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Keraunophobia

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For as long as he could remember, Austin was always terrified of storms.  After the death of his mother, the dominoes start falling and the reasons behind his fear start to come to light in a way he never expected. 

Warnings for some violence and a rape scene occurring in a dream.

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  • Addictive/Pacing 1
  • Characters 1
  • Cliffhanger 0
  • Smoldering 0
  • Tearjerker 0
  • Unique 1
  • World Building 0

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   1 of 1 member found this review helpful 1 / 1 member

As a freelance editor I found this a little bit (by design I'm sure) disjointed. The flashbacks are, of course, part of the whole story, but they can be distracting. I think this may be why, if you had a (hidden) counter to track how many readers left before finishing the story you might be surprised by the drop out rate. 

My initial advice would be to split the story up into 3-5 chapters, with cliffhangers. There are 'natural' spots were '...to be continued' would occur nicely, and the following chapter would fit neatly, like a hand in a glove. 

Overall I like the story and wanted to give it 4 1/2 stars.

Will be looking at more of your stories (especially as this C-19 spins out of control, because we're not "out of the woods" yet and I've not found a safe 'old oak tree'). :read:

Tony

Ps: Story name. Hmm, too coincidental? Astraphobia is better than the other 4+ clinical names which are tongue-twisters.

 

Response from the author:

Thank you for your review of Keraunophobia.   I appreciate the feedback.  As you said, this story was deliberately written in a manner that was disjointed and fragmented.  Breaking it up further into separate chapters (and waiting for them to be released) would have, in my opinion, made it harder to read, therefore I released it as a whole.  I appreciate that the style and length may be a turn off to some readers, so thank you for sticking with it and sharing your thoughts.  Thank you for the 4 star rating as well.

P.S.  I love that you brought up the story name.  Keraunophobia is interchangeable with astraphobia, brontophobia, and tonitrophobia.  The root of Keraunophobia, kerauno, stands for lightning, thunder or thunderbolt, as opposed to astra, which is lightning, or bronto and tonitro, which both refer to thunder.  Keraunophobia seemed like the most well rounded title for the piece.  (Though I really liked brontophobia because it makes me think of dinosaurs).:P

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