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My Poetry Prompts - 3. Lyric 8-6-8-6 Rise & Shine!

It's still so dark. Can it be time?

No marimba chant yet.

Must be a little numbered hour.

Turn over. Sleep a while.

 

Absence of responding body.

Consciousness prods awake.

Move your ass! Put on the kettle!

Tea and new things call out.

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AC Benus

My friend, knowing of the still newness of your loss, this is a very touching poem.

But I suppose you are right, nothing better than getting up and on with the day; the kettle calls.

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On 11/05/2014 05:07 AM, AC Benus said:
My friend, knowing of the still newness of your loss, this is a very touching poem.

But I suppose you are right, nothing better than getting up and on with the day; the kettle calls.

Thanks, Al, for your kind comments and encouragement.
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Aditus

Every time I read 'Put on the kettle.' I have to smile. It's such a reassuring ritual, something simple people take solace from.

I really like your poem.

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On 11/05/2014 06:44 AM, aditus said:
Every time I read 'Put on the kettle.' I have to smile. It's such a reassuring ritual, something simple people take solace from.

I really like your poem.

Thank you so much!
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Lisa

I'm sorry, Jaro. I just read AC's comment. It makes your poem all the more touching.

 

And I can so relate to not hearing that marimba (or whatever it's called!), alarm!

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On 11/05/2014 06:47 AM, Lisa said:
I'm sorry, Jaro. I just read AC's comment. It makes your poem all the more touching.

 

And I can so relate to not hearing that marimba (or whatever it's called!), alarm!

Thanks so much, Lisa.
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Irritable1

Ignore my question if you wish, but is the responding body yours or another's? I was thinking of it as the disconnection and near-paralysis one feels in the early morning sometimes... I love the marimba reference and the unspecific optimism of "new things" !

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On 11/05/2014 07:48 AM, Irritable1 said:
Ignore my question if you wish, but is the responding body yours or another's? I was thinking of it as the disconnection and near-paralysis one feels in the early morning sometimes... I love the marimba reference and the unspecific optimism of "new things" !
Another's, but I like how you have interpreted it too. Thanks for the comments.
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On 11/05/2014 12:49 PM, joann414 said:
I can so relate to this and the kettle. Coffee tho, not tea:P
Yes, tea is very English! Lol! Thanks for commenting!
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On 11/05/2014 01:09 PM, Percy said:
"Little numbered hour" is a great phrase. Glad you posted this!
Thank you for your encouragement.
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Guest Arazon

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I can relate to this in a couple of ways. I particularly like the motivation at the end with 'new things to come'. Every day is worth getting up for...(and tea or coffee can sure help sometimes). Thanks for sharing this Jaro.

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On 06/17/2016 10:55 PM, Arazon said:

I can relate to this in a couple of ways. I particularly like the motivation at the end with 'new things to come'. Every day is worth getting up for...(and tea or coffee can sure help sometimes). Thanks for sharing this Jaro.

Thanks for reading and reviewing. I had almost forgotten these efforts and it was fun to read them again and especially all the encouraging reviews. So thanks, Arazon, for lighting that spark again.

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