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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
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A Storm of Problems - 1. A Storm of Problems

A look at issues facing me personally and then looking outward at the problems of the world.

I watch them gather like dark storm clouds

Storm clouds of problems waiting to rain down

Rain down harshly stripping the land and laying things bare

Bare of all illusions I stand here alone.

 

Alone against the elements my life has forged

Forged both the good and the bad

The bad events seem to make it so much darker

Darker clouds bring a sense of violence

 

Violence, pain, and overwhelming despair whipped up like hurricane winds

Hurricane winds that flatten everything you love before them

Before them are the young tender shoots of spring

Spring that is supposed to bring a world of renewal

 

Renewal of pain, hurt and heart break to my life

Life tears at the walls built to protect me from the outside

The outside world darkens at the coming storm

Storm after storm seems rip across the landscape of my soul

 

My soul no longer sees the world as black or white, rainbows or rain

Rain falls tender at first like the tears of pain

Pain the likes of which I have never known surround on every side

Every side sees the darkness of a coming storm

 

A coming storm is headed toward me, and I cannot hide

Hide from how I feel about the things that are in my life

My life has seen the loss of love, friendship, and safety

Safety is something everyone should feel within their homes

 

Homes stand like solitary soldiers as the winds gather strength on the horizon

The horizon is full of choices yet to be made, a scary futures awaits

Awaits those who are brave enough to take the chances that are coming towards them

Towards them come both good and bad all over again, choices to be made

 

Made of light, made of darkness, the future is like the past

The past shows us where we have made our marks and our mistakes

Mistakes that cannot be allowed to dictate the future of our lives

Our lives are spent going from sun to storm and there is a storm coming.

So this was done in what is called end line poetry where the last word or words are used to begin the next line. Hopefully the idea I was trying to get out was successful. Thanks for reading. Comments are always welcomed.
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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
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carringtonrj

Funny, I didn't notice the technique until I read your note. I guess that's a testament to how natural you made it sound. A good experiment. A strong series of metaphors. Thanks for sharing.

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Aditus

Now I'm depressed, this is so sad. if I would drink I'd have a tall bourbon, but I think chocolate will do.

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Ashi

Nice. Love how the beginnings and ends of the sentence connect. Hope you have been made stronger with past experience.

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Bill W

I hadn't seen an end line poem before, but it worked very nicely. Good job!

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nostic

Wow, I've never seen something like this so it was new to me. (*hasn't read much poetry :( )

I liked the story but in the end I sorta felt like moving in a vicious circle.

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comicfan
On 05/02/2014 02:31 PM, nostic said:

Wow, I've never seen something like this so it was new to me. (*hasn't read much poetry :( )

I liked the story but in the end I sorta felt like moving in a vicious circle.

Well I did want to stay with the idea of the storm coming so I tried to work it that way. Glad you read it. Poetry isn't always a strong point for me.
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comicfan
On 05/02/2014 11:26 AM, Cole Matthews said:
Very well done and beautifully philosophical. Loved it! Thanks for sharing with us.
Thank you Cole.
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On 05/02/2014 09:19 AM, Bill W said:
I hadn't seen an end line poem before, but it worked very nicely. Good job!
Thank you Bill. It was something I learned about when I was trying to teach poetry in my English class years ago.
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On 05/02/2014 07:12 AM, Ashi said:
Nice. Love how the beginnings and ends of the sentence connect. Hope you have been made stronger with past experience.
It is one of those poems with more of me in than I would like to admit to.
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On 05/02/2014 07:03 AM, aditus said:
Now I'm depressed, this is so sad. if I would drink I'd have a tall bourbon, but I think chocolate will do.
Chocolate is always good Aditus. :hug:
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On 05/02/2014 05:59 AM, carringtonrj said:
Funny, I didn't notice the technique until I read your note. I guess that's a testament to how natural you made it sound. A good experiment. A strong series of metaphors. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you Carrington. Every once in a while I try to step out of my comfort zone. How well I do is another whole story.
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On 05/02/2014 05:36 AM, joann414 said:
You idea was very successful Wayne. What a descriptive piece. Great job :)
Thank you Joann. All one can do is commit to the piece and hope it comes out in the end. :hug:
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