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Oh wow. That early story-arc of Thomas' legal case looked like it was coming to an end, and all of a sudden there's a great big new story developing!
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I like the Juan Ramos backstory, and looks like this case will make him. And good for Melissa, but that one looks tricky as far as next steps. They've been too busy to think about it, but Roger should look into whether Thomas owns a house; it feels like he probably does. (Although if Charlie is Elijah's executor, that could be a little complex).
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Ooh there was so much going on with Finley, I sorta lost track of Emmett still getting over the awful Dex situation. Glad Emmett and Finley are back in the same location at least.
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DA Mike Schultz is one of several characters I hope we hear from again. This feels almost like a pilot of what might be an ongoing serial with legs. I didn't click "world-building" in my rec, but I see Empath has been tagging these as part of a Land of Lincoln series, and there's a pretty solid base established.
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I am also thankful for whoever bumped this out of moderation limbo. Looking forward to this (is this a series?) continuing! The starting narrative arc has reached an end, but so many open doors and interesting characters. And we never even met Brendon!
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"You didn't tell me you were bringing along everyone you knew." hehe, Charlie and Kip are friend-magnetic, but adding a friend to the party at every stop has added up to they're mobbing around in quite a big group. I was wondering when somebody was going to notice!
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Ooh and I like the Sam James character. Solid and well-developed supporting character, but looks like she could carry as a lead as well. Also 🌪️, I suspect
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and it is going to be a freaking whirlwind. 🌪️ (that was very polite of you @Ivor Slipper, to leave some meat on the bone at the end of the quotation)
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Yay for both . . . I've rarely been this keen to find out what people talk about at lunch, but also I don't want you to rush it out the door if it's not there yet.
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ooh, I just noticed the detail that the incident was on February 14. Makes sense but also, ouch. Nicely crafted, @empath
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well that sure picked up the pace! Brendon is at least a witness to everything, but I'm not sure I get what Radcliffe thinks Charles Miller is going to do for the prosecution.
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I just read your other story! with prosecutor Radcliffe in another role, right?
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Yep! I've read a few too many everyone-is-awful stories recently; I really like this mix several characters trying in different ways to do right (and understandable antagonist motivations like a young prosecutor trying to win cases).
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"Hmm. So, how did he fuck things up, or was that just an excuse ... ?" The intrigue builds. Intriguingly.
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Yes, that was a bit naive of Ludo to figure that Jackie would react well to the news about Arthur. With everyone that it's very weird that what Ludo does matter's for the "work project." And part of the note about "making arrangements" was maybe a bit threatening about custody, but that seems not to be what the cops were there about. Excellent curve ball, @Robert Hugill . I am both befuddled and intrigued.
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Maybe Cottontail is the brother of a Mitch.
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"You can pull out now" is very much not the most romantic thing anyone has ever said. I'm starting to think that Alan is (maybe a lot) less experienced than he lets on, and is also learning a lot about himself this week.
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Maybe, but I'm skeptical about this. John came up for Matty and Rusty because they know him, but I don't recall there was ever any mention that John might have a brother around (and he usually seemed kinda lonely). And I think there was a medium stretch when John knew Slicky's real identity but Xpress didn't. But could be wrong and @Joie J. usually is right on the pulse.
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Yay Gus! And this episode adds up to fairly mundane stuff from Alex. It occurs to me that his cash pile might be connected to not having a regular bank account, and the sex-workers to the prison-break mentality. Alex paying to get his fairly old car tuned up was actually a prudent move.
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"Relationship drama? Sad bois I don't know how to warn for this exactly" Excellent note, TY, but anybody who's here at chapter 30 has been read-in that Demiurge-content-might-include relationship drama
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Chapter 5 - It's Complicated
Mattyboy commented on Jeff Burton's story chapter in Chapter 5 - It's Complicated
Alex seems to have lot of hundred-dollar-bills for someone cycling through a transitional housing place.- 15 comments
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Chapter 5 - It's Complicated
Mattyboy commented on Jeff Burton's story chapter in Chapter 5 - It's Complicated
That's what I thought was going on there (mutually). Ben doesn't have much to go on if Josh is friend or friend yet, and from his perspective it's sensible to not mess anything up by pushing. And Josh knows Ben is fragile and vulnerable, and so same deal.- 15 comments
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Does it count as progress for three new problems to turn up? Very fun chapter!
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I didn't notice it as an Easter egg it while I was reading the chapter. I only clued in when I looked up Mom's name for my comment. It actually works pretty well as the sort of thing people do when they're living in a bible-suffused culture but don't actually know the stories or what they mean. They figure Seth should have a brother named Kane, but have no idea why they think that. At that level it is a pretty clever jab at the wrathful "Jesus-without-love" set that seem to comprise this town's villains. And as a riff on that bumper-sticker joke, that Adam and Steve are pretty happy and are making it work suits pretty well.
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The closet seems a lot safer at the moment (hoping that'll change, but it's where he and Asher are now) Yes, yay for Kane, and maybe he has some new cards to play with his Mom. um, so . . . Adam was married to Eve, and they had sons named Seth and Kane?
