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  • 05/01/2014
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Shadows on the Ocean - 1. Chapter 1

Shadows on the Ocean

 
 
Alone
Hiding under the covers
I dread the coming of morning
The golden rays to throw light on the walls
Reminding me I’m alone
The pillow and blanket mounds
Shaped in the night
‘Til one could almost pretend they were human
A lovers arms
Melt away in the dawn
The illusion torn
Showing nothing but the black and white cloth
The railway stitching
 
I shiver and lay there
Unwilling to move
Squeeze my eyes shut
For one more dream
Where I'm not here
with the sound of thunder in the distance
pounding to the beat of my heart
Where I'm somewhere far away
And strong arms hold me
Pull me close
Say “I'll never let you go" and "I won't let it get you"
 
It’s all a lie
Never becomes tomorrow
“I love you” becomes “so long”
What we had
In the light
Means nothing
Just another verse in a wordless song
And me drifting
Eternally
Held in place by this raging storm
copyright 2014 LaylaDorine
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carringtonrj

a thoughtful and intelligent poem, exploring emotions convincingly and imaginatively. thanks for sharing.

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Cole Matthews

So sad! That storm of emotions sounds frightening but after the storm comes...hope? Great job and thanks for sharing!

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Bill W

So sad. So depressing. To be alone with no hope of the situation changing. I felt every word.

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nostic

Ooh, don't feel so lonely, you can have my teddy and she'll never leave you when the light comes.

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Ashi

I really like how you used the words to express the the coming of love and gone. I feel a bit of personification is somewhere, but I couldn't quite pinpoint what, but beautiful imagery. It's a very good poem, Layla. :)

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comicfan

The imagery you use helps to make it clear how alone the persona in the poem is. Sad and very well done.

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