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  • 12/06/2015
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Quirky Poesy - 3. Eyes

Eyes

 

Eyes opened, joined it seems

unmistaken of what flows through.

I, then He realize.

 

He, then I recognize

neither can forestall this certain new

element in our dreams.

 

I, not He drown mid streams

of tears shed for fear become true.

He, not I closed our eyes.

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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
Note: While authors are asked to place warnings on their stories for some moderated content, everyone has different thresholds, and it is your responsibility as a reader to avoid stories or stop reading if something bothers you. 
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Lisa

Totally agree with Parker.

 

I was imagining the open eyes seeing love flow through them in the first stanza, but when I read the third stanza I felt sad. I took this stanza to mean that the narrator was crying because his fears of losing his love were coming true. It was very final, like death - the 'He' closed his eyes for the last time. Or, it could just mean that 'He' closed his eyes as a sort of rejection of the narrator, and that's why the narrator was crying, thinking his fears about losing 'He' came true.

 

Either way, the third stanza was very sad for me. :(

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On 12/07/2015 01:40 PM, Lisa said:

Totally agree with Parker.

 

I was imagining the open eyes seeing love flow through them in the first stanza, but when I read the third stanza I felt sad. I took this stanza to mean that the narrator was crying because his fears of losing his love were coming true. It was very final, like death - the 'He' closed his eyes for the last time. Or, it could just mean that 'He' closed his eyes as a sort of rejection of the narrator, and that's why the narrator was crying, thinking his fears about losing 'He' came true.

 

Either way, the third stanza was very sad for me. :(

Thanks for the comments Lisa!

 

sorry to leave you sad

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On 03/15/2016 10:21 AM, AC Benus said:

This is not a lengthy poem, and yet, it challenges. Perhaps you are painting with words the certain brand of uneasiness that comes when a relationship transitions from 'new' to the next stage.

 

If I am right, plz don't tell me :) I like 'challenges' in my poetry too.

Thanks AC!

 

I'll not say anything ...haha.

 

Even though I'm certainly no poet, I enjoyed writing this - for some strange reason.

 

I don't know if I was "painting" or "playing" with my words. Sorta like playing with my food. :)

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