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  1. Mattyboy

    Chapter 20

    Aha! River is person A! I knew it!
  2. Mattyboy

    Star Search

    spooky! but maybe alright? And I have some questions for Mom about why she's so interested in pictures and photo albums right now
  3. Mattyboy

    Chapter 18

    Ah, I've been waiting for these arcs to intersect. Very fun
  4. Mattyboy

    Family Matters

    Great start! So many connections and deep roots. I've read a bunch of stories recently with a really stripped-down set-up so the central storyline can be the focus. But lives often aren't like that, they're like this, with so many connections and situations and stuff going on in people's minds and perceptions.
  5. That was a long time coming about the trust. But "you don't need to see a statement" and "you can see the banker if I'm there" kinda look like big fat flappy red flags. That was a fun scene with Rory.
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    Chapter 64

    Ok, working on Caleb's list: Once-a-year visitation $2.5 mil trust fund new bike
  7. Disappointing that after all this time Trent can't see that Chase's pattern of getting drunk/high before a family event is a recipe, or even a strategy, for disaster. Kind of abusive to force Kayden on this after being asked not to. This is going to be a downer if it ends with Trent just becoming mini-Chase.
  8. If you ever revise this, perhaps a way to go here: one of the things that's powering this story is that Kayden and Trent had pretty different lives to start with, but they were alike in that they were trapped in patterns of behavior that they didn't really like but they couldn't imagine altering. Then they managed to connect and found they had the capacity to help each other grow. That's why Trent's bad behavior and stupid mistakes don't make him a complete villain: he's not really responsible because he's so conditioned to behave that way. And he is growing and changing, and that growth is what the story's about. And we're 25 episodes in and Diana's right there with a black eye and Trent does love Kayden, so why can't this be one of the moments he finds a new way to behave? Trent isn't dumb and he is really motivated to not be like Chase, so getting off booze and taking care of Kayden emotionally is a pretty viable story path. Or Kayden could take Lucas' wise advice about getting counselling, which would definitely be available and fairly easy to access at Stanford. But you gave us another go-around of Trent's not really grown up yet. Which, sure, he's not that mature, and no, he shouldn't just pop out of his bad-boy cocoon as an emotional support angel. But that could be the gimmick. He's mad enough about abuse to retaliate violently, so maybe he's also recognizing that he needs to break the cycle. I think that's coming anyhow in the story, just push it up a few chapters.
  9. Trent, stop doing drugs while you're calling the cops!
  10. Mattyboy

    Friday: Trent

    Sara should have been a lot more helpful to a student who was being blackmailed and sexually harassed by other students. But good for Kayden getting out of the house. And maybe Trent will put it together about staying off booze and drugs for a bit.
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    Fri: Kayden

    Yeah, Trent, you want to fly under the radar and let this blow over, maybe before TMZ identifies Kayden?? Don't do public appearances at schools where everyone knows Kayden. And yes, Mrs Dee, you're terrible.
  12. They should DEFINITELY tell Sara, Ivy's using her school account to sexually harass and blackmail another student - they can get after that pretty fast. And Trent, since the house is surrounded by paparazzi and stalkers with cameras, maybe close those blinds, and lay off the bowls?
  13. Mattyboy

    Chapter 63

    Clarke had an absolutely terrible hand of cards to play, most of which involved keeping hard-to-keep secrets and then getting bendy with various technical definitions of perjury. Added degree of difficulty for representing-a-founding-partner's-estranged-kid. And looks like he probably had to win to get paid. Bettors who put chips down on "how's Calvin-Ashley paying for this?" as important should claim.
  14. Mattyboy

    Chapter 63

    Certainly grasping more than "rational" exactly, but she seems to have figured that Caleb is her meal ticket from that day at the movie theatre and before.
  15. Mattyboy

    Chapter 63

    Also revealed is why Mr Clarke is putting up with this terrible case for clients who don't look at all like they can pay. I don't recall Clarke personally doing anything really awful that he wasn't more-or-less obliged to do as Calvin and Ashley's lawyer (and I guess he's known all along that he's basically Ashley's lawyer). I didn't really see that at the time, but it's been pretty coherent with this. Also, Caleb should draw up a list of under what conditions he'd be willing to have Ashley be his legal Mom, that perhaps includes once-a-year visitation and a $2.5 mil trust fund
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    Chapter 63

    Aha! That explains Ashley being super interested in Caleb. And the inheritance theories were right even though it wasn't on Donna's side. And some very early groundwork on Bryan and Kenny moving forward. Adds up to a very satisfying chapter
  17. Mattyboy

    Wed: Trent

    Hehe, Mateo is mowing Mitch's lawn. Ugh Trent is so awful, if only Kayden wasn't so into it.
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    Tues: Kayden

    Kayden: " no, I don't like cinnamon rolls, I'd rather be pushed into a ditch. " Jacob was a bit pushy, but argh.
  19. Mattyboy

    Emmett

    I guess Tony has very well organized wards (and we kinda got from Finley that housewards build power over time). Argh I caught up right at another cliffhanger!
  20. Mattyboy

    Emmett

    Maybe gross energies from the nasty case, and everybody was so relieved when it was over they didn't notice they weren't done ?
  21. Mattyboy

    Finley

    hehe that's fun about the hoarding possibilities. I'm sure Finley can figure something out
  22. Mattyboy

    Finley

    has a nice Seanan McGuire kinda vibe to it. But very fresh as well. Keen for more, but I like the pacing
  23. Mattyboy

    Chapter 16

    There was a great and rather cryptic passage in I Hate This Town in which River was describing to Alec that the relationship started out as a deal, but now "person A" was having feelings. River sorta framed it that it was Kenji that was changing, but it was always a bit ambiguous, and it never really got cleared up who was person A and who was person B in that little . . . um . . . scene.
  24. Mattyboy

    Chapter 10

    The friends put very little conversational pressure on Mike, which would line up with Liam has briefed them that Mike is fragile, at least. With modern boys hair-ruffling and even "you're crazy" cheek kisses is sometimes just emotional-support-bros. You might be right, about the whole group, but I think it could still go either way.
  25. Did this ever get resolved? I remember a significant trail of crumbs that there was some quite significant history between Andrews and Elizabeth, but did it ever lead anywhere conclusive?
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