SilentandBroken

Victor seems like he’s hinting at a violent dark side he’s got that apparently Will has seen before. He’s plotting something and clearly has Jonah in his sights as the primary target. This is not good. Awesome chapter

I think you’re right about that. Great observation.

While cute, yes he’ll need to learn boundaries before he gets hurt. Sounds like this kid hasn’t the faintest idea what those are.

I did! So much so I want more 😂. I love how you’ve built the characters. I’m hooked.

Great start. Comsi would’ve loved this. You did great

Ugh so sick of Nathan’s narc drama. I don’t care how good he is in bed. I’d be so gone ages ago. Would rather use my hand than deal with his drama.. Rory needs to stop teasing and change teams.

Oh man..so far you’ve put me back in 8th grade. I remember having the social awkwardness and anxiety and poor self esteem much like Billy. You’ve created these characters so well. David is…in a word dreamy.

Exactly. Especially for the first mtg

I can tell you why from someone who’s had survivor’s guilt and trauma. He omitted that stuff because it is frankly extremely difficult to talk about and going into that much detail for the context and relevance for their conversation, it’s overkill. That isn’t to say he doesn’t need to do so because he’s also avoiding iț. Still though, this is huge progress. as for the sec scene, mmm nah man you did fine..so fine I got hard instantly 😘..trust me if keep writing like that you won’t have ANY issues

I guess I can see that

I just wanted a sequel because well now I’m invested in the characters and want more what can I say ? 😂

Good points.

Ok ok first of all there better be a sequel coming focusing on Neil and Chandler because there needs to be. Shame on you for teasing us on all our emotions 😂 secondly, did I miss something? The attitudes of everyone towards Lucas seemed to do a complete 180 between this chapter and the last. I get there was a bit of a minor time jump but that won’t changes hearts and minds THAT fast…unless they learned of how Lucas was abused sexually prior to get curb stomped and then some by his uncle. I’m just saying the extreme level of care they’re extending to him now is waay more than I’d expect so soon. Idk, maybe I’m reading way into it too much. I think Sammy told Mr. C not Neil’s mom about the eye flirting between Neil and Chandler. I’m thinking Mr C asked her to give him the old tour. Idk, doesn’t matter. Bottom line is that there needs to be a sequel . Great story though

Ooommmg I was gonna a berate you something super horribly because no way can this end here. What a superb chapter. Now, where’s the rest?! I wasn’t done! it better be MUCH much longer.

Ok ok where the hell have you been hiding this talent? Cute chapter dynamically between them. I love how you continue to write them having the same train of thoughts and anxieties. It’s brilliant.

This story is very well constructed. I like how you’ve built in the anxiety and self torture thoughts. The build up to this chapter was great.

Progress. It is great to see. Nice chapter

Interesting exchanges between the friends and Jer. I am intrigued

At this point I’d just start walking home. Unless it’s bad weather that is. Getting more context and background story on what happened to his father help. 10 yrs is a long time. Perhaps some therapy would help.

Good start. However I feel the opposite to a few on Jeremy. For starters, we don’t know the context of the loss of his father. We can assume it’s been a bit of time say a little over a yr or more because the loss doesn’t seem raw and fresh Jer and his mother have healed some. So the kid is old for his license. Great. His senior in high school. Great. So what. Sure his a little petulant and whiny with late teenage immaturity. Holding him to expectations someone out of high school and working or to expect to know how the world works is a bit much in my opinion. That isn’t to say he can’t learn if properly motivated.

Owen still seems scared of any conversation between him and Neil regarding what happened in the barn. To me he’d rather act as if it’s soooo taboo he can’t truly apologize and give Neil the chance to speak and deal with the elephant in the room. Owen has moments of being a really good friend in previous chapters but not here. He needs to pick a side of the fence. By not letting Neil speak on what is on his mind, owen and Neil will continue to nervous around each other. My fear is Lucas is going to get to Neil before they mend. Lucas is a powder keg waiting to blow. I worry Neil will get seriously hurt this time.

True. There’s no such thing as 💯 secure online with encryption either. That said….Nothing beats a burner phone 😆

An anonymous account allows for 💯 plausible deniability for Jonah too. IYKYK 😈

Ok the plan to get him get him get him is weak at best but it might be enough. They don’t need to show June. They need to take that video and post it on their OWN new instagram account. She’ll see it just fine. I would think teenage sexual behavior especially let petting insinuating something more and with audio would be MUCH more a damaging look to both the 3 vampires and a look to the prestigious school while the rest of the school will laugh their asses off. What high school anywhere in the world doesn’t have underage teenage drinking and a little nookie nookie?!🤣🤣🤣🤣