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I can't stop! Is it tomorrow yet?

I died when I saw this was Perry's pointofview. Wonderful. I think we're going to see things really moving along now! Yippy! xoxo Rox

Oh this was fun to read! Perry toyed Kyan around a bit and I loved every second of it, but in the end I think Kyan won with his little tease of a kiss. xoxo Rox

If I’m honest… 3. except now I will be a 1

Oh no. I did not like how this ended. I hope other commenters are correct and this is temporary. The awkward clinical feel made me cringe. I hated it. And still no kissing!! They need to kiss! It will solve everything!!!

Thought he really screwed it up here but we know what he meant. It's sweet how comfortable Kyan is with Perry. He truly believes nothing can screw things up between them. Obviously, that thinking will be his own demise.

We are doomed.

Well, minus about 9 hours lol

I agree with this and I think Jessica is admirable for knowing when to stay out of it. Kyan might need help but right now he and Perry need to be uninterrupted.

Max knew going into tonight that there was something going on with Perry and Kyan, and even if Perry and Kyan didn’t know it, Max put himself in a position of failure. IMO, he came on way to strong with Perry. There was overcompensation at the very least. I’m sad Max walked away feeling defeated, but he swung the bat knowing the pitch was way off. I don’t know what is going to happen with Perry out of the shower but my expectation is very low. I have a feeling they will pretend nothing strange happened and fall asleep side by side. This could be a major setback. Whatever happens moving forward is Kyan’s call. He’s a smart guy and a good father but he lacks the experience needed to take the reigns in this situation. Xxx Rox

You're not wrong, but like a previous commentor, I wonder what the point of this point is. For authors to not share stories because they will not get 10k views per chapter? This post reads rather pessimistically. There are a ton of newer authors, people who do this for personal enjoyment. I did take a look at some of your reviews. One rather scathing 2 star review was for an authors first story on the site. Other readers will see that review and never give that story a chance. That author will never make the 1,000 read on his story. Hell, they may feel discouraged and never even write again. But maybe that's what this is all about? I'm not sure.

Great chapters. I loved the video. brings what you wrote to life.

I think this is the case. I would venture a guess that there are some serious feelings on Perry's side of things. It would be so damn hard to share a bed with someone you pine after. How could you know hope and wish and pray that he reaches across in the middle of the night wanting you? I don't think I could do it.

Absolutely no pineapple. No excuses, no reason, no logic. I stand with Mr. Perry's Dad on this one. Pizza is meant for meat and good stuff.

I really like this story.

This was a great story. definitely a front runner. pulled at the heart strings. strong writing. congratulations! xxx Rex

I see this is your first story posted. do you think you will write more?

Great comments. I’m going to re read now that I have some insight.

Kyan seems like a good guy but Perry had me biting my damn lip. f**k me. When he was pouting and angry in the car? I’m a sucker for dark and brooding. Give me more. Lawdy. Now that they’ve broken the touch wall, is Perry going to kiss Kyan goodbye when he finishes kissing all the kids? Out of habit? Cause that would be hot Can’t wait for more xxx Rox

3y since his wife passed away. The money she left behind was good for 2 years, maybe a little longer; which is never last as long as you want. 1yr of no income? Or??? He didn’t seem to stress over shopping for the kids, nor does he appear to be working or worried about it.

not my normal fare but very interesting story and interpretation of abuse and retribution regardless. i don't agree with the bad review, but to each their own.

2 chapters in and it's clear we have another classic MrsG on our hands. twice a week is not enough to sate the hunger. well done. i love the kids so much and i have to agree that perry is shaping up to be quite the love interested. you have a way of building the dreamiest men that make real life so unfair. -Rox

Glad to see you posting again. I was about to email you and check in but I didn't want to bug you. You must have sensed my impatience. I truly can't wait to see how you bring this story to life. xoxo Rox

Nothing like notification that my fav author posted a new story. Work couldn't end fast enough only to be hit by a literary bomb. I agree with the comments, great start. I AM VERY MUCH LOOKING FORWARD TO THE FOLLOW UP CHAPTERS. If you post once a week I will die. I'm hesitant to make any remarks about the chapter because it's impossible to know what tidbits are relevant. My initial thoughts are that Kyan's family is trash and Dayna's family is everything good in the world. I hope they are! Kyan needs all the help he can get. We know Kyan is going to fall for Perry per your story description. I am very concerned for Kyan. Granted we know very little about him but if him and Dayna got knocked up in high school and he was home with the oldest kid (Can't remember his name and don't want to look), that means he has nothing to fall back on. I don't see any work history (you could prove me wrong in later chapters) Dayna was the sole provider for what could only be a very short period of time. If they are 23, that means she's probably fresh out of college. It's unlikely/unbelievable she graduated on time, which would have age 21 if you factor in maternity leave. Of course, I could be over thinking it. All that to say WHAT IS KYAN GOING TO DO? If he finds a job, he won't make much (lack of employment and secondary education) and daycare is astronomical. I cannot see a way this works out well for him. But what do I know? I should shut the f up and let you do your thing. Like other, I wait with bated breath for more and as always, I appreciate you taking the time out of your life to write such wonderful stories. It's hard to feel worthy. xoxo Rox

This chapter was a lot. Sheesh! I felt for him when he resigned as it had to be so difficult. I was crushed. I love the costumes though! I think Penn and Nash are building something special