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MarioAC

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  1. MarioAC

    Attack

    uhm... there are some issues in the chapters uploaded. ch.8 is the very same one as ch.7; and then the story jumps to ch.10, no ch.9 at all!
  2. MarioAC

    Chapter 16

    and... what would happen when davey gets back to the real world (which world is actually the real one now?), what would happen to 12-years davey (14-years davey at this moment) going back to a life he has not lived for some time?
  3. MarioAC

    Chapter 14

    what happened to 12-year Davey?... was he sent to the real-NOW world?, how will a 12 years kid face a world that's 20 years older/bigger/advanced without the actual 20-years-knowledge he did not acquire?
  4. MarioAC

    Chapter 14

    I know! I know! I know!... Ok, no, I don't know, but hear me out. Stefano killed someone from Luca's family, a very close relative, a brother/sister perhaps?; being so into deep inteligence (as told by Harris) he figured it out as well as the hunting of Corbin by Stefano and their paths leading to Hailey. Here comes the deep river: the person killed was parent to Jenoah and all this plot is for the blood christening of the young man avenging the murder. No?, too much?...
  5. wait, what happened to the house of the spence's?... you know, the grandparents they met during their first trip?
  6. YEY!!.... The paths join... Who are they?, where are they from?... Seems we're finally getting some long-awaited answers.
  7. MarioAC

    Chapter 20

    Franz?!, where's Franz?!, who spirited him and where to?!... Oh Lord, they're just too young!... And nobody seem to confide in them nor trust them enough; as if they were feathers in the wind, going from one place to another without actually knowing a dime; learning the hard way not to trust anyone 'cuz there's no way of knowing if the next person will be a friend or foe. Oh Lord.
  8. MarioAC

    Chapter 18

    I wonder who between us grown ups would make no such errors that we are quick to point. The word in Spanish for teenager is "adolescente" from the verb "adolecer", suffer; those years when a person struggles in their transition between a dependent child to a reliable adult. Add a turned upside down world, an ever-present war, a behind the scene evil scheming dark group... how many of us would survive even a day? Like my father used to say: follow your urges and RUN.
  9. MarioAC

    Chapter 1

    Oh Lord. The waking up every morning wondering if that day is gonna be The Day, actually hoping is gonna be It, wishing to be strong enough to make it by yourself, hating the fact you ain't. Asking so many questions that have no answers, calling to a God that has just stop listening or doesn't exist at all. Oh Lord.
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