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Last thing. Go Loren. What a big night for him! I absolutely loved getting a glimpse at the very beginning of livingtheloelife. It's such an innocent scene of little boys at the zoo. So much excitement for seeing a baby elephant. They had no clue what they would become and how their lives would change. I kind of wonder if it was the last of their innocence, captured for the world to see and to playback. I think accepting the award together, although in Loren's name, shows that his branding is not just his. They are his family.
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My mind is racing over the implications of bailing on Thanksgiving AS HE'S AT THE AIRPORT. Like I said, it could be a disaster of epic proportions. But you're right. This chapter isn't about Thanksgiving. Next chapter (right Mrsgnomie?) They really went beyond in this chapter. For Jay to leave Florida, presumably the day before a game, is huge. You know he likely fought tooth and nail for that privilege. Probably made some waves. And Loren? I imagine him having Jay's tux fitted without Jay there, and sending it, not knowing if Jay would actually show. He had to have been a bundle of nerves. Knowing himself, how stubborn he is, but wanting Jay there at the same time? He loves Jay. Even as they're talking, Loren is freaking out. I lift his hands to my lips. “Are we okay?” “We are. Buuuuut—” he cringes and rubs the back of his neck. “There’s one more thing. Umm, it’s not a big deal or anything but for the sake of ‘communication’. Ahh Jesus—” Loren leans forward, with his head between his legs. “I feel so fucking stupid. I never had to do this shit when I was single.” Love is a battleground but Loren keeps going. He keep fighting over and over and over. Jay fights, too, but this is a harder war for Loren.
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YES! This is what I'm talking about. Don't let that crap fester (Loren, I'm talking to you). It's clear they both seeked council. I hadn't realized it last chapter but absolutely Loren doesn't give Jay a chance to screw up. Jay's been amazing this whole time but one little mis-step and Loren chews his ass. That was big of him to own up to. Big for him to acknowledge. I won't lie. I'm a little nervous that Jay is bailing on his families holiday plans. How will they react? How will Loren react? This is potential to go down very wrong, very wrong. I hope it doesn't.
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Doesn't that make you nervous? It makes me nervous. I read that and my gut clenched because Loren is so susceptible to being hurt. This is a tall order for Jay, clearly. I need to walk away. I'm stressing myself out over this. WE KNOW THEY END UP TOGETHER! Why do I do this to myself?
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Yeah, but tying each other up as teens/adults hits different than being tied up as kids lol.
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I tried to find some quote I love because I want to be like @drsawzall but there are just too many. This chapter is just so complex. I need a little bit to wrap my mind around it all. I haven't even touched on Loren taking the Seahawks on as a client. I want to strangle Jay. How could he think Loren isn't happy. I mean, Loren is SCREAMING commitment right now. Its such a slap in the face. Jay needs a time out. He's in trouble. Do not pass go.
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This chapter was everything. There is something about Loren that really draws me in. He has such a deep love and connection with what he does. It's runs in his blood. He comes to Jay's practice and commands the stadium. I don't get the impression he doesn't it because he feels like he has to but because he enjoys it and it brings him life. It's really something else. Him and Jay together? Can you not feel that energy? They are larger than life, the kind of stardom that you can't help but be drawn to. I believe with ever fiber of my being that they are soulmates. Now. Jay. C'mon. He done fucked up. IMO, Loren handled Jay's faux pas better than expected. I felt like he gave Jay several chances to catch on to the fact that he was coming at the "meet my parents" thing all wrong but Jay never picked up on it. It was hurtful. I'm on team Loren here. Loren just found out his brother might be trying to find him. AND Loren just stayed at Jay's house while Jay was at camp, showing that he's ready to take the next step. I feel like everything just came to a screeching halt.
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Well. Give me me a moment to collect myself.
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Really enjoying this story. Are you writing as you go? Do you have any sort of posting schedule?
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Very lucky boys to be surrounded by so much love and support. I wish more parents were like that.
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Love the start. The boys are so fun and clearly have a deep bond. I can’t wait to Watch them grow. I can’t help but think their little “toe” up game is going to cross some boundaries for them lol
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It has me worried also
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What I wouldn't give to have my Nokia back. You don't know what you have until it's gone. I could play snake for hours and hours.
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It will be interesting to see how long it takes Loren to come around to the conversation about Jay's career. He's being rather finicky right now, unwilling to talk about it. I don't think it will take much for him to sing like songbird. The real question is: Will he want Jay to continue or to retire? We know Jay retires but my understanding is that he retires around the Mexico trip? I may need to go back and double check. (We all know @Mrsgnomie loves when we go back and dig stuff up). But if it is around the Mexico trip, then that means Jay renewals his contract for two or three years?
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Great chapter. Really. This was such a pleasure to read. I think it means a kit that Matt and Seamus came Loren’s party between coming back and leaving for the airport. I wonder if it means Seamus and Loren are close to becoming friends. I was a little sad that Aidan was so clingy and wanted nothing to do with Jay or Loren but it’s so realistic that I can’t hold it against him. I loved seeing Loren in his element. I was right there in the crowded house, pining to be like him. Jay makes such wonderful ‘em candy. They seem like the perfect Hollywood power couple. I’m proud of Loren for communicating about feeling like Jay has double standards, which he’s not wrong about. I do believe there’s merit. Instead of freaking out, he explained himself. I may be at a loss for words, but that doesn’t mean I don’t want to talk about it. The truth can be confusing at times. Jay is awesome. I can’t wait to see what he has planned!!!
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This is pretty spot on. My mom has chronic pneumonia. It’s pretty miserable
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Just starting this. Great first chapter
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Magnificent. What a well written roller coaster. I can't help but see how far Loren has come. He handled that panic attack with so much grace and maturity. As someone prone to panic attacks, I applaud him. I'm also a little jealous. Here's the thing I love about your writing @Mrsgnomie is that you get a level of realness that I don't see often. It's in the details. For example, when Loe comes back after being talked off the ledge by his friends, you describe the scene as Aidan throwing a fit while Jay sits on the sofa ignoring him. BECAUSE THAT'S REAL LIFE. THAT'S WHAT KIDS DO. THAT'S WHAT PARENTS DO WHEN KIDS ARE BEHAVING BADLY. You nailed it. We love Aidan so much because you write life with a kid so wonderfully and so real. Jay continues to be a saint. I adore the way he treats Loe. If I wasn't newly married and competing over who is the best husband, I would want Jay. He's a damn dreamboat. The BDSM choking at the beginning was hilarious. I wish Loren was someone I could watch in real life.
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I'm pretty excited to see how things unfold. Not to anger @Mrsgnomie by bring up the details from BN, but lets break this down. The Mexico trip is the last piece of overlap and it's in 4 years. I'm assuming it will be in this story since JAY & LOREN GET ENGAGED. What the hell happens between now and four years??? Matt and Seamus have another baby, Carson, which I desperately hope gets covered. Hopefully we learn more about Seamus's ordeal with his parents? More info on Loren's parents. Lars. Moving in together? Knowing Mrsgnomie, something big is going to happen and tear these two apart. I don't know what it could be, everything has been handled relatively smoothly so far, unlike some of her other stories. I don't think I will handle it well. What I'm trying to say is...4 years is a long time. SO much will happen.
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I think you have a point but I also see the reverse being true. They don't live together and they both have busy lives. Of course Jay is going to watch Aidan even if it's last minute. He's not going to say no because he needs more time to convince Loren. He told Loren, Loren got upset, and then Loren came anyway. I was glad to see Jay slip in the little communication is a two way street when he did. Loren got off easy. I felt it was a gentle reminder.
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Interesting. Loren seems really conflicted and I'm not sure he even realizes it. He's irritated that Jay took Aidan for a week but he's choosing to hang around anyway. He’s still pissed about it when Matt and Seamus drop Aidan off. He stands off to the side with his arms crossed like a petulant child while I greet our newest guest. “Hey Aido Potato!” I quickly scoop him out of Matt’s arms and perch him on my hip. “Are you ready for a super fun weekend with Uncle Jay and Uncle Loren?” Loren chokes at the words, paling a bit at the title. I laugh to myself. I couldn’t help it. He’s acting like such a child. Besides, no one is forcing him to be here. He could chill at his house but he’s decided to come here and pout instead. I think he's so screwed up he doesn't know up from down. He wants to be a part of this kids life but he's been condition to think it's a terrible idea. Jay's right, he'll get smoothed out. @Mrsgnomie wonderful chapter. There really is so much here. Loren is going through a healing process and kids will be a hard part of that. You can really see it in this chapter that you have masterfully crafted. Loved this scene. Total swoon. Total fu*king swoon I give him a bath after a particularly messy outing. As soon as we're done, Aidan runs naked into the living room, straight to Loren. He tries to flop on the sofa but he’s not quite tall enough so he holds his arms up and waits for Loren to do the rest. “Can’t you at least put on a diaper?” Loren mumbles as he drags Aidan onto his lap. He has his feet stretched out; his ankles crossed on the coffee table. Aidan settles, his little legs dangle on either side of Loren’s thighs, and his hands behind his head like a rockstar. This made me laugh because yeah, Aidan's just gotta jog upstairs and take a quick shower cause Loe says lol. Aidan takes one look at Loren and starts squealing with his hands in the air. “Uppy, uppy!” Loren takes one look at Aidan, who's now naked and covered in sticky syrup and pancake crumbles, and starts laughing. “Not a chance on your life. I’m going to go shower. I suggest you do the same.”
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@scrubber6620 is was worth an effort!! I'm dying to see what happens with his brother.
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I totally caught this. In my head I imagined million of people clicking on livintheloelife's profile only to find nothing new posted. A first, I'm sure. It was kind of an eerie start, to be honest.
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I was definitely holding my breath when the chapter was posted. I just knew there was going to be a bunch of drama which neither of these guys needed, not with what just happened to Loe. Instead we got a beautiful chapter full of grace and love. Is there unresolved issues? Yes. Will they go head-to-head at some point. I'm sure. I'm glad to see it wasn't this chapter. Loe was clearly riled up. I kind of wonder how much time he spent stressing over Jay's reaction. I'd almost bet he was thinking about it the whole ride to the hospital. By the time Jay arrived, Loe was ready to defend himself to the death. There was no need. Jay wasn't there to prove how right he was (not that he was right, just making a point). I can breath. For now. Note to @Mrsgnomie. I'm really enjoying this story. It's truly a gem and every chapter has been such a pleasure to read. I look forward to each chapter while dreading that it will one day come to an end.
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You start me out laughing. Not only is Jay and the enema scene is hilarious, but Loren mocking him during sex was even funnier. Then it was nothing but smiles. Things are great. Everything is resolved from the trip. But wait, there's more! My stomach was pure acid when I read about Loren's being swung around the cliffside. I hope Jay calms a little before he rushes to Loren like a bull in a china shop. If he comes at Loren aggressively, it will not end well. It wasn't Loren's fault or anything he could have prevented. It's really no different than an accident that Jay could end up in every day (I'm assuming, since Loren walked away). Oh boy. Great chapter! I was glad to see Seamus in there. It lines up well with Boss Nanny. Jay's right, Seamus will go back and things will be great with him and Matt. I sure hope we see more and more. It was hard seeing Seamus's so dead. I picture him like a patient off One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest after the lobotomy. I love Seamus, so that was hard.
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