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  1. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 18

    I just wanted a sequel because well now I’m invested in the characters and want more what can I say ? 😂
  2. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 18

    Good points.
  3. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 18

    Ok ok first of all there better be a sequel coming focusing on Neil and Chandler because there needs to be. Shame on you for teasing us on all our emotions 😂 secondly, did I miss something? The attitudes of everyone towards Lucas seemed to do a complete 180 between this chapter and the last. I get there was a bit of a minor time jump but that won’t changes hearts and minds THAT fast…unless they learned of how Lucas was abused sexually prior to get curb stomped and then some by his uncle. I’m just saying the extreme level of care they’re extending to him now is waay more than I’d expect so soon. Idk, maybe I’m reading way into it too much. I think Sammy told Mr. C not Neil’s mom about the eye flirting between Neil and Chandler. I’m thinking Mr C asked her to give him the old tour. Idk, doesn’t matter. Bottom line is that there needs to be a sequel . Great story though
  4. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 7

    Ooommmg I was gonna a berate you something super horribly because no way can this end here. What a superb chapter. Now, where’s the rest?! I wasn’t done! it better be MUCH much longer.
  5. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 6

    Ok ok where the hell have you been hiding this talent? Cute chapter dynamically between them. I love how you continue to write them having the same train of thoughts and anxieties. It’s brilliant.
  6. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 5

    This story is very well constructed. I like how you’ve built in the anxiety and self torture thoughts. The build up to this chapter was great.
  7. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 4

    Progress. It is great to see. Nice chapter
  8. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 3

    Interesting exchanges between the friends and Jer. I am intrigued
  9. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 2

    At this point I’d just start walking home. Unless it’s bad weather that is. Getting more context and background story on what happened to his father help. 10 yrs is a long time. Perhaps some therapy would help.
  10. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 1

    Good start. However I feel the opposite to a few on Jeremy. For starters, we don’t know the context of the loss of his father. We can assume it’s been a bit of time say a little over a yr or more because the loss doesn’t seem raw and fresh Jer and his mother have healed some. So the kid is old for his license. Great. His senior in high school. Great. So what. Sure his a little petulant and whiny with late teenage immaturity. Holding him to expectations someone out of high school and working or to expect to know how the world works is a bit much in my opinion. That isn’t to say he can’t learn if properly motivated.
  11. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 16

    Owen still seems scared of any conversation between him and Neil regarding what happened in the barn. To me he’d rather act as if it’s soooo taboo he can’t truly apologize and give Neil the chance to speak and deal with the elephant in the room. Owen has moments of being a really good friend in previous chapters but not here. He needs to pick a side of the fence. By not letting Neil speak on what is on his mind, owen and Neil will continue to nervous around each other. My fear is Lucas is going to get to Neil before they mend. Lucas is a powder keg waiting to blow. I worry Neil will get seriously hurt this time.
  12. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 12

    True. There’s no such thing as 💯 secure online with encryption either. That said….Nothing beats a burner phone 😆
  13. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 12

    An anonymous account allows for 💯 plausible deniability for Jonah too. IYKYK 😈
  14. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 12

    Ok the plan to get him get him get him is weak at best but it might be enough. They don’t need to show June. They need to take that video and post it on their OWN new instagram account. She’ll see it just fine. I would think teenage sexual behavior especially let petting insinuating something more and with audio would be MUCH more a damaging look to both the 3 vampires and a look to the prestigious school while the rest of the school will laugh their asses off. What high school anywhere in the world doesn’t have underage teenage drinking and a little nookie nookie?!🤣🤣🤣🤣
  15. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 7

  16. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 5

  17. Ok! Let’s go! I’m already craving more.
  18. Not gonna lie, I want more
  19. I shall research thx
  20. I guess what I was asking was did YOU have more works written like this . I’ve found many authors and many works that fit this style, but I also like your writing style very much. Have you ever considered spin off stores from A to Z? -Silent
  21. SilentandBroken

    Chapter 10

    Matt and Emma were pretty careless about what they were talking about in public while on their scavenger hunt by themselves. Lots of situational awareness fails. No doubt they were overheard. Part of me wants to think they were the bait to draw them out. There’s still a lot about these exchange students that hasn’t been disclosed. To me, there’s still more to them that they’ve not sharing
  22. man I didn’t think I’d miss him this much still. Granted, loss is a HUGE part of my traumatic past, I’ll admit, he left so much unfinished and I wasn’t finished learning from him either. Now, admittedly, I keep going back to his one reply to me encouraging me to write. But it’s that first big step ya know? It scares the shit out of me and the self criticism and self doubt have me stuck at the starting like making excuses like a nervous 14yo wanting to kiss his first boy crush or run…sigh
  23. I happened to catch The Goonies recently and it dawned on me how much Sean Astin was a cutie in that film. Here’s a pic of him a little older than then
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