Bondwriter

Yeah, I sometimes have this fantasy too. Though I'd rather have a blasting ray that would leave no track whatsoever. I'm always amazed at the number of "non-gay" guys who are into males. In the bondage/ tie-up scene I know, I'm now aware of this; if someone tells me "I'm not gay", before I get to meet/ play with him, I know I'll be fondled intensely and that the guy will be as aroused as I am. So, I'm fine with non-gay people who adopt gay behaviors. Their problem, not mine; and they never turned out to be homophobes either. It's more annoying if they are your friends, and that it's a way to keep you at bay, and then you realize it comes from fear.

Beware of guys with leather gloves and handcuffs! Nice chapter. It's hard to believe these police officers could get away with kidnapping and murder, but it happens all the time in fiction, so it must have some grounding in real life too. Still not going to get you the endorsement of the Arizona Board of Tourism. But Medium mustn't get it either. Don't Chris and Steve ever get fat, eating all this pizza? And what's up with these people calling them Shawn and Chase (well, there are worse names to be called); not much of a theory right now, except maybe they had their pics taken and posted somewhere by the nefarious Thaddeus/ Sheriff pair. More questions raised. Eric is not in a big hurry to make his move. That's weird. What happens if in the end we find out he indeed was a victim himself? Does Eric lose his best villain prize? Congrats over the awards for this fine piece of work, by the way.. My favourite line in this chapter (the double entendre one was a contender): "Ever since the sporting goods store shut down, this place has been useless for clothes except for jeans." Speedo fetish, anyone?

OK, third or fourth time I read this poem and postpone commenting because I cannot find any witty, insightful thing to say about it, so, here it is: I like it.

Quite an eerie scene. It must be very distressing for poor Kevin to end up in the middle of this big mess. Jerry Springer doesn't sound like the best marriage counselor, to make an understatement. Fine scene, though.

This has been in eFiction for a while, it came back to my mind reading Razor's blog about what makes us feel alive. The Sun Sometimes Rises We're on our way, come my friend! The path is open to us and to those who are ready to storm the sunlit truth. We'll sail endlessly towards shores we've never seen since there's nothing left to discover. We're not a new breed to dig We're those no one can stop We are eternity We are the parents of the universe We are the secret passages We are the wind blowing everyday We are the living cells We are billions of tons of carbon We are hydrogen too We are the living flow of eyes watching We are the greedy grasshoppers We are the stream in the veins We are Betelgeuse We are M

Aaaaah! You're giving away more of what's to come! Trust your storytelling to let us know what's going to happen as we read the story! Seriously, trust us readers to get your message as we enjoy seeing the plot unfolding before our eyes. Which have been watery for the last two chapters, by the way.

OK, this maybe could have gone somewhere in the writer's corner, but it wouldn't apply to many people anyway. After reading Dio's blog about seeing his story on a Chinese forum, I went and googled my own. Hence my story appears on page 4 when I type my characters' first name in the French google, number 2 result with "in English only". Then I googled Goldilocks, and I was offered the opportunity to translate the story. Man translating computers are lame, but I got a kick of some of the results, especially in dialogues. Really weird seeing the page with its layout and a robotic translation. I thought I would share this little moment of glee.

I like James' idea of a loosely connected set of stories. With a good team of writers, what would really rock would be to have these connections building up to produce a really interesting subplot (or topplot if I may), a bit like in Altman's adaptation of Carver's Shortcuts. And most really successful and interesting TV shows do not work on a formula. I'm thinking of some of HBO's series, that appeal to many people whereas the executives from a lot of networks would turn down the mere idea of them seen on paper the first time around.

I was puzzled by chapter 10, but these last three chapters are my favorite up to now. I felt really moved and sad about the whole situation. At the same time, everything falls into place. There was a bitter taste after ch. 10, because I felt like they were about to be punished for having sex, which is something I wouldn't feel comfortable with, but it's nicely put in perspective in the next two chapters. Guilt and responsibility are obviously always at stake in devastating events, but the fact that it's widely discussed by all the characters involved give the reader food for thought rather than just plain melodramatic narrative.

A really nice chapter. Richard accepting to see his son smeared to for his agenda's sake is rightdown devious. And our poor guys are totally unaware of the trouble brewing. Val's father's reaction surprised me more, actually. What does he care that Matt is in love with Jacob? It doesn't prevent Jacob to be the king of the lube job, does it? I'm quite amazed at the cinematographic way to imagine the scenes and the side of the story told to the reader so there's always action. And now with these new developments, I'm quite curious to see what's gonna happen next!

Could CJames be misleading us poor readers with the whole Eric situation? The first person narrative allows him to have Eric depicted as a nasty little bastard. And everybody siding against him. The fact that he'd actually be telling the truth would be quite a plot twist. Deception, lies, mean siblings. This is antic drama!

I think it was a one-shot story. At least in my mind it was. I'm really thankful for the feedback provided by all of you people. Before I go for a sequel, I'd like the guys to whom the story is dedicated to be able to read it. Sadly enough, they were a real-life fairy tale taking place (two little teen guys I knew from another board playing tie-up games together, about to write a major piece of fiction, most excellent writers and artists, and falling in love on top of it, like I would never have made this up myself) and it turned out into a nightmare around Christmas when their coming-out went awfully wrong. One of the families moved so they'd be apart, and the only message I got from one of them sounded awfully sad. OK, so enough getting depressed. I really enjoyed writing this story, and working with Sterling and Nicholas. I don't have any inspiration striking me for the Spring anthology, but I'm already trying to find ideas for a Summer story. And of course, I'll keep mind-controlling goats with subliminal PMs. It works rather well, since I got a shy one to post a chapter every week on the day of my choice!

Camy, you're the guy to write thrillers. Nice chapter, it moves the plot forward quite a bit. Who's next? There's a guy called Brett who needs to be saved or buried. And chocolate to be found. And a thesaurus for Dubya? Nah!

Yeah! Cheers! Joyeux anniversaire, une ann

This cracked me up. I don't remember talking mechanics for the longest time, and I'm really puzzled as to the mores of them Arizonians now. Once again, Steve and Chris work hard under the blazing sun. And shirtless, they should watch out for skin cancer. Why doesn't his dad have Eric perform the grueling task instead of idly staying unside his room? This whole Eric thing is getting even more mysterious. If he's really trying to make amends and was himself forced to do the nasty stuff he did, then he should really come out clean. But he doesn't. I mean, about the Sheriff situation, since he comes out, but it rings a bit as some way to trick the guys into feeling sorry for him. Nice atmospheric chapter, with more to come later on, and still more time with the characters. What does the Easter Bunny have in store for next episode? We'll wait.

Happy belated Birthday, Cap'!

I'd bet more on him putting the fundament back into fundamentalism.

Hey, Jack's boyfriend (Matt?), I know a good lawyer if Jack posted this pic without your consent. Or worse, without your knowledge.

From my (very) little knowledge of US laws, discrimination based on sexual orientation is illegal in many of the above situations. Having laws enforced is yet another problem. One thing to me in favor of a civil union (marriage sounds too religious to me, sorry): my sister married a US citizen about three months after meeting him 10 years ago. He got the French nationality, now she has a green card. Why could I never have even considered that as I went on the same University program? Even though there is a civil union in France, I am not allowed to fall in love with a foreigner and imagining I'll live with him forever and ever.

Despite lots of harassing, Conner declined the offer. So it's up to anyone. I thought someone would make a NJ's birthday episode, but the opportunity wasn't taken. And yes, all these heroes need new developments soon. After all, there's a guy lying in a gutter possibly hanging on to his life.

As for my goals, besides ruling the world through the mind-control techniques that I experimented on goats, they are limited. Aussie football? The sport in which they wear shorts even tighter than rugby's? He! He! Thanks Conner. You get 10% if you manage to cut a deal.

Nice chapter, great prom. Jay is going to be pissed all his life about the damn liberals who spoiled his prom. Unless he's so mean and stupid he chooses to retaliate. It seems the story has reached some kind of milestone, with characters about to undergo new things for their lives. Agree with Steve above, it does give a warm, fuzzy feeling.

Yes, the dream sequence is great. It fooled me completely. Nice develoments in this chapter. Glad they go back to the bedroom for having fun. Now the concern is about Mathieu's diet. What will happen if they keep locking themselves in and leaving the kid to plunder the cookies from the kitchen? I don't know if it's really relevant to this thread, but it's great to see Sharon's and Jack's great work on the story.

I received very few emails, but I had stories posted on sites where my email was not given. PMs would be the equivalent, or comments on a board. Some sites even have a review feature, and I averaged 4 for a story a couple months ago, though there were less comments with the last chapters, surprisingly enough. People who take time to send a message usually do so to say nice things. The nicest one I got was "Talya Firedancer used to be my favorite online writer, but now it's you." Then I had to go check out who Talya Firedancer was, and I was quite flattered since he's a really fine and prolific writer. Over the last eight months since I started posting stories, I've come across people who had read the stories without giving feedback, and when I PM someone on a board, and that he tells me he's read one of my stories somewhere else and enjoyed it, I always get this little pang of ego gratification. I think some of my favorite feedback still comes from my friend Nicholas H., whom I got in touch with a few years back about his stories, and who read mine before they were posted. He may criticize quite harshly, but always with good arguments, and he's become someone whose advice I trust and respect.

Unless I die suddenly, no. The person below me is reading a great novel these days.