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I don’t know why Harry won’t open up and trust his mother? I have the impression that she will not react like Alex’s mother. She genuinely cares about her son and his welfare. And she doesn’t appear to be intrusive and invasive like Alex’s mother. He must know something or suspect something that we’re not aware of. Nice chapter, dearpeter.
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Hm… I would have never guessed that, Talo. It’s just that Dear Peter sounds like the salutation in a letter. What comes next? It provokes some thought. Maybe I should change mine to SincerelyArran. 😉 p.s. This is also a response to your question, dearpeter. I should have said “intrigues me” rather than “piques my interest.” Maybe it‘s a stimulant to get people to read what you have to offer. Who knows?
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An uneventful chapter, except that Jill knows that something happened at Alex’s house that is affecting his performance at school. In the next chapter I expect Harry to invite Alex into his bedroom, where they will talk until they are interrupted by Jill. What she will learn from them is anyone’s guess. Good chapter, dearpeter. That name really piques my interest…
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Probably because she trusts her son to open up to her in good time. I would expect your suggestion to be her last resort.
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The chapters are quite long, which you well know, and there are 39 of them, so hats off to you for getting through them in only two days. Welcome. Oh, and be real nice to Jwolf so we can keep him writing. He has a tendency towards truancy. Aye, Jon?
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So, for the last two days you’ve done nothing but read the English Year. Impressive!
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Did you mean Corbin?
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Do you do this for a living?
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Thanks, Jwolf. Corbin’s life is very complicated? Or complicating? I don’t know which. I love the frequency that the chapters are coming too. I’m eager to find out who is sitting on Corbin’s bed. Maybe Mike? That would complicate things even more.
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I think Jake sensed that it might be okay given Kyle’s father’s response to Jake challenging him the night before. The old man seemed to like that and like Jake for saying it.
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My statement was confusing. When I commented, it appeared to be the only one. Now I see 5 comments ahead of mine. Go figure…
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What? There are 18 reactions on this chapter and I’m the first to comment? What happened? I play guitar and yet I didn’t see the connection between the chapter title Harmony and the story title Strings until the end. Shame! Wow! Two chapters in a row that just blew me away. You’re really good tying things up, Jeff. I sense that the end is near; however, I can’t imagine what you can add after this chapter. What an incredible story. I think there were more feelings expressed in this chapter than in any other. Awesome job, Jeff. You have an innate talent for writing. Thank you for sharing it.
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Harry’s mother wants information but he won’t give; Alex wants information but his mother won’t give. Why? Did Alex touch on the truth for the severity of his mother’s reaction? What does she stand to gain by setting him up with Genevieve Hart’s daughter? Another thought: is this déjà vu of something she experienced with Alex’s father? The story kind of took an unexpected direction in this chapter. Looking forward to the next one.
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Do I sense a spinoff? ✌️
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It probably would have been more effective had you added something to suggest that she’d been drinking, but it’s a minor point. My reaction was probably how I wanted to interpret it. i hear you about the reader interaction. I find it rewarding with my stories too. It tells you that your readers are engaged and like what you have to offer. I’m sure that it will continue.
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I think both guys really fit together well too. Kyle knows that Jake likes him and he’s let his guard down because of it.
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Excellent chapter, Jeff! I liked the pace and loved the dialogue. Lines like Jake saying, “I moved,” then following it up with, “I rolled over, actually.” And then his comeback to Kyle’s father, “And just how should a ‘queer’ look?” Obviously it struck a chord with the man. Everything about the chapter made it fun to read. Also, the progression in the sex scene would seem to be what one would expect for their first time given how cool Kyle has been toward Jake up to that moment. As in W.A.R. I have to follow the story by referring to google maps to put all the locations into perspective. That’s fun too. Thanks.
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No wonder he doesn’t care about the messy condition of his bedroom. Under those circumstances I wouldn’t either.
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“I can’t deal with this. I’m going to bed.” Jennifer threw her hands up and walked out, leaving an upset Alex and terrified Harry in her wake. As If to say, “Oh well, fuck it all anyway.” Maybe she was more surprised than angry. Maybe things won’t go so badly in the morning after she’s had time to think about it. Harrison did warn him. Good chapter, dearpeter. I like how you took the time to address each comment. It makes it look to your readers like you’re fully engaged.
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Take a look at my profile. You obviously haven’t.
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I don’t understand this.
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I said “maybe.” I’m not convinced that it’s right. I guess I struck a dissonant chord with you.
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This chapter moved pretty smoothly as I would expect for two boys who are just getting to know each other. Until the end, that is. I think you just set the hook into your reader, dearpeter. Who wouldn’t want to read the next chapter? Thank you.
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It did in another story by Dodger
