JayBear41

Excellent first chapter. Nice handling of a difficult topic and especially nice final sentence that is a bridge onward. This first chapter alone could stand as a fine short story. Very well done.

An excellent story so far. Very well written and edited. More interesting than most of the stories on this site. Did you ever publish the end anywhere?

A well-written story with an excellent plot. One of the best on this website.

A nice story about two young men without teenage angst and the uncertainty of teenagers. This work has a very interesting plot which makes up the storyline without being overly engrossed with detailed obsession with details of sexual relations. It is a nice, more literary work.

An excellent piece of writing. Unique, not just another copy of the same old plots. Chapters are long and well-developed. Take close note of the character names and nicknames.

The author has a great sense of teenage personalities and emotions. The parents presented seem to be withdrawn from their children, but this adds to the feeling of teenage angst. I was a bit confused about the chronology. Sometimes a lot happens and five or six chapters later it is the next day after what seems like a much earlier major incident. I pushed myself to read the entire story and found that the ending was not what I expected even though it was well developed. Try not to give up on the read if the chronology confuses you.