Within Myself

[Agaith]

This is my latest showing folks, personally Im not sure of this one but hey ho!

 

I don't believe you.

 

I hear words but I can't believe you

 

I see your compliment but I can't believe you

 

I see you laughing, is it at me?

 

I see you looking at me, what are you thinking?

 

I look down and know what hides beneath

 

I look down and see that which divides me

 

I look down, and breakdown

 

I look around, shut down

 

I look inward and retreat further.

 

Can you see me? Can you?

 

Do you think you can?

 

You see a shell, what I want you to see

 

I wear my false face, my blankness comforting.

 

I carry on, who am I?

 

Let me know what you think

 

 

Edited August 24, 2010 by Agaith

[Toast]

I think it is wonderful.

[jian_sierra]

I think it's great. I can't express myself well when it comes to poetry but I appreciate good poetry when I read one, and this one I like very much. Please write more and share it with us

[phana14]

You guys and gals are trying to turn me into a 'poet lover'. ahem! I meant to say "poem lover". heh

 

Agaith?

Did YOU really wonder how we would respond to "Within Myself"? Because if I had written this, I would have been strutting about with a smile on my face!

 

Oh yes! I really liked this one.

 

Just please don't ask me to break it down to "this did this and that did that" for me.

 

Thanks. And keep going, please?

[Nephylim]

I repeat what I said in my review

 

I really like this one. I empathise with that feeling... looking at someone and thinking.. why are you saying nice things to me, you can't mean them, you have to be mocking me, you can't see the real me that's hurt and hiding inside.... I wish you could. It's very touching very straightforward but subtle at the same time. nice work

[Circle]

I love this poem

[Agaith]

You guys and gals are trying to turn me into a 'poet lover'. ahem! I meant to say "poem lover". heh

 

Agaith?

Did YOU really wonder how we would respond to "Within Myself"? Because if I had written this, I would have been strutting about with a smile on my face!

 

Oh yes! I really liked this one.

 

Just please don't ask me to break it down to "this did this and that did that" for me.

 

Thanks. And keep going, please?

 

 

you are too kind Phana

 

 

thank you loads for the praise people

[Zeoanne]

I swear you were looking through my mirror when you wrote this.... Keep writing, you've done a great job at this bit.