Hero

It's a fun story to read

Great chapter, it gets better and better. Loved the fantasy element of air machines and tanks. Reminded me of Michael Moorcock. Love the historical base and the twist and turns.

So many questions, some are out of curiosity, some are about how things work, some are about preferences and a lot are about how to live... completely different, which is not at all a bad thing, more a challenge as for our hero, because she (he) is a hero!

It's all a dream, I don't know if I remember it or not, if it really happened or it's my imagination, but other things convince me. Great opening full of stuff I don't understand but want to know...

I just want you to know @James Carnarvon this was my second choice story, but you get only one vote. It was a great story, for me beaten into second place by Learned to Lie.

It was original when Pete got his first girlfriend and his first sexual experience whilst at the same time having another sexual encounter with a band member and potential boyfriend. Then in steps the girlfriend's brother and Pete gives him a blowjob or two with his girlfriend's permission, of course. When she pops into her brother's bedroom because Pete is taking too long and sees her brother fucking her boyfriend in the ass, well that's a step too far and she throws him out naked. Pete can only confide his woes to Ant, the band member and potential boyfriend. They resolve it all by having mutual blowjobs, no hard feeling, no blame. Well, I like fiction, but I kinda like it to have some semblance to reality. Not saying this couldn't happen as you imagined it, but it rather needs a bit more depth and interaction between all the characters to be believed. I mean our hero Pete has gone from a shy boy singing in the choral to a quasi rock singing front man super star, adored by the crowds, and who has sex at every opportunity. We've got sex and music, where are the drugs? And, my god, it's all so polite!

It took a little adaptation to get into the present tense writing style, it is modern, millennial, I suppose, but in any event the story carried me through. The plot so far is interesting, a bisexual guy with a girlfriend and boyfriend. The background of an upcoming band is nothing original, but the story is well done. On the story, it took me to a world I found, I won't call it conservative, maybe dated. I mean, do guys get that kind of meet the parents, dad talk, at 17. At that age myself I had nothing much to do with parents as far as my personal life was concerned and neither did my friends. The music references added detail and the background was nicely filled in. Pretty good so far.

A simplistic tale of betrayal and retribution which lacks development and description. The writing is rather below average as if written by someone for whom English is not their first language. The idea was good but the execution left something to be desired.

I feel a need to redress the balance here. I could draw a parallel with Pasolini's film Salo - The 120 Days of Sodom which attracted both positive and very negative reviews. Donald McLean (Bay Area Reporter) in reviewing the film wrote: the film becomes an endurance contest to see if you can make it to the bitter end without vomiting. Ed Potton (UK Times) wrote: There was a point to all this foulness... Was there a point to this depraved fantasy? I ask the question, because other reviewers raised the point, once you get past those (first few paragraphs) you'll find a story that deals with corruption, friendship and love. Luckily the gruesome start does not continue through the story. That gruesome start one needs to get through is a depiction not of punishment as one reviewer states, but grotesque executions. The executions of sixteen year old boys, the mechanism (described in detail) is more horrendous than the beheadings by Daesh in Syria. Add to that the perversity of a younger boy watching the scene and masturbating, it is indeed something to get through. Whilst the story carries a warning, I wonder if that is enough, perhaps if you read this review you will know what to expect. I cannot say I enjoyed the story nor agree that it was a well written story. In my opinion the opening graphic detail was an excessive indulgence into the author's personal fantasy and not justified as setting a scene for some eventual redemption. Read it at your own risk!

It had development, but not much detail and little description. Felt rushed, but the plot idea was good.

Excellent story, good plot and great narrative descriptions. I'd like the rest of the book, if possible?

Intriguing, suspense. Reading between the lines our new arrival has been thrown out of home because he turned out to be gay! Will the academy make a man of him?

Molly and Sam - Chris and Tom - very beautiful...

Synchronicity: I had both the fortune and mis-fortune to attend a Catholic school where I was educated in all the usual subjects and into an understanding of life, hypocrisy, and perversion. My own Father Dwyer took us for religious education and had a particular penchant for allowing the class free rein with his questions time. An exercise which allowed him to enjoy his sadistic pleasure dishing out physical punishments to boys who posed those stupid questions he knew teenagers would ask. The school was a very odd place whose idiosyncrasies were not confined to clergy, but included many other odd ball secular staff. I could write a book about it, hahaha! An education indeed!