Mark Arbour
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I'm wondering if anyone knows what Caroline's indiscretion was?
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To be honest, that was my favorite part of the chapter as well. The reference to Flag Day was actually a joke on my part, so I am sorry for the confusion. I had originally referenced Father's Day as being this Sunday, when it is in faact on the 15th. I was under the impression that Flag Day was this weekend, so edited it to show that instead. Unfortunately, Flag Day is also on the following weekend.
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I think that Brad's thought was a knee-jerk reaction to the situation. It's probably not an unfounded suspicion. But the key thing to remember here is that this is only what Brad THOUGHT, not what Brad SAID. That's a huge difference. His mind may fluctuate to all of these different things or conclusions, but it's not really fair to judge him for that. It's really only fair to judge him based on his conclusions, and what ultimately comes out of his mouth.
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Tim, you make an excellent point. I have largely tried to avoid having simultaneous narrators who are intimately interacting with each other, because I think that muddies the water, but it also does give you just one side of the story. On the other hand, it lets you imagine the other side, and play devil's advocate, and that can also be fun. I don't think that Wally and Clara come off as evil or mean. Will's comment about them comes to mind, when he said that he didn't like them, but he still thought they were nice people. And I don't think you have to imagine how Brad would have reacted; all you have to do is re-read Paternity. :-)
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Sometimes they are so difficult to keep track of.
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Maarten, Let go of the hate. It's not healthy. ;-) It made sense that Matt and Zach would talk, jock to jock, in a very direct way. It also made sense that Wade and Will would have a meeting of the minds.
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Thank you so much! This story has had a slower build to the drama than some of the others, but hopefully it will end up keeping you all on your toes.
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Settle down Jason. :-) I pondered your words, and for some reason, I find that both of these stories (Flux and Valiant) have a relatively long lead-in time...building up to events. That being said, Valiant is an entirely different beast, and the drama there is less soap-operaesque than Flux.
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You are an eternal optimist. We'll see how soon I can get the follow up written.
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Thanks. I think that George is also afraid of that, and that may be why this rankles him so badly.
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I'm glad you're happy George is back. I'll have to block some time to work on this story so I don't fall so hopelessly behind on my posting schedule. I would think that if it were just a simple fling, or even a more ardent affair, Caroline would have told George.
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September 10, 1799 Portland Place Granger stood in front of the mirror, studying the reflection that stared back at him, looking for any flaw. His blond hair was pomaded back in a very stiff and formal way that seemed foreign compared to his normally more relaxed style. He had to admit that there was an advantage to it, as it called attention to his face, with his smooth skin and bright blue eyes. Yet even his youthful visage showed the ravages of war. Above his eye was a
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I'm so glad I could help make your day a little brighter. You raise an interesting point about Wade. Even though I haven't written it in, we can assume that Wade is still meeting regularly with his therapist. I also think he started at a much more mature point after graduating. But I think Wade has some of his own epiphanies waiting.
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I think it's interesting that Matt is so logical with Zach. I haven't decided if that's because he's happy with Wade, or if it's because he's simply maturing. We'll see if Barry stays fired. I could see Wally and Clara keeping him around.
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Thanks Miles! I'm glad you liked this one. I think it was neat the way Matt knew just how to get through to Zach.
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Thanks for such a nice review! I actually did have a lot of fun with this chapter. It was fun dialog to write.
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I'm glad you did. This story is one where the drama builds slowly. Another 4 chapters and things pick up.
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Emancipation isn't easy, so that would be a tough go. In my country, Flag Day is this Sunday. :-)
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I think Zach is only recently discovering these dilemmas, because prior to that, he really had one overriding concern: football. But you're right, going to Europe is much smarter.
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I'll try to post the next chapter of Valiant tomorrow. Unfortunately, it's a cliffhanger, so I have to hurry and get the next chapter written.
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Thanks Kevin. This was one of my favorite lines from Stef: “Perhaps I will have to take my billions and buy some new relatives.”
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Thanks! I agree...I thought Matt did a really nice job with Zach. I think he understands him, and that's why he went for a run with Zach, to let him get some physical stimulation and calm down from the situation.
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This is probably exactly what Zach was talking about when he told Will that his parents didn't understand what it would take for him to make it to the show. I think it's unlikely that Zach will actually go forward with a guardianship change. I can't see him taking that step, unless they tried to cart him back to Ohio. Plus, I have to believe that posturing alone would have some impact on Wally and Clara, especially since Frank is in Zach's corner.
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July 11, 2002 Maui Matt “Fuck!” Zach yelled. He was in the kitchen, pacing back and forth like a caged lion. “Fuck!” “Good luck,” Wade said to me, shaking his head as he climbed the stairs to go talk to Will. Zach grabbed a glass and filled it with water, then took a drink. “Fuck!” he yelled again, and threw the glass onto the floor, shattering it, and sending water splattering all over the place. “Dude. No b
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I think that the big issue for Will is that a promise was made by both Zach and Barry. They made a commitment that Zach could go to Europe, and Will motivated JP to adjust his own schedule to accommodate them. Will understands quite clearly where he stands from a priority standpoint, but when there was a promise made, that's when he expects Zach to honor it, and to make room for Will in his life. It would be easy to discount that, and say that Will should understand, but I don't think, if I were in Will's position, I would be all that mellow about it either.
