A Fine Can of Worms - 1. Chapter 1

This was an inspired idea, combining two similar expressions together for a poem. It made me remember that some scholars believe Pandora's Box was actually originally a jar. It also reminded me of a time when my stepfather took me fishing and I dropped the can of live worms and they wriggled and jiggled all around and it was a right pain to get them back in. Your lively imagery is so vivid it brings back memories!

The poem's structure is unusual, but I think it works very well for it and the "less is more" approach you take is apt and well-done. I especially like the thought of emotions being their own living organisms that operate independently -- sometimes that's exactly what the can of worms or Pandora's Box is, out of control emotions. The evils escaping from the box like worms running away in the mud is a powerful and memorable image, thanks for writing it for us to see!

Short, sweet, and delivers the message. Good job Kit. I love your explanation of what happens when your curiosity gets the best of you, and the box is open. No going back! Loved it!

A deceptively simple piece: nicely worked. Thanks for sharing.

Lovely and well put together. I like the verse about ideas best, which can be hopeful and chaotic.

See Kitt, you were worried for nothing. It was a deceptively sweet poem. Once released it can't be contained again. Nicely done.

No kidding! That was rather unexpected, Kitt and special. Thank you for sharing that.

you know what i think. simple and clean, a lovely idea, well executed. proud of you

I like it, it is short sweet and quite noticeable. Just write what you feel is usually my advice. looks like you didn't need it!

LOVED IT!

who would have thought there were worms in that box!

As many here know I don't really get poetry, but I liked it.

On 09/19/2013 01:26 AM, Andy78 said:

As many here know I don't really get poetry, but I liked it.

Really loved the form of this poem. Well chosen words, too. Well done!

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On 09/24/2013 04:46 AM, Thorn Wilde said:

Really loved the form of this poem. Well chosen words, too. Well done!

Thank you! I had forgotten I had ever published this and to see a new review was a pleasant surprise.

On 07/07/2016 12:57 AM, Arazon said:

A fine piece of work, I reckon - it was easy to follow, good visual with the ‘idea running away’ and the build of emotions. Sure captured ‘Pandora’s box’ to me!

Oops, the reply meant for you ended up under Thorn! Thanks again.

Thorn, this one is for you!

Thank you! I took great care with my choice of words for this one. I am not really into poetry, and was convinced I would screw it up. We should also thank Wings for pushing me to publish it. I just wrote it down to shut that little voice up!

Not bad, Sis. Even though poems rarely do anything for me, I lik d this one. There's a terse mess to it I enjoyed. No wasted words.

Thanks Bro. I dont write often,  just when that damnable little voice starts nagging me. 

I liked this poem very much. So much was packed into so few words. 

38 minutes ago, Parker Owens said:

I liked this poem very much. So much was packed into so few words. 

Thanks Parker. 

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3 hours ago, Headstall said:

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