Alright, this is my first GA story review in a while, I have my own set of review structure that is slightly different than Renee's outline for GA, but not incompatible.

Let's start with Cynus' Ashes of Fate

Ashes of Fate Episode 1, Season 1

Plot Summary: We meet Tristan the protagonist of this story with a mild amnesiac episode at the beginning of the chapter, where he does not recognize who he is and where he is. The chapter unfolds with Tristan recalling his life and references his two brothers, Zach and Corban, who care for him. There's certain revelations that are made at the end of the story that shocks and surprises Tristan. Was everything in his life a lie?

Review: Well, Cynus, I am quite pleased that some one else has taken up the mantle of doing a serial drama as I am preparing to do I also like the idea that you are writing about a post apocalyptic world with fantasy elements and an interesting build up of characters.

As this is the 1st episode, there's a lot of world building that needs to be done. You'll need to make sure that as much as you build your world, it is logically tied into the way the world develops around the plot. One area that is making me a little curious is that if the Wer alliance had firearms, does that mean they have industrial capabilities? Why would they settle for peace with humanity if they could wipe us out with weapons technology that we could no longer have ourselves?

I am assuming that the use of hatchets and bows/arrows are common weapons of the human rebels, which by in large are quite inferior in shots per econd potential to most standard rifles and semi-automatic weapons.

There are ways to make this work out though, you could claim that the Wer alliance are merely scavenging our old weapons with access to military arsenals in the US and abroad. This would limit their ability to use weapons and maintain a semi-balance of power and not make them far too powerful. Also, you could use the old "fifth" column trick that writers of the genre have done before, basically have sympathizers among the Wer Alliance soldiers and civilian population, who want to grant peace versus the more aggressive elements of their society.

Overall, it's a good start to a new story and I noticed that you have published episode 2 yesterday too, I am not sure how many episodes you are going to run, but it might be more advantageous to space out publication for readers over a long period of time to give them the opportunity to read all of your "episodes" for the 1st season. I am doing that too as part of my regular schedule that I posted earlier.

My rating for the 1st Episode:

:lugh: :lugh: out of 5