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    A.J.
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Teach Me How - 1. Poem

When I lost you it hurt so bad.
The wound keeps reappearing,
Like a cut on my skin.
I try to make the pain just float away,
But it is trapped in my heart, forever to stay.

This wound, it grew, as you left my world,
Your loss left a hole too large to be filled.
My friends tell me to remember all the good times we had,
But frankly I ignore them, too angry, too bitter, too mad.

No matter how many days go by,
I still find myself stopping to cry.
In the car, on the street, and the places we used to meet.

I’m jealous of others who don’t feel this sadness,
Their days not filled with the pain and the madness.
Trust me that I loved you more than you'll ever know.
Someone please teach me how to let this hurt go?

Copyright © 2013 A.J.; All Rights Reserved.
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Mann Ramblings

This is especially poignant. You have done a lovely job of expressing your pain and I hope you find the answer to release it. It is obvious how deeply you feel the loss. It is equally obvious how much you needed to express it.

 

Thank you for sharing. :hug::kiss::hug:

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joann414

I could feel a lot of pain and sadness here A.J. You expressed your emotions very well and I know it hurt to write this. :kiss: YOu did a great job! :2thumbs:

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On 04/20/2013 12:40 AM, Mann Ramblings said:
This is especially poignant. You have done a lovely job of expressing your pain and I hope you find the answer to release it. It is obvious how deeply you feel the loss. It is equally obvious how much you needed to express it.

 

Thank you for sharing. :hug::kiss::hug:

Thanks for reading it and your review. Yes, I did need to let it out. :hug:
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On 04/20/2013 01:09 AM, joann414 said:
I could feel a lot of pain and sadness here A.J. You expressed your emotions very well and I know it hurt to write this. :kiss: YOu did a great job! :2thumbs:
Thanks for reading it and your review. It did hurt a lot to write this, but I'm glad I did. Maybe one day I will be able to share more about this, but I still can't. :)
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Fishwings

This was a very honest poem; I liked how well you translated your pain onto paper, and I liked the rhyming too. I hope writing it has helped you cope a little better. :hug:

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layla

Beautifully heartfelt. You express so much pain and sadness in your words AJ. Wonderfully written.

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comicfan

Loss is something we all deal with differently. Time will come when the pain isn't so sharp and the memories become more treasured then painful to re-examine. You showed the pain and the grief clearly here, AJ. I am sure this was more cathartic than you thought it would be. Beautifully crafted as well. :hug:

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W_L

I want to snuggle up to you and hug you so much after reading that. :)

 

Loss is hard to accept and move on

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Yettie One

I'm not sure the hurt ever really goes. I think we just learn to live with it.

Loss on that level is something we are never equipped to deal with, and when the time comes to try, everyone handles it differently. The only truth we all have to face up to, is that one day, we all have to face these feelings in some way.

Seeing another person hurting, or understanding that someone knows how bad you feel can be a place to start to feel again.

These are powerful emotions, words that hanker close and near for many of us, and for anyone that feels them, says them, or privately thinks them, :hug: may time grant you grace to deal and find peace.

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Krista

You ass.. you made me tear up.. :( Aww. Very tender poem. I can't believe you were worried about it. You did a good job. Sometimes it's hard to put such a feeling into words like that.

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Andy78

So much emotion expressed in so few words. A beautiful entry that must have hurt to write.

:hug:

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K.C.

It must be hard opening up with such a personal piece of your self. Thank you for sharing. It is so bittersweet. :hug:

(I ran of Likes far too soon reading all these great anthologiy stories at one time :( )

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On 04/21/2013 07:54 AM, K.C. said:
It must be hard opening up with such a personal piece of your self. Thank you for sharing. It is so bittersweet. :hug:

(I ran of Likes far too soon reading all these great anthologiy stories at one time :( )

Thanks KC for your review. Sharing it has helped me to release a little bit of the emotion surrounding this. :)
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On 04/21/2013 05:46 AM, Andy78 said:
So much emotion expressed in so few words. A beautiful entry that must have hurt to write.

:hug:

It did hurt to write it, but it also felt like a weight had been lifted off me that I could share this with all of you. Thanks for your review. :)
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On 04/20/2013 05:17 PM, Michael9344 said:
Clear. Interesting. Feels like my "To An Old Friend"... Great poem:)
Thanks, I wrote more but found that it didn't add to the piece and took it out. :)
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On 04/20/2013 12:00 PM, Krista said:
You ass.. you made me tear up.. :( Aww. Very tender poem. I can't believe you were worried about it. You did a good job. Sometimes it's hard to put such a feeling into words like that.
Awwww... I didn't mean to make anyone tear up. I think I've done enough of that. I still like your poem better. :P
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On 04/20/2013 09:12 AM, Yettie One said:
I'm not sure the hurt ever really goes. I think we just learn to live with it.

Loss on that level is something we are never equipped to deal with, and when the time comes to try, everyone handles it differently. The only truth we all have to face up to, is that one day, we all have to face these feelings in some way.

Seeing another person hurting, or understanding that someone knows how bad you feel can be a place to start to feel again.

These are powerful emotions, words that hanker close and near for many of us, and for anyone that feels them, says them, or privately thinks them, :hug: may time grant you grace to deal and find peace.

Yettie, you are right. Although I am not as upset as I once was, things still happen which make it all come back. Some little thing will remind me of him. :hug:
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On 04/20/2013 08:28 AM, W_L said:
I want to snuggle up to you and hug you so much after reading that. :)

 

Loss is hard to accept and move on

Thanks for your review. Yes, a puppy to snuggle might be nice. :D
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On 04/20/2013 04:44 AM, Luc Rosen said:
This was a very honest poem; I liked how well you translated your pain onto paper, and I liked the rhyming too. I hope writing it has helped you cope a little better. :hug:
Thanks for your review Fishie. I sort of have a rhyming problem. :/ I can't seem to write a poem without it. I think writing it did help. :)
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On 04/20/2013 06:29 AM, carringtonrj said:
Thank you for sharing this. I hope you feel that writing this has helped you in a small way.
Knowing people have read it seems to help. I'm not sure why. I think that and time has helped.
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On 04/20/2013 07:06 AM, layla said:
Beautifully heartfelt. You express so much pain and sadness in your words AJ. Wonderfully written.
Thanks Layla for your review. I appreciate your kind words about it. :)
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On 04/20/2013 07:42 AM, comicfan said:
Loss is something we all deal with differently. Time will come when the pain isn't so sharp and the memories become more treasured then painful to re-examine. You showed the pain and the grief clearly here, AJ. I am sure this was more cathartic than you thought it would be. Beautifully crafted as well. :hug:
Thanks for your review Wayne. I think this process helped me a lot including responding to reviews about it. :hug:
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asamvav111

The 3rd stanza took my breath away. Absolutely gorgeous composition! This is a prime example, how the most private emotions bring about the most creative pieces. I can not heal what brought about this pain and sadness, but I think it is a fitting memento to the deceased's memory. You should be proud of yourself. :hug:

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