Pieces and Fragments - 6. innocence lost

Whoa....

I'm left wondering whether it's just a normal childish tantrum, or something much darker is taking place. The references to yesterday and tomorrow make the piece more mysterious, as does the word unwanted...

It certainly speaks to me, anyway.

This poem has me recalling my own unhappy adolescence. You are not alone in the darkness. 

7 minutes ago, Parker Owens said:

This poem has me recalling my own unhappy adolescence. You are not alone in the darkness. 

I am sorry to hear that - yet comforted.  I hope that makes sense.

Sometimes a friendly voice is strengthening - even when it's too dark to see - just to hear.

31 minutes ago, Marty said:

Whoa....

 

I'm left wondering whether it's just a normal childish tantrum, or something much darker is taking place. The references to yesterday and tomorrow make the piece more mysterious, as does the word unwanted...

 

It certainly speaks to me, anyway.

 

Not a tantrum, certainly.  If it communicates - then it is a successful piece.  Art is typically "in the eye of the beholder" - I believe poetry is the same.  Thank you.

A very powerful poem. In the middel standing an observation, surrounded by a web of time aspects. A very artful crafting.

This poem is so bitter and sad, but the sadness is seen, witnessed and communicated, therefor there is a little bit of hope in the web as well.

10 minutes ago, Lyssa said:

A very powerful poem. In the middel standing an observation, surrounded by a web of time aspects. A very artful crafting.

This poem is so bitter and sad, but the sadness is seen, witnessed and communicated, therefor there is a little bit of hope in the web as well.

 

Thank you.  There is great release in sharing pain - just trying not to cause someone else pain makes it a bit trickier, I suppose.  I've noticed sometimes the darker the emotion, bhe more "craftful" the writing.  Not sure why ...

1 minute ago, MericCotton said:

 

Thank you.  There is great release in sharing pain - just trying not to cause someone else pain makes it a bit trickier, I suppose.  I've noticed sometimes the darker the emotion, bhe more "craftful" the writing.  Not sure why ...

 

I think, you are right. Trying to describe pain is in deed a bit trickier as you said and therefor it needs more craftfulness. Being exact can be important, not to make someone else suffer under the pain as well and furthermore the craftfulness also grants a little safe distance needed for one self sometimes. Maybe sharing happiness and joy is much easier and safer.

Thanks for sharing this poem.

Lyssa