My Poems, Satires & Other Lyrical Nonsense - 6. Little Hours

D.K.  You made me cry. I don’t think I have read anything more beautiful about those last days of life.  I have had too many people I know go through exactly what you wrote.  Time is ticking at this very moment on the life of a good friend. She was experiencing pain. When the discover what was causing the pain, it was too late to do anything other than try and relieve the pain.  Just like your line”the killer is eating away”. That is exactly what is happening. You are amazing. You insights are amazing.  I hope it is ok to share this, it is so well written. 

3 hours ago, OzLoGo said:

D.K.  You made me cry. I don’t think I have read anything more beautiful about those last days of life.  I have had too many people I know go through exactly what you wrote.  Time is ticking at this very moment on the life of a good friend. She was experiencing pain. When the discover what was causing the pain, it was too late to do anything other than try and relieve the pain.  Just like your line”the killer is eating away”. That is exactly what is happening. You are amazing. You insights are amazing.  I hope it is ok to share this, it is so well written. 

Thank you OzLoGo, I am sorry to hear about your friend. I suppose I am one of those people when another tells of a misfortune or sad point in there life I never now what to say. I reckon that is why I write, my mind is a noisy place. Although I have had an aunt pass on from cancer and all I recall from it, it was very peaceful. How the family came together and remained with her throughout the night, it is the feeling of time I wanted to get across. Understand the same experience is not the always the best knowledge in the world, but it is what is real that binds is and that is why I like to right of real people, with real problems. And yes you may share it

What a hauntingly beautiful and melancholy piece of literature. I’ve never seen these thoughts so meaningfully expressed before. Like so many others, I’ve lost a Loved one to a slow and lingering demise. I think I permanently lost a little of my own life in the process! 

57 minutes ago, SolarMaxx said:

What a hauntingly beautiful and melancholy piece of literature. I’ve never seen these thoughts so meaningfully expressed before. Like so many others, I’ve lost a Loved one to a slow and lingering demise. I think I permanently lost a little of my own life in the process! 

Thank you @Solarmaxx , I am glad that you were able to relate to the piece, even though through sad circumstances. The simplest emotions have more power than the complicated ones. I had this idea in my head for all but five minutes and decided to write it down, and finish it in all but 5 minutes. I found that not many authors on here, from what I have found so far have gone into great detail about death. For some reason, I have a tendency to stray for sad topics to write about, and they always seem to be the creations I am happiest with. To hear that I have made someone cry or them complimenting it for its depth is like falling in love all over again, letting your heart stray open anew. Every time I sit down to write and a little piece of myself changes unknown to myself because I have essentially become someone else.