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Lines and Squiggles Resembling Poetry - 2. Tanka No. 1

Poetry Prompt 1

Cool air against skin

Beats sweat and miserable,

And yet I miss air

Could this be so substantial,

Be worth the price of the heat.

First ever Tanka. What do you think?
2014 R.L. Hunter; All Rights Reserved
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On 09/04/2014 09:03 AM, Irritable1 said:
Whee! I'm struggling with the meaning of the middle line, but the last two are really nicely balanced, Ron, very musical.
The poem is about summer and air-conditioning. The middle (3rd) line is about missing a real breeze as opposed to the manufactured one of the first two lines and followed by two lines of wondering if fresh air is important enough for the cost of the second line. Blame my aversion to heat with humidity for this.

 

Thank you for the compliment, Irri.

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On 09/07/2014 03:19 AM, Percy said:
I did guess a/c but I wasn't sure! I pictured myself as a kid in South Carolina on those days I wanted to lay on the shag carpet in the a/c, bored beyond belief, rather than go outside. Good job!
One of the greatest transitions from cold to heat and humidity that I've ever experienced, was when traveling from Ohio in February, to Miami and Florida during a heat spell. When the sliding glass doors from the airport slid open, I felt like I walked into a wall of moisture. It was stunning. I don't wish a lack of a/c on anyone living down south.

 

 

Thanks for reading, and the compliment, Percy.

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