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  1. @Philippe I know this chapter was A LOT! I am feeding off the suspense!!! Oh poor Vincent...he has had a rough couple of weeks. Get attacked by mercenaries, meets his nemesis, and becomes the host of the God of Order. How's that fecal oscillator going for ya, bud?
  2. Kaplan’s throat was dry. He replayed Cyrus’s words over and over in his mind. Ren… He’s dead? Cyrus killed him. His perception of the man across from him was turned on its head. When they first sat down, Kaplan assumed he was a fair and calm leader. The bear’s steely gaze and admission revealed Cyrus was more than met the eye. There was barely any emotion in his delivery. He stared, surely awaiting for Kaplan to respond in some manner. But Kaplan couldn’t. Between knowing the man who
  3. I...have had the absolute worst day... @Philippe May the Gods bless you! This just made all my pain and suffering today totally go away! I'm so done!!!
  4. Whaaaaa? Back to back @Buz comments?!? Freakin' love it. Vincent's circle of loved ones has expanded so vast & fast in the past several weeks! If Stefan can do anything, it's playing with words. Make sure you reread his talk with Ingle. He's got something up his shadowed sleeve.. I'm just gonna lay it out here, and hope others see this comment...but I am plotting a second book. Kap has too much of a back-history...and future...to be ignored! It's gonna happen, <insert annoying Naruto voice> beleive it! I stand by my words. Cyrus is my favorite character!!! Stuff is about to fit the han! ...I mean hit the fan! I'm so excited, my words are flustered! Y'all better be reading closely...and maybe rereading the whole dang story, 'cuz I'm bringing back some old AF details I sprinkled along the way!
  5. Loving the 'VinW' and 'MaceW' nicknames! And with Vincent developing his wolf qualities...well I guess you're going to need to keep reading! I am still flabbergasted at the response to this story! I just did this whole thing on a bored whim. But y'all made me keep going, and there are no words of appreciation I could say that haven't already been said. @Buz Seems like you're very mobile in your career! I always work off my phone! Most of the chapters are written while I'm on break at work, then edited on my laptop. Totes get your commenting schedule! It just builds up that anticipation to get your comments!
  6. This was a rough chapter! And it's not gonna get any prettier from here on out... I just woke up and I'm hungry! I want a multi-course meal! And...now why...in the world...would Ms. Elaine...possibly even get involved in something like this??!? If Vincent says Stefan will keep his word, then the Italian will. The Electric Panda!!!! YES! I love it! @PhilippeLook at you with these jokes!
  7. The game is on...and Vincent finally has the resources to play Stefan's game. He's not ready for the fight, but the game? Vinnie's ready to play! I have a soft spot for Kaplan. His detailed experiences are still a mystery to us, but to be abused for not being...manly enough. There's a story to be told through Kaplan. I could write about Mason and Vincent all day, every day...but I think if anyone deserves a spotlight...it gotta be Kap (okay, Dave's worthy, but hush...be patient). I...forking...love writing for Cyrus!!! Ooof! Velvety voice, a literal King Sized Hershey Bar, and the finesse to slay the world. Gentle in life, deadly when poked. He is just so fun!!! @Patch1 As always, it is a pleasure to read your comments! I gotcha on the rereading part. Anytime I want them tingles in my toes, I dive right back into chapters 14 and 15! Still my favorite chapters by far. Maybe one day, I'll beat their magical levels of literature. He's a suave AF, lightning shooting, giggle-fit having panda!!! I'll say it again: I forking love Cyrus! I could straight up write with him all day and not feel guilty.
  8. Ingle sat in his black Jeep Grand Cherokee and watched his coworker go inside the apartment. Mace better be right about Shaw. Got a feeling that Shaw’s fighting the good fight, but I can't shake my wolf's instincts. How many levels of reverse psychology will he play to get Stefan? "Watching my associate, are we?" The officer's blood ran cold as he heard the whisper in his cab. Fuck! Behind me. How did this guy get in my car? He turned slightly and saw a middle-aged man with gray
  9. I mean...I could make this as long as Les Miserables if I wanted... Sorry, not familiar if it's terminology, but A5? But I accept the fact and compliment nevertheless!!! Thank you @kfm61!!!
  10. Y'all seem very concerned over this mole! We'll get back to that in future chapters... Yep...that's a panda. That just means how much more dedicated Cyrus is to his job @Patch1 Your compliments are on elevators, but they keep finding taller and taller buildings. Telescopes! Pedestals! Oxygen deprivation! Well. If this book is published, it's gonna be a real big book. It won't be humongous, but it will be fairly large! Part of me doesn't want this to end, but I would be smart to say it's already reached the halfway mark. You want a signed copy? Done...and...Patch1 is getting mentioned in the thank you page at the end, along with several other commenters who have been since Day One....
  11. I stand by all my creative decisions...but man @Philippe you made this chapter sound completely ridiculous! This is absolutely hilarious! I needed an animal that seemed wise, playful, and not afraid to get their paws bloody if need be. I mean...a panda! And it is Vincent's fight! Stefan murdered his parents. And with Vincent's wolf about to learn of the fire mage's actions, we are going to have one PO'd wolf! From your previous comment, Vincent has just doubled his amount of training (if not tripled if he ever finds someone to help with the Shadow affinity). But I'm sure with how fast he has improved with Elaine's frost training, Vincent's wolf will excel with Lei's. As much as I love the title, "Magical Mage Alpha Wolf Destined Mate," I think it might be a little long. I love it though!!!
  12. Love the conspiracies that all the mages are going to take on Stefan together. Just gotta remember, this is Vincent's fight... Cyrus is a master at fixing pack problems. Seeing New York's size, he sees it as his greatest challenge...his, say, masterpiece. Shifter Avengers!!! This! Is! Great! Love this!!! I am in love with m Vincent's wolf! He's new to the world, but he isn't a baby. He can process life and its intricacies, but learning the important faces around him seems to be the first challenge. Love these comments! The mole will return, don't you worry. But undercover work doesn't come into fruition overnight. Mason and Vincent...*sigh* are learning more and more ways to love each other. And now they both have wolves...they are going to barricade themselves in the bedroom one of these days... I thought Cyrus would be a fun addition. Is he bad? Is he another good guy? Who knows? Thank you all for reading!!!
  13. Vincent’s wolf was surprised and confused. I Alpha? How that be? I know I strong wolf. Human strong. Mate strong. That make me Alpha? I’m not sure, bud. You seem pretty focused on being strong. Maybe you’re an alpha because Mace turned me. Yes, make sense. I like you talk. Sound smart. Well, I wouldn’t call myself smart. I just like to read books. Read. The wolf huffed inside his mind. Sound boring. Like run and hunt! Maybe we can try— “Have talk with human?” Maso
  14. Thank you two so much! I'm happy to hear your words of encouragement and praise. Just woke up from a nap, need to chow down, and I'll start chapter 23!
  15. I...got nothing on that! Closest thing to pure country living was picking eggs from under an actual chicken. Like...my little 9 year old skinny twig arm...going under a sitting chicken...and grabbing eggs, with a chicken looking at me as it I were a Sunday paper ready to be read. Outhouses are familiar from my Boy Scouting days, but wash tub...(lowkey, imagining it being pronounced warshtub...) and banjos...nope! I'm still a city boy at heart. I can still shoot a BB rifle and knock a tin can off a fence post from thirty yards away...but the rest of my southern adventures left me a long time ago. As far as accent... I picture my voice as a slightly southern-kissed John Mulaney...
  16. @Patch1...I swear...you make me cry...one more time...and I will send my husband after you. You done made me cry with the message you sent me, and now I get this?!?! I'm happy...nah, ecstatic, with the fact you think I'm getting better with every chapter. You...read this thing...3 times? Well...I'm what actual southerners call a 'pretend southerner.' I'm from southern Indiana (where everyone acts like they came from the Andy Griffith show), but moved to Kentucky for college...yeah, I just realized how back-asswards that just sounded. I don't consider myself a true southerner, mostly since I don't have *ahem* dat derr Kan-Tuck-key ackscent. But I recognize the power that this area has on storytelling. I never got to know my grandfathers, but one of my grandmothers was my honest-to-God best friend. She taught me to always speak the truth, and it had better come from the heart. And after this comment, I'm going to take that advice and put it into my fingers as I type. I love how everyone has been going bonkers on this "newborn wolf" perspective! I didn't know it was that new (I'm hesitant to call it original, but I feel I could get away with it) of a concept. Well...I'm running with it now! Get ready for more dialogue! Hooray!!! Dialogue comes so freakin' naturally for me! I could spend chapters just on a seated conversation... And if you are referencing Diamonds by Rihanna...I will take that compliment, print it, and frame it! All Hail, Queen Rihanna and her musical legacy! So glad you are enjoying the story, Patch! I always find your comments so fun to respond to! Chapter 23 will be getting worked on tonight! If I stay focused long enough, it may even be done before I go to bed...
  17. I love fresh comments! So glad you're getting caught up! @JeffreyL You are in for some good chapters ahead!
  18. Listen @Philippe, between you and Patch1, y'all too good at making me cry! Looking back to when I started this journey, I never imagined LitS would blossom like this. This thing is about to hit 30k views...that's bonkers! This story isn't anywhere near done. I promise you that. I am somewhat bothered that the story will be longer than anticipated (the pipe dream is for this to be published at some point, but the book might be too fat...). But as long as we are all having fun, that's what counts!
  19. I'm so thrilled that everyone seems to enjoy the wolf's perspective! I think I'm going to find it entertaining writing for Vincent from here on out: a 5' 8" tall tiny mage that has an Alpha wolf conscious. This story is about to be real fun! I sort of lost my muse for writing after Ch. 15, but I think I found it again! @Philippe always appreciate your comments!!
  20. @Howzat Glad you're enjoying the story! And there are certainly more surprises to come... @centexhairysub Thank you for the compliment, sir! Always happy to see a positive comment from you! Oh dear Gods, I have so many thoughts on how the final battle will go...but there can only be one ending. It will definitely be far away. I never intended for this book to be so long, but oh well! @Buz You saw Mace eat two pies...but Vin ate one and a half footlong stromboli sandwiches! He used to eat a value breakfast (imagine 2 eggs, 2 sausage links, and 2 pancakes) at JD's and call it. Our boy is turning into a monster...literally...*sniff* A shifter's animal spirit shares the same name as it's host. So Vincent's wolf is named Vincent. I just cant wait to get writing on the next chapter. Chilling events are coming...oh Gods, help our heroes...
  21. @LilDaddy98 This! This was the comment I was aiming for! I wanted something new, something that other shifter stories don't have. I am so glad I at least achieved that goal! Appreciate the comments! Hope I continue to keep your attention Thank you @Hugsly! It's time for bed, but I'll get started on my first break tonight! Glad you are lovin' the story!
  22. It was done. Vincent laid helplessly beneath Mason. The bloody mark was perfect. Mine. It’s mine! The wolf rumbled with pleasure. The little human was his, and no one could take him away. When the bedroom door swung open, Mason, still in his hybrid form, pivoted. Lei, Doc, and Caleb held their hands out. “Mace! Son, we’re just here to help Vincent. Just come—” “He’s my mate!” Mason shouted. He stepped between the invaders and his beloved. Family and friend or not, he would rathe
  23. astone2292

    Chapter 5

    I felt that there was some resentment lingering in Kotik...but my God...my eyes are aflutter! The amount of power that these two possess is absolutely bonkers! Pure bonkers! I was not ready for the plans of kingdom domination, but it seems their intentions are pure, even if it seems there's going to be a lot of pain along the way. Pain that may come from our heroes...or members of current nobility. Consider me addicted to this story...
  24. astone2292

    Chapter 1

    A great first chapter! You've captured this reader's attention with this unique world and the introduction of some characters that I want to see more of. Fantastic work!
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    Chapter 7

    Nice chapter! I appreciated the Borisov backstory involving Hunter's childhood and the big reason he hates his family. Man...I'm in the boat with Hunter. That family has some serious problems. Only had one issue. I'm assuming Alex and Felix are the same person? If it is, this may be a slight nuisance to a more hardcore critic, but I can easily overlook this. This stinkin' story is still the funniest thing I've ready in a very...very long time. Part of me wants Hunter to give Hellboy a chance (or at least put the Devil in a trap to just get a date?) but I know that would be baaaad! I can not wait for the next chapter! Definitely going to follow this story and turn on notifications...
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