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Won't You Be My Neighbor?
Mattyboy commented on jkwsquirrel's story chapter in Won't You Be My Neighbor?
It's a lot better than anything he has going at home. That was some pretty shitty behavior from Billy; he's sitting there thinking Dustin needs something more, but tries to stall as soon as something mildly interesting turns up. -
The Christmas Eve Party
Mattyboy commented on jkwsquirrel's story chapter in The Christmas Eve Party
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Wow, Paula did not make that better. She completely knew that they'd been an hour dealing with stuff. but she knew better than to trust her husband and she had to be Mamabear Karen and re-open all the closed wounds.
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I think it just came up for a moment at the diner that his son had painted a portrait of his wife, and then that got lost in the "hobby" issue, but Mr Miller might circle back on the first part. Or Anthony might have tuned him up, as was his clear duty.
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oh, and yay Barrett and Todd are back together. 🤝👬
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This is awful for Anthony, but maybe just what Mr Miller needs to climb down off his high horse. Two weeks! I wanted the Diner Talk 2 episode, but I guess Anthony never got the promotion to narrator-status. A lot could have happened in that time on that angle. If Mr Miller hasn't been to see Todd's art in the gallery, he's irredeemable (which doesn't seem to be @Superpride's style, but I guess we'll see.
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Hit Me with Your Best Shot
Mattyboy commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in Hit Me with Your Best Shot
Bunnyboy has a bitter edge, today.- 12 comments
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This might be as minor as "home" is an old-fashioned rural estate that has more heritage features than modern conveniences. But, yes, Kenji feels it's better the less it's known he cares about River. And he's been very rational so far (though of course it's way easier to be rational about other people's emotions than your own).
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Yes, that was a B-minus showing from Patricia, considering she'd had a heads-up from Cynthia that Barrett that was likely to turn up. Poignant that Todd and Barrett are having simultaneous emotional crises that they're actually well suited to comfort each other over, but happening at the same time is jamming up the connection. Barrett absolutely deserved to have this chapter to himself, but eagerly waiting news of Anthony vs Dad "diner talk: the rematch."
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Yes, after an actual physical food fight, standard practice is that somebody needs to go. but what about . . . Shop at Marty's - join the hunt for limited-edition art stickers! 🎨🦋🤯
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Yeah, that's why I don't really know. Clueless old-fashioned and following learned scripts explains him pretty well too.
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Yeah, could be. Or just an attempt to parry the pretty strong "parents-should-love-their-children" argument he's being told to face up to. Because it's not her actions, its her heart. If that actually parses out to Mr Miller saying "your mother was wrong to love you" well, yep, that's gonna be a pretty permanent dealbreaker. But he did seem to want this reconciliation lunch, even if entirely under his terms. I'm not sure I get it either, but it feels like the long shadow of something.
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"She misplaced her heart" is a really weird thing to say. Mr Miller is terrible, but maybe that was about something
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In between the Cynthia plotline and Mr Miller's weird line that Todd's Mom had "misplaced her heart," I wonder if we're headed towards some sort of reveal that someone has a bio-parent who isn't named on their birth certificate. Or not. I can't tell. But "she misplaced her heart" was a really weird thing to say to his sons while they were talking about how much they loved their mother.
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Yeah, the attempt was honest. And Dad couldn't hear it, he he did get told the work was being shown in a big gallery. Anthony did what he should by backing Todd up. Anthony v Dad 2 should be a doozy.
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Good for you Anthony! (not the getting sloshed part, the being a good brother part)
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yeah, "it's nothing" might have been a severe understatement. Or they were actually discussing how to make adobo
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And changing scripts on how you deal with people when you've been doing it some way for your whole life is pretty hard. This may be Anthony's maximum speed for change. Yeah, it'd be great if it was a little faster, but this might be it.
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I like this strange parallel universe where adults actually work effectively on their problems. I wish I lived there
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I like this storytelling tempo where the (humanly flawed) characters actually work on trying to be good people. Instead of maintaining some sweet tension indefinitely (a pet peeve of mine), the plot and the characters keep moving along !
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Yay it's an art show!
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Here's hoping the thing Todd "probably won't go through with" is either a singing gig or maybe a small art show at the bar (or maybe the Fairy Godfather knows a small gallery somewhere)
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Yeah it seems like whatever it is that Todd's bitter about, Barrett doesn't recall, and maybe even didn't do?
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I think the literary theorist Roland Barthes once said something on the lines of "there's no reason to assume that the author knows what his story is about" So listen to your beta reader !
