DISTILLED!! Only in efiction. give it a read! A Shot of Bourbon* Enjoy the Ride* House of the Mad Cow* Compromising Positions posted 9/27/06 * - have been edited to remove impurities, thus earning the moniker 'Distilled' posted 04/2007 Compromising Positions (Chapter Four) should be polished and online soon. Steve

Hrmm perhaps I wasnt clear when I understood where the action came from. I cant say i wouldnt do the same thing in his position. Still doesnt change the fact that I felt disapointed when he did leave.

Am I the only one that was disapointed with Franks reaction to Oliver? I understand where it came from but I honestly thought higher of him then that. I agree that what brian told Frank wasn't the whole truth, maybe at one point there was a real David, maybe there wasn't. The whole double twin beds thing doesnt convince me, Ive seen parents do worse things to placate a child. A interesting tid bit was the revelation that the martins just wanted david to go away. All david wanted was there love. Instead he got the gammut from plain denying his existance to down right abuse. No wonder he rebelled against them. Oliver doesnt know that david isnt real, Does David know that he isn't real? Dom has hinted he indeed does with some of the cryptic messages he spoke to Frank. jennifer and Jay, I dont know about either of them yet but the two of them give me that whole Bonnie and Clyde feeling. Is it too much to hope those two end up on a desolite highway in Louisiana? Steve

If Oliver asleep peacefully in his bed when David snuck back in the window. Why then was oliver locked in the basement with David as well? If we go by the assumption that the Martins punish David and protect Oliver. Oliver surely had no place being punished in the dark basement with David. I personaly think Mr.Martin has learned through trial and error what he can do to Trigger Oliver when he isnt present. If this is indeed a dissociative dissorder type of case and David is the dominate personality ( as has been suggested) Perhaps Oliver was created by David as a way to cope with his fear of the dark. Which leads to another interesting point. David displays all of the rebealion of a teenager willingly defiant of his parents wishes. If Oliver manifested as a defense mechinisim to the dark when david was still a young boy would he mature in the same way or would the personality still be seemingly childlike? Just a few more things to ponder while we wait for what I am sure will be great chaper!

in keeping with the creepiness of its a small world... how about the siamese cat song covered by bobby mcfarren

LOL Truer words I guess have never been spoken. So I guess Im stuck looking for an editor. Yipes thats a daunting task in itself. Counting the three I have gone through. I do have a small group of readers that I share my chapters with before I make them public. They are just too damned nice having failed miserably To point out my brushing over of major plot points the first time around. I guess I'll have to find new beta readers as well. Nope couldnt do that they are all good friends. Steve

And that is why I really dont care to post to Nifty any longer. I am as I think we are looking for better alternitives. I thought I found it when I stumbled onto gayauthors.org. But this is more a community the an archive. If nifty's license agreement was a bit more negotiable or even if they stuck by their own submission guidelines ( propper grammer and sentance structure are requirments belive it or not) maybe the site would be worth it. BUt I honestly dont see Nifty in the same light I once did. A few short years ago it was home to the best alternitive fiction now well now it seems to be decaying into a mere shadow of its former self. Has anyone spoken to Myr about setting up an alternitive archive? steve

HAHA just thought of another one Secretley by Skunk Anaise....

Ok guys... Not meaning to through another stick in the mud (or carcus in the lake as it would be) wasnt there previous mention of another friend that david and olver could no longer hang around with because of some sort of accident. The accident which in turn lead to them no longer going to church? could this person be the mystery photographer instead of Mr Dron? Or David?

Forty pages? OMG if I ever attempted to delete forty pages I would hope someone was hiding around the corner to slap me or something. I think the most Ive ever excised would be the first two chapters of Failure ( which Im currently rewriting ... told you its an imbalance or something) But I had very good reason to chop thos chapters off. I tried that whole non-linear storyline approach begin at the end end at the begining type thing. failed miserably in my opinion. LOL I guess cuase I sorta killed one of the main characters at the end of the first chapter. Yes Dio, I have recieved positive feed back but it wasnt for either of the two unfinished stories Im working on. It was for a seperate serialized story called a shot of bourbon. I'm guessing that also has me rethinking the works as flawed in some way. Completely off topic btw.. broken pegasus wings = good creepy blue guy with sickeningly sweet mouth = bad (on so many levels) LOL as far as shdow well ive had this name since back before you had to use numbers with aol accts.. LOL only problem was shadowgod was already taken so I opted for removing the first vowel ( right.... I just couldn't afford that many vowels and vanna was being a heartless wench that day) Ohh and just about anything krista writes is good but Im rather partial to are you christian. You guys rock! I just realize upon reading chapters at a later date that I have completely glossed over major plot points in a hurry to get to the next chapter. but I guess Im really doomed to never be satisfied. perhaps I should just heed Dio's advice and not read anything after I have sent it to be published. But rhawes16 made a good point I was ever completely satisified Id prolly need to be commited Steve

Hey guys and gals, Does anyone else out there have that pesky perfectionisim bug? I know I do , and I trying to find ways to get around it and or rid of it for good. I'm somewhat of a good writer, at least thats the feedback I have gotten (the worst being that I needed to tone down the font size on a page I submited to Nifty) My only real problem is that Im never satisfied with what I write. I am at the moment I write it but the moment I get a little stuck I want to go back and rewrite the whole thing over again. Am I the only person that has this annoying affliction? Its cuased me too much stress already. considering the two multi-chapter stories I have both remain unfinished becuase I think I could have done more in the chapters that have already been posted. Steve

I just one line to add I know what its like to not exist... and when I do they take the light away....