ScrumRob

I guess this is another story that never finishes since it was last updated just shy of 13 years ago.

This story illustrates to me the complexity of writing complicated scenarios especially one that has spanned a number of years in real time. Even now, parts of the story plot that were written four or five years ago must fit together coherently, and they do. The notes required by the author to keep it together must be pretty detailed. Bravo.

I had almost lost hope ever to see something more for this story. It was exciting to enjoy the new chapter.

I enjoyed the story. I was sorry to see it completed so quickly and thought the ending was a bit abrupt almost like a death.

I have given up on this story and one by another author. It is too difficult to keep up with the details of a story when so many months pass between chapters. It is one of the risks of following amateur authors who have lives outside of writing that often prevent them devoting any attention. Eventually, too much time passes and the story pretty much dies from inadvertent neglect.

This is one of the better chapters in a while. There was a much better balance between religion and humanity. Some of the recent chapters had been a little cloying with religiosity. Don got back to a balance with this one. He brought Eric Clymer back into the story, and I hope this will bring some angst as well as some sort of dramatic opportunity. It would be nice to see some of the power of redemption come into play with this rather disturbed character. I hope so. Don often likes to write about the power of good and love to redeem the otherwise irredeemable. For good erudite writing, Don is one of the best. If you want short, fast stories to feed masturbatory fantasies, you should probably go to Nifty.org because Don is not the one. He writes well and knows how to use both spell check and proofread his work.

I read all your stories a little over a year ago. I especially like One Moment, but it hasn't been updated in nearly two years but clearly is not finished. Any chance it will be?